音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more concise and correct small grammar issues (use singular/plural agreement and avoid repetition). Begin with a clear topic sentence then give one specific supporting detail. Use a linking phrase to connect reason.

範例: I prefer upbeat music because it quickly improves my mood. For example, when I feel stressed after exams, energetic pop songs help me relax and feel more positive.

建議: Avoid repeating the same idea from the previous answer; instead vary language and provide a specific example. Fix word choice (use 'blocked' or 'stuck' instead of 'obstructed') and use linking words for clarity.

範例: Yes, happy music often makes me feel more energetic and optimistic. For instance, after a long day of work when I feel stuck, I play upbeat songs to regain energy and motivation.

建議: Complete the sentence and avoid filler words ('umm'). Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you took classes, then give a brief specific detail or memory. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and correct grammar.

範例: Yes, I attended a music class when I was about six with my younger sister. The teacher taught simple children's songs, which I found a bit boring at the time, so I didn't continue lessons for long.

建議: Good clear answer and reason; make it slightly more concise and use one linking word instead of repeating 'so'. Provide a short specific example of when you listen to music.

範例: No, I usually avoid music while working because it distracts me and reduces my concentration. Instead, I listen to music after I finish studying—for example, I play mellow instrumental tracks to relax in the evening.

× I prefer listening to upbeat music because every time when I feel low or frustrated, they can boost my mood and they can cheer me up.

✓ I prefer listening to upbeat music because, whenever I feel low or frustrated, it can boost my mood and cheer me up.

The subject 'listening to upbeat music' is singular (a gerund phrase) or refers to 'music' generally (uncountable), so the verb should be singular ('it can') rather than plural ('they can'). Also 'every time when' is awkward; use 'whenever' for natural phrasing. Remove the repeated 'they' to avoid redundancy and use 'cheer me up' without 'can' the second time for concision.

× Yes, every time when I feel low or obstructed they can lift my mood instantly and cheer me up.

✓ Yes, whenever I feel low or stuck, it can lift my mood instantly and cheer me up.

'Obstructed' is incorrect in this context; use 'stuck'. The implied subject is 'happy music' or 'listening to music' (singular/uncountable), so use 'it can' rather than 'they can' to match subject-verb agreement. Replace 'every time when' with 'whenever' for naturalness.

× So I prefer listening to them after a long period of hard working or after I hear something sad.

✓ So I prefer listening to it after a long period of hard work or after I hear something sad.

'Hard working' is an adjective; the noun form 'hard work' is required. 'Them' incorrectly refers to 'music' (uncountable), so use 'it' or 'music.' Maintain present simple 'prefer' and correct noun usage.

× Umm I still remember that when I was really young, like around the age of 6, I attended a music class with my younger sister and the teacher taught her about some umm children's songs which were really amusing and I thought that was boring because I.

✓ I still remember that when I was really young, around the age of six, I attended a music class with my younger sister; the teacher taught her some children's songs, which were amusing, but I thought it was boring because I did not enjoy it.

Run-on and incomplete sentence: add punctuation and complete the thought. 'Children's songs' is plural, so use 'were amusing.' The phrase 'I thought that was boring because I.' is incomplete; complete it with 'I did not enjoy it.' Use 'six' in words for clarity and keep past tense consistently ('attended', 'taught', 'thought').

× No, I don't usually listen to music while I'm doing other things because I can get easily distracted by music so I can't focus on what I'm doing.

✓ No, I don't usually listen to music while I'm doing other things because I can get easily distracted by it, so I can't focus on what I'm doing.

Use 'distracted by it' rather than repeating 'music' for smoother reference to the same subject. Add a comma before 'so' to join independent clauses correctly. The rest of the sentence is present simple and appropriate.

× So I prefer to listen to them after I work or study because it's relaxing.

✓ So I prefer to listen to it after I work or study because it's relaxing.

'Music' as a concept is uncountable and should be referred to with 'it' rather than 'them.' Subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference require 'it.' The tense and structure are otherwise correct.