音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference (or that you like both), then give one or two specific, linked reasons with varied vocabulary and correct grammar. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

範例: I enjoy both sad and happy music. Sad songs relax me because their slow melodies help me unwind, while upbeat tracks energize me and motivate me to be productive.

建議: Correct grammar and avoid redundancy. Use linking words and a specific detail about why the music excites you (e.g., rhythm, tempo, instruments). Keep it to 1–2 concise sentences.

範例: Yes, it does. Happy music usually has fast tempos and catchy rhythms that lift my mood and make me feel more energetic and ready to move.

建議: Give a clearer, grammatical response and add one specific detail about what you learned. Avoid filler words and repetition. Use one topic sentence and one supporting detail with a linking word.

範例: Yes, I have. I attend music classes at school, where I learned proper singing techniques such as breath control and pitch accuracy.

建議: Be careful with verb agreement and reduce repetition. Provide a concise topic sentence and one specific reason with linking words. Mention a brief example of how music helps you.

範例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing housework, studying, or drawing because it motivates me and helps me focus, so I usually finish tasks more quickly.

× I like both because sad music often brings me a very calm calm feeling, while happy music makes me feel like energetic that energetic and want to do many things at a time at once.

✓ I like both because sad music often brings me a very calm feeling, while happy music makes me feel energetic and want to do many things at once.

The student repeated words ('calm calm', 'that energetic') and used 'like' incorrectly before the adjective 'energetic'. Remove the duplicate words, delete the unnecessary 'like' and 'that', and use 'at once' not 'at a time at once'. This improves adjective/adverb use and idiomatic phrasing. Suggestion: Read the sentence slowly to spot repeated words and avoid using 'like' directly before adjectives when stating a feeling. Use 'feel + adjective' (feel energetic).

× Yes, it does, because happy music often enclosed very catchy beats which always makes me make me feel very energetic.

✓ Yes, it does, because happy music often includes very catchy beats which always make me feel very energetic.

Two issues: 'enclosed' is the wrong verb; the correct verb is 'include'. Also there is a duplicated phrase 'makes me make me' and subject-verb agreement: 'beats ... make' (plural subject). Correct placement and form: 'which always make me feel very energetic.' Suggestion: Use 'include' for containing elements, avoid duplicate phrases, and ensure the verb agrees with the plural noun 'beats'.

× Yes I have. I always attend music classes at school and I always learn how to like sing a song correctly.

✓ Yes, I have. I always attend music classes at school and I always learn how to sing a song correctly.

The phrase 'learn how to like sing' incorrectly inserts 'like' before the verb 'sing'. Remove 'like' to form the correct infinitive 'learn how to sing'. Also add commas after 'Yes' for natural spoken punctuation. Suggestion: Use 'learn how to + base verb' for expressing skill acquisition.

× Well, of course I do. I always listen to music when I do housework or do my homework or even when I'm drawing, because music make me feel very motivated and encourages me to do to finish things faster.

✓ Well, of course I do. I always listen to music when I do housework or my homework or even when I'm drawing, because music makes me feel very motivated and encourages me to finish things faster.

Problems: unnecessary repetition 'do my homework' -> 'my homework' is sufficient; 'music make me' incorrect subject-verb agreement and missing 's' on 'makes'; extra 'to' in 'to do to finish' is redundant. Correct preposition/phrase use and verb agreement: 'music makes me... encourages me to finish'. Suggestion: Keep parallel structures ('do housework or my homework'), ensure subject-verb agreement with singular 'music' ('makes'), and avoid extra filler words like an extra 'to'.