音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct small grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm), use plural/singular correctly (sad songs), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add one specific example to make it more vivid.

範例: It depends on my mood: when I’m feeling down I tend to listen to sad songs, while when I’m cheerful I prefer upbeat music. For example, after a stressful exam I listened to a slow piano piece to calm down, but at a party I chose energetic pop to lift my spirits.

建議: Give a direct answer first and then give two concise supporting points using linking words. Remove hesitations (uh, umm) and use precise vocabulary (depends on the performer or genre). Provide a concrete example of when it did or didn’t work.

範例: Yes, happy music often makes me more excited, but it depends on my current energy level. For instance, energetic electronic tracks really boosted my mood during workouts, whereas when I was exhausted after a long flight, even upbeat songs felt ineffective.

建議: Correct minor grammar (piano lessons, helped me appreciate different genres, was also a fun way). Keep answers natural and concise: one topic sentence, one or two supporting details, and a brief example or result. Avoid repetition (different different).

範例: Yes, I have. As a child I took weekly piano lessons and later joined my school’s music club, which helped me appreciate various genres and develop teamwork skills. For example, performing in the club’s concert improved my confidence.

建議: Be succinct and avoid awkward phrasing (I had to say). Use present simple (it helps), reduce repetition (boring things, boring chores). Add a specific example of a playlist or genre for each activity to show range and specificity.

範例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other tasks. For studying I prefer instrumental playlists because they help me concentrate, while upbeat pop motivates me during exercise and makes chores like cleaning more enjoyable.

× Honestly it depends on my mood.

✓ Honestly, it depends on my mood.

Missing comma after introductory adverb 'Honestly' is punctuation rather than tense, but sentence uses present tense correctly. The correction adds the comma for natural written English; no tense change needed.

× When I'm feeling down umm I usually listen to sad song, but when I'm feeling cheerful or happy I usually go for happy music.

✓ When I'm feeling down, I usually listen to sad songs, but when I'm feeling cheerful or happy I usually choose happy music.

The noun 'song' is singular while the speaker implies a general habit, so it should be plural 'songs'. Also 'go for' is acceptable but 'choose' is more natural here. Added commas and removed filler 'umm' for clarity.

× I think music is the right way to express or match my emotions and sometimes I even start a sad music and dance with something happier.

✓ I think music is the right way to express or match my emotions, and sometimes I even start with sad music and dance to something happier.

'Start a sad music' is incorrect: use 'start with sad music' or 'play sad music'. Also 'dance with something happier' is awkward; use 'dance to something happier' to indicate moving to a happier song. Added comma before conjunction for clarity.

× Well, sometimes happy music makes me feel more excited, but if really, uh, depends on my mood.

✓ Well, sometimes happy music makes me feel more excited, but it really depends on my mood.

The phrase was missing the subject 'it' and had awkward filler placement. Adding 'it' fixes sentence structure and maintains present tense.

× When I'm already feeling down, tired or exhausted, even the happiest song might not do much for me.

✓ When I'm already feeling down, tired, or exhausted, even the happiest songs might not do much for me.

Plural 'songs' is more natural when speaking generally. Tense is present and correct; change improves agreement with general reference.

× Also, the effect can depend on umm, the artist, the singer or the style of song.

✓ Also, the effect can depend on the artist, the singer, or the style of the song.

Added definite article 'the' before 'artist' is optional but makes the list parallel; 'style of song' is better as 'style of the song' or 'song style'. Removed filler 'umm' for clarity.

× Yes, I have taken music classes before.

✓ Yes, I have taken music classes before.

This sentence is already grammatically correct in present perfect tense; no change needed.

× When I was a child I had piano lesson every week and later on I joined the music club at school.

✓ When I was a child, I had piano lessons every week and later I joined the music club at school.

Plural 'lessons' needed for habitual past action; added comma after introductory clause. 'Later on' can be shortened to 'later' for smoother flow; both are acceptable.

× It really helped me appreciate different different genres of music and it also the fun way to make friends.

✓ It really helped me appreciate different genres of music, and it was also a fun way to make friends.

Duplicate word 'different different' is an error; remove repetition. The clause 'it also the fun way' is missing the verb 'was' and the indefinite article 'a' before 'fun way'. Added comma for coordination.

× Do you listen to music while doing other things?

✓ Do you listen to music while doing other things?

Question is grammatically correct in present simple; no change needed.

× Yes, I had to say that I listen to music quite often while doing all the things.

✓ Yes, I have to say that I listen to music quite often while doing many things.

'Had to say' suggests past obligation; 'have to say' fits the present context. 'All the things' is unnatural; 'many things' or 'various things' is better. Maintains present tense.

× For example, I usually play music while studying and exercising because it's helped me concentrate and lift my mood.

✓ For example, I usually play music while studying and exercising because it helps me concentrate and lifts my mood.

The clause used present perfect 'it's helped' which conflicts with habitual present 'I usually'. Use simple present 'it helps' and 'lifts' to describe general effects.

× It also makes boring things, boring chores like cleaning or cooking much more enjoyable.

✓ It also makes boring things, such as chores like cleaning or cooking, much more enjoyable.

Sentence had punctuation and modifier placement issues. Inserted 'such as' to introduce examples and commas to set off the phrase. This clarifies that 'chores like cleaning or cooking' are examples of boring things.