音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more natural, concise, and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrasing (e.g., "give me an energy" → "energize me"; remove duplicate words). Also name the artist more naturally ("songs by Justin Bieber"), and keep the answer to no more than five sentences.

範例: I usually prefer happy music because it energizes me. For example, I often listen to upbeat pop songs by Justin Bieber when I need a boost. These songs have a strong beat and cheerful melodies, which help lift my mood.

建議: Answer directly, correct grammar and use linking words to show sequence or reason. Combine ideas into a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting sentences. Correct verbs and phrasing ("make me feel relaxed" or "energize me to study"); remove fillers like "uh." Be specific about how and when you use music, and keep it within five sentences.

範例: Yes, happy music both relaxes and energizes me, so it helps me focus when I study. For instance, I usually turn on upbeat pop songs by Justin Bieber before starting a study session because the rhythm helps me concentrate and keeps me motivated.

× Well I usually prefer happy music, especially happy music can give me an energy like like a beat song of US UK from Justin Bieber.

✓ Well, I usually prefer happy music, especially because happy music can give me energy, like upbeat songs from the US or the UK by Justin Bieber.

The original sentence has several present tense and sentence structure problems: 'can give me an energy' is awkward (article and uncountable noun issues) and 'like like a beat song of US UK from Justin Bieber' is ungrammatical. Use present simple consistently: 'can give me energy' (no article with uncountable 'energy') and 'like upbeat songs from the US or the UK by Justin Bieber' clarifies meaning and corrects word order. Suggestion: keep verbs in present simple for habitual preferences and use natural noun phrases (uncountable 'energy', 'upbeat songs', include articles 'the US'/'the UK').

× So I really like happy.

✓ So I really like happy songs.

The original sentence uses the adjective 'happy' alone where a noun or noun phrase is needed. In context the student means 'happy songs.' Replace the adjective with the noun phrase 'happy songs' to make the sentence complete and grammatical. Suggestion: when referring to a category, use a noun or noun phrase (e.g., 'happy songs' rather than just 'happy').

× Yes, I really enjoy happy music because it make me so relax and give me energy to studying or working.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy happy music because it makes me so relaxed and gives me energy for studying or working.

Subject-verb agreement and tense form errors: 'it make' should be 'it makes' (third person singular). 'so relax' needs past participle/adjective 'relaxed.' 'give me energy to studying' is incorrect: use 'gives me energy for studying' or 'to study.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement with third person singular (add -s), use 'relaxed' to describe the feeling, and choose the correct preposition or infinitive ('for studying' or 'to study').

× Before I studying I start studying I always uh turn on music.

✓ Before I start studying, I always turn on music.

The sentence has incorrect verb forms and word order: 'Before I studying I start studying' uses a gerund where the base form is needed and repeats the verb. Use 'Before I start studying' (present simple for habitual action) and place the adverb 'always' before the verb 'turn on.' Suggestion: for habitual routines, use present simple (I start, I always turn on) and avoid repeating verbs. Note: punctuation and filler words (uh) were removed for clarity.

× Uh happy LA by artist Justin Bieber.

✓ Uh, 'Happy' by Justin Bieber.

The original fragment misuses 'LA' and 'by artist Justin Bieber' is awkward. If referring to a song title, use the title in quotes (or capitalized) and 'by Justin Bieber.' If the song is 'Happy' or 'LA' is incorrect, choose the correct title. Here the correction assumes the student meant a song by Justin Bieber and uses the standard preposition 'by' to indicate the artist. Suggestion: use 'by' to indicate the performer ('Song Title' by Artist) and place the song title clearly.