音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời cần ngắn gọn, tự nhiên và ngữ pháp chính xác hơn. Tránh lặp từ và các cụm không rõ nghĩa như “the world behind” hay “I've been too here with my examination”. Nên mở đầu trực tiếp (I prefer...), đưa lý do rõ ràng (relaxation, mood boost) và một ví dụ cụ thể. Giữ tối đa 4-5 câu và dùng liên từ đơn giản để liên kết.

範例: I prefer happy music because it helps me relax and lift my mood. For example, before exams I listen to upbeat songs to reduce stress and stay positive. This makes it easier for me to concentrate on studying afterwards.

建議: Cần sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (it has, not it's have) và tránh những cụm vô nghĩa như “participate in Dijon” hay “dream joy to live for the world”. Trả lời trực tiếp, nêu lý do cụ thể về giai điệu/nhịp điệu/ca từ, và nếu có thể đưa một kết quả cụ thể (ví dụ: nhảy, hát theo). Dùng liên từ đơn giản để mạch lạc.

範例: Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because it often has an upbeat rhythm and catchy lyrics. As a result, I usually sing along or move to the beat, which boosts my energy and makes me feel happier.

建議: Cần câu trả lời rõ ràng và ngữ pháp đúng (I haven't taken, I taught myself). Tránh tiếng lòng lộn và lặp từ. Nên nói trực tiếp bạn tự học, nêu thời gian bắt đầu, cách học (video, sách) và lợi ích cụ thể. Giữ 2–4 câu mạch lạc.

範例: I haven't taken formal music classes, but I taught myself to play the guitar at home. I started learning last year using online tutorials and practice every day, which helped me improve my chords and strumming patterns.

建議: Sửa ngữ pháp (I often listen, every day, when I do light exercise) và rõ ý hơn (nêu hoạt động cụ thể: studying, exercising, commuting). Tránh câu mơ hồ như “doing heart exercise”. Nên giải thích lợi ích cụ thể và tần suất. Giữ câu ngắn gọn và tự nhiên.

範例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other activities, such as studying or exercising. I usually play soft instrumental music when I study and upbeat songs when I work out because it reduces stress and keeps me motivated.

× From my perspective, I prefer to listening happy music because it's the best way for me to take it easy before the worry of the world behind and I can realize why I've been too here with my examination.

✓ From my perspective, I prefer listening to happy music because it's the best way for me to relax before the worries of the world and I can understand why I've been so anxious about my examination.

Error: incorrect verb pattern 'prefer to listening' should be 'prefer listening to' or 'prefer to listen to'. Also fixed preposition 'to' after 'listening', pluralized 'worry' to 'worries', replaced informal 'take it easy before the worry of the world behind' with 'relax before the worries of the world', corrected 'too here' to 'so anxious', and 'with my examination' to 'about my examination' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'prefer + -ing' or 'prefer + to + base verb' and check prepositions and adjective use for describing feelings.

× To be honest, happy music makes me feel more excited because it's have funny melody and great lyrics.

✓ To be honest, happy music makes me feel more excited because it has a catchy melody and great lyrics.

Error: 'it's have' is incorrect present tense; use 'it has'. Also 'funny melody' is unnatural; 'catchy melody' suits music. Suggestion: For third-person singular subjects use 'has' for possession; choose collocations common in English (e.g., 'catchy melody').

× So I can participate in Dijon to enjoy the dream joy to live for the world of the world behind and take it easy.

✓ So I can join in enjoying the joyful dream of life and forget the troubles of the world for a while to relax.

Error: sentence is unclear and contains incorrect phrases ('participate in Dijon', 'dream joy to live for the world of the world behind'). Suggestion: Reconstruct sentences to express intended meaning: use 'join in enjoying' or 'enjoy', 'forget the troubles of the world', and 'relax'. Keep clauses coherent and use correct verbs.

× MMM in my perspective, I haven't take any music classes, but I learn, I learn guitar by myself at home.

✓ Well, from my perspective, I haven't taken any music classes, but I learned to play the guitar by myself at home.

Error: 'haven't take' should be present perfect 'haven't taken'. Also 'I learn, I learn guitar' is wrong tense and repetition; use 'I learned to play the guitar' or 'I have learned to play the guitar'. Suggestion: Use present perfect for experiences up to now ('have/has + past participle') and use 'learn to do' or 'learned to play' for acquiring skills.

× Umm, it's a great experience because I I can experience by new knowledge about the guitar by myself and.

✓ Umm, it was a great experience because I gained new knowledge about the guitar by myself.

Error: awkward use of 'experience' and incorrect 'I I can experience by new knowledge'; also tense mismatch. Suggestion: Use 'it was a great experience' if referring to past learning, and use verbs like 'gained' or 'learned' with 'new knowledge' or 'new skills'. Remove filler repetitions.

× To be honest, I am a big fan of music so I often listening to music while doing other things and I do it every days because it helps me reduce stress and make me become more comfortable when we doing heart exercise.

✓ To be honest, I am a big fan of music so I often listen to music while doing other things and I do it every day because it helps me reduce stress and makes me feel more comfortable when I do cardiovascular exercise.

Errors: 'often listening' should be 'often listen' (use base verb after adverb); 'every days' should be 'every day'; 'make me become more comfortable' is awkward—use 'makes me feel more comfortable'; 'we doing heart exercise' incorrect pronoun and phrase—use 'I do cardiovascular exercise'. Suggestion: Use adverb + base verb ('often listen'), 'every day' as time expression, subject-verb agreement, and correct vocabulary for exercises.