音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with brief examples. Avoid repetition (don’t repeat ‘happy’ or similar ideas many times) and use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'because' and 'so'). Also vary vocabulary (e.g. 'uplifting', 'cheerful', 'comforting') and keep to no more than 4–5 sentences.

範例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me relax. For example, upbeat songs make me feel energetic and often encourage me to dance. Because of that, I usually choose cheerful or uplifting tracks when I want to unwind.

建議: Answer directly and add one clear supporting detail with a linking word. Reduce fillers and repetitive words (avoid 'so so', 'more happy'). Use precise language to describe emotions and the situation (e.g. 'energised', 'nostalgic'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

範例: Yes, happy music definitely energises me; for example, when I hear one of my favourite upbeat songs I usually start dancing. As a result, I feel more energetic and nostalgic because it reminds me of good times.

× I will choose happy music always because it makes me relaxed, relieved and also at peace.

✓ I always choose happy music because it makes me relaxed, relieved, and at peace.

The original uses 'I will choose' (future) but the context expresses a general preference; the simple present is appropriate. Also adverb placement: 'always' normally goes before the main verb. Use commas in a list.

× I prefer to listen to a music that makes me feel good than one that will give me bad memories.

✓ I prefer to listen to music that makes me feel good rather than music that gives me bad memories.

'Music' is an uncountable noun and should not take the indefinite article 'a'. Use 'rather than' for comparisons and match the forms: 'music that gives' (simple present) describes a habitual or general effect.

× Yes, definitely happy music makes me more happy.

✓ Yes, definitely happy music makes me happier.

Comparative form is required: 'more happy' is less natural than the comparative adjective 'happier'. Also 'makes me happier' is the correct construction.

× For example, when I listen to my one of my favorite music, I tend to dance.

✓ For example, when I listen to one of my favorite songs, I tend to dance.

Redundant and incorrect pronoun phrase 'my one of my' should be 'one of my'. Also 'music' is uncountable; use 'song' for a specific item. Keep 'one of my favorite songs' as the correct expression.

× And while I dance, it brings good memories, fresh memories.

✓ And while I dance, it brings back good, fresh memories.

Verb phrase 'brings back' is more idiomatic when referring to memories. Combine adjectives with a comma and place them before 'memories'.

× It makes me feel so so relieved.

✓ It makes me feel so relieved.

Repeating 'so' is informal and redundant. Use a single 'so' or a stronger adverb if needed (for example, 'very' or 'extremely').