音乐— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Отвечая на этот вопрос, постарайтесь использовать более точную и грамматически корректную структуру. Начните с ясного топик‑предложения (например, «I prefer happy music» или «It depends on my mood»), затем добавьте одно‑два поясняющих предложения с конкретикой. Уберите лишние повторения («they they», «happy musics») и используйте правильные формы: «music» неисчисляемое, «creative music». Свяжите идеи союзами (for example, because, so) и держите ответ не более 3–4 предложений.

範例: It depends on my mood: after a hard day I prefer happy or creative music because it helps me relax. For example, upbeat songs lift my energy and distract me from stress, so I can unwind before bed.

建議: Упростите ответ и избегайте противоречий: вы сначала говорите «more excited», потом — «relaxed». Выберите одну основную мысль и поддержите её конкретным примером. Исправьте грамматику: «it makes me feel more relaxed» или «it makes me feel more excited». Используйте связки (for instance, so, because) и сократите повторения («bad day and after a bad day»). Ответ должен состоять из 2–3 предложений ясной структуры.

範例: Yes, happy music can make me feel more relaxed after a stressful day. For instance, I often put on upbeat songs on my headphones before bed because the melody and rhythm help calm my mind and improve my mood.

× Actually it depends on my mood when it is a hard day and after a hard day, I always prefer to listen happy musics or creative musics because they they can help me to feel relaxed after a busy day.

✓ Actually, it depends on my mood; on a hard day and after a hard day, I always prefer to listen to happy music or creative music because they can help me feel relaxed after a busy day.

The sentence uses incorrect tense and several grammar issues: 'it depends' is fine but the phrase 'when it is a hard day and after a hard day' is awkward; use 'on a hard day and after a hard day' to indicate time. 'listen happy musics' is incorrect: the verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' (preposition error, ID 11) and 'music' is an uncountable noun so it should not be plural 'musics' (singular/plural issue, ID 1). The duplicated word 'they they' is a repetition and should be a single 'they'. 'help me to feel' is acceptable but more natural as 'help me feel' (verb pattern). Suggestion: use 'listen to happy music or creative music' and keep 'music' singular and uncountable, remove duplicate word, and simplify phrasing for clarity.

× Yes, of course, when it is a bad day and after a bad day, before I sleep I always listen to happy or creative music on my headphones and it's make me more feel relaxed.

✓ Yes, of course. On a bad day and after a bad day, before I sleep I always listen to happy or creative music on my headphones and it makes me feel more relaxed.

Multiple issues: 'when it is a bad day and after a bad day' is awkward timing language; use 'on a bad day and after a bad day' (preposition/structure, ID 11 and 26). 'it's make me more feel relaxed' has subject-verb agreement and verb form errors: 'it's make' should be 'it makes' (third person singular issue, ID 2 and subject-verb agreement ID 27) and 'more feel relaxed' is incorrect word order — correct is 'feel more relaxed' (adverb placement, ID 20 / word order). Also ensure 'listen to' includes the preposition 'to' (preposition error, ID 11). Suggestion: use 'it makes me feel more relaxed' and proper timing phrases.