音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Keep your answer concise and more structured. Start with a clear topic sentence (I like both), then give one or two specific reasons with brief supporting details. Avoid filler phrases and repetition, and use linking words (for example, however, also) to make your response coherent. Use precise vocabulary (classical instead of classic; melodies or instrumental music instead of melody music).

範例: I like both sad and happy music. For example, when I'm feeling down I listen to sad songs because they help me process my emotions and feel understood. On the other hand, when I want energy and motivation, I play upbeat pop music to lift my mood. I also listen to classical instrumental pieces when I need calm and concentration.

建議: Provide a direct answer first, then give one clear reason and a specific example. Avoid repeating the same idea and use linking words such as because or for example to connect ideas. Vary vocabulary (energized, uplifted, cheerful) to show range. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, it usually makes me feel more excited because the fast tempo and upbeat lyrics boost my energy. For example, when I study or exercise I play upbeat pop songs and I immediately feel more motivated and cheerful.

× when I am happily like really excited and energetic that I'm I'll be like Oh my God, let's listen to happy music.

✓ when I am happy, like really excited and energetic, I'll be like 'Oh my God, let's listen to happy music.'

The adverb 'happily' is incorrectly used where the adjective 'happy' is required to describe the subject's state. Also remove redundant words 'that' and duplicate auxiliary 'I'm I'll'. Suggestion: use the adjective form after 'I am' and simplify the clause to 'when I am happy' and avoid repeating auxiliaries.

× That's how it works to me.

✓ That's how it works for me.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect in this idiomatic expression; 'for me' correctly expresses personal perspective. Use 'works for me' to indicate suitability or typical pattern.

× And especially if I want to listen to calm music, I'll go for classic and melody music type so it makes me feel peace.

✓ And especially if I want to listen to calm music, I'll choose classical and melodic music because it makes me feel peaceful.

'Classic' (noun) should be the adjective 'classical' to modify 'music'; 'melody music type' is awkward—use 'melodic music'. 'Feel peace' should be 'feel peaceful' (adjective) to describe the subject's experience. Also replace 'go for' with 'choose' for clarity and use 'because' for cause.

× Yes, of course it does make me feel excited, more excited when I listen to happy music and.

✓ Yes, of course it makes me feel more excited when I listen to happy music.

The auxiliary 'does' is unnecessary and causes awkward emphasis; simple present 'makes' is correct for general truth. Remove the trailing 'and.' Also place 'more excited' together following 'feel'.

× It makes me feel energetic and when I'm depressed, sometimes I listen to happy music.

✓ It makes me feel energetic, and when I'm depressed, I sometimes listen to happy music.

This sentence mostly correct but needs better adverb placement: 'sometimes' should be placed before the verb 'listen' or after the subject for natural word order. Add a comma for clarity between clauses.

× It will make me feel more happy and joyful.

✓ It makes me feel happier and more joyful.

Using 'will' is unnecessary because the speaker refers to a general or habitual effect; use simple present 'makes'. Also use the comparative adjective 'happier' rather than 'more happy' for natural phrasing and order 'happier and more joyful'.