音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by using a clear topic sentence, correcting verb forms, and reducing redundancy. Keep it within 2–4 sentences. Add a specific reason and a brief example. For instance, say you prefer happy music because it boosts your energy after a long day, and give a short example of when it helped you.

範例: I prefer happy music. I often work long hours and feel tired, so upbeat songs lift my mood and give me more energy. For example, listening to cheerful pop in the evening helps me finish household tasks more quickly and improves my focus.

建議: Answer directly then support briefly with a specific example. Avoid filler phrases (e.g., 'uh', 'as for me') and incorrect verb choices. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas, and mention a specific artist or song correctly.

範例: Yes, absolutely. For example, Taylor Swift’s upbeat songs make me feel energetic and more focused when I’m studying. Because the melody is lively, I feel more motivated and can concentrate on my tasks better.

× Actually As for me, I like the happy music.

✓ Actually, as for me, I like happy music.

The definite article 'the' is incorrect before an uncountable/general noun 'happy music.' Use no article for general preferences: 'I like happy music.' Also add commas and lowercase 'as' for correct punctuation and capitalization.

× This is because I have to work every day and that make makes me very tired.

✓ This is because I have to work every day and that makes me very tired.

The subject 'that' is singular, so the verb must be 'makes' (third person singular). Remove the duplicated word 'make' and use 'makes' to agree with the singular subject.

× So listening happy music is make me feel moving and I can do my work better.

✓ So listening to happy music makes me feel moved and I can do my work better.

After 'listening' use the preposition 'to' (preposition error + verb structure). Use 'makes' for third person singular subject 'listening to happy music.' 'Feel moving' is incorrect collocation; 'feel moved' or 'feel motivated' is appropriate. Also maintain parallel verb forms and subject-verb agreement.

× And especially As for me, I left the Taylor Swift's music, uh, that always makes me feel moving and I can more concentrate on my tasks.

✓ And especially for me, I like Taylor Swift's music; it always makes me feel moved and I can concentrate more on my tasks.

Do not use 'the' before a possessive name like 'Taylor Swift's music.' 'Left' is incorrect verb choice here; likely intended 'like.' 'Feel moving' should be 'feel moved' or 'feel motivated.' Place adverb 'more' after the verb 'concentrate' for natural adverb placement. Use a semicolon or proper punctuation to join related independent clauses.

× So I prefer the happy music and it makes me feel more excited.

✓ So I prefer happy music and it makes me feel more excited.

Again, 'the' before 'happy music' is unnecessary when speaking generally. The rest of the sentence is grammatically correct; removing the article makes the sentence natural and idiomatic.