音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid filler words. Add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. For example, replace “It is a interesting question” with a direct answer: “I prefer happy music.” Correct verbs and word forms (energetic or energize → energize → makes me feel energetic).

範例: I prefer happy music because it makes me feel energetic and confident. For example, when I work out, upbeat songs boost my motivation and help me keep going.

建議: Answer directly, use complete sentences, and link ideas clearly. Correct grammar (e.g., “Absolutely, it makes me happy”); use specific vocabulary (“anime music” if that’s meant). Use linking words like “for example” or “however” to contrast happy and calming music. Keep it to no more than five sentences.

範例: Absolutely — it makes me feel excited, especially before I go to work. For example, I often listen to upbeat anime music because it motivates me and improves my focus; however, I usually switch to calming music in the evening to relax.

× It is a interesting question.

✓ It is an interesting question.

The indefinite article 'a' should be 'an' before a word starting with a vowel sound like 'interesting'. Use 'an' to make pronunciation smoother: 'an interesting'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 22

× Uh, I choose happy music because it makes me energize and confident, especially when I do a workout.

✓ Uh, I choose happy music because it makes me energized and confident, especially when I work out.

The verb 'energize' is incorrect here; the passive/adjective form 'energized' describes a feeling. Also 'do a workout' is correct but 'work out' is the more natural phrasal verb. Use 'energized' and 'confident' to describe states: 'makes me energized and confident' and 'work out' instead of 'do a workout'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 10

× Absolutely makes me happy, especially before I go to work.

✓ Absolutely; it makes me happy, especially before I go to work.

The sentence lacks an explicit subject and finite verb in the clause. Insert 'it' as the subject and a verb 'makes' is already present but needs a subject: 'it makes me happy'. Adding a pause or connector improves clarity. This fixes a sentence fragment/structure problem. Grammar Problem Type ID: 6

× I always play happy music such as animusic music which motivate me to become more productive.

✓ I always play happy music, such as anime music, which motivates me to become more productive.

There are two issues: 'animusic' seems incorrect; likely 'anime' or 'energetic'—I assumed 'anime music'. The relative clause needs subject-verb agreement: 'which' refers to 'happy music' (singular), so the verb should be 'motivates' not 'motivate'. Also add a comma before 'such as' and after the example for clarity. Grammar Problem Type ID: 27

× Uh, besides of that, I also love calming music after.

✓ Uh, besides that, I also like calming music afterward.

The correct phrase is 'besides that' or 'apart from that', not 'besides of that'. Also 'after' as an adverb here is awkward; 'afterward' or 'afterwards' is more natural. 'Like' is more idiomatic than 'love' if contrasting preference, but 'love' is acceptable; I changed to 'like' to match conversational tone. Use 'besides that' and 'afterward' for correct preposition/adverb usage. Grammar Problem Type ID: 11