音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は明確で自然ですが、発言がやや冗長で繰り返しがあります。主題文をもっと簡潔にし、具体的な理由や例を一つ加えると良いでしょう。接続詞を使って文を整理し、語彙の幅を少し広げてください。例えば“cheer up”や“motivated”の他に“uplifted”“energised”“upbeat”などを使うと印象が良くなります。

範例: I prefer happy, upbeat music because it energises me during exercise. For example, when I go for a run I play fast-tempo pop songs that keep my pace steady and lift my mood.

建議: 肯定は明確ですが、繰り返しと口語的な「uh」「um」が多いので減らしましょう。理由を一つ具体的に述べ、接続語（because, so, therefore）で流れを整えると評価が上がります。また感情の度合いや具体的な反応（e.g. increased heart rate, improved focus）を述べると良いです。

範例: Yes, it definitely does because upbeat songs increase my energy and motivation; as a result I run faster and feel more focused during workouts.

建議: 答えは情報を含んでいますが、言い回しが不自然で繰り返しがあります（“I still play, enjoying it” と “I still enjoy playing in it”）。一文目で直接に答え、次に短く背景と現在の状況を具体的に述べてください。また“told me how to play”は“taught me”に直すと自然です。

範例: No, I haven't had formal lessons, but my mother taught me to play the piano when I was a child, and I still practise occasionally for enjoyment.

建議: 良い構成ですが表現の繰り返しが目立ちます（“I listen that kind of music”を何度も使用）。理由や対比をもっと具体的に説明しましょう。Studyの理由を具体化（e.g. to concentrate or to avoid distraction）するとより説得力が増します。接続語（however, whereas）を使うと流れが良くなります。

範例: It depends: when I work out I listen to upbeat music because it motivates me, whereas when I study I prefer silence to concentrate and avoid distractions.

× I definitely prefer happy music, it helped me cheer up when I exercise or workout and feel motivated.

✓ I definitely prefer happy music; it helps me cheer up when I exercise or work out and feel motivated.

The sentence mixes present tense 'prefer' with past tense 'helped'. Use present simple 'helps' to match habitual action. Also 'workout' used as noun; use verb phrase 'work out'. Suggestion: keep consistent present tense for routines: 'it helps me cheer up when I exercise or work out.'

× And actually I always listen to such music, that kind of music, when I run or workout.

✓ And actually I always listen to that kind of music when I run or work out.

Redundant phrasing 'such music, that kind of music' should be simplified. Use 'that kind of music'. 'Workout' should be 'work out' as the verb phrase. Maintain present simple for habitual action.

× As I said, uh, happy music makes me happy and energized, so I always listen to that kind of music while I work out.

✓ As I said, happy music makes me happy and energized, so I always listen to that kind of music while I work out.

Original is acceptable; removed filler 'uh'. No tense change needed. Keep present simple for general truths and habits.

× Actually, no, I haven't. I haven't had any formal classes, but my mother told me how to play the piano when I was a child and I still play, enjoying it.

✓ Actually, no, I haven't. I haven't had any formal classes, but my mother taught me how to play the piano when I was a child and I still play it for enjoyment.

Use 'taught' (past simple) rather than 'told' when describing instruction in the past. 'Enjoying it' is a fragment; change to 'play it for enjoyment' or 'and I still enjoy playing.' Maintain past tense for the teaching event and present tense for current habit.

× I still enjoy playing in it, uh, from time to time.

✓ I still enjoy playing it from time to time.

Phrase 'playing in it' is incorrect here; use 'playing it' to refer to the piano. Remove filler 'uh'. 'From time to time' correctly expresses occasional action.

× Ah, it depends on the occasion. Uh, for example, when I workout, I listen that kind of music.

✓ Ah, it depends on the occasion. For example, when I work out, I listen to that kind of music.

Use 'work out' as verb. Also need the preposition 'to' after 'listen' when indicating what is being listened to: 'listen to that kind of music.'

× I listen to that kind of music because it helps me feel motivated.

✓ I listen to that kind of music because it helps me feel motivated.

Sentence is grammatically correct; present simple appropriately expresses habitual reason. No change needed.

× And when I study, I don't, uh, listen to any music because I want to focus on something.

✓ And when I study, I don't listen to any music because I want to focus on my work.

Remove filler 'uh'. 'Focus on something' is vague; say 'focus on my work' or 'focus on what I'm studying.' Present simple correctly describes habitual behavior.