教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence naming the teacher, avoid hesitations and mispronunciations (e.g. 'filter' should be 'favourite' or 'favorite' and unclear names). Use one or two supporting details with linking words and avoid repeating the same idea.

範例: Yes, my favourite teacher is my undergraduate supervisor, Dr. Grady. She guided me through my research and also supported me with personal advice when I faced difficulties, which I really appreciated.

建議: Use correct tense and clearer phrasing. Begin with a direct statement and then give a brief reason using linking words (because, so). Reduce grammar mistakes (e.g. 'I dreamed of being a teacher' and 'teaching is hard work').

範例: I used to want to be a teacher when I was a child, but now I don't because teaching is very demanding and requires a lot of time and effort.

建議: Provide a clearer introduction and more specific details. Say the teacher's full or clearer name if possible, then give one or two concrete examples of his behaviour, using linking words like 'for example' or 'because'. Avoid exaggerated phrasing without specifics.

範例: Yes, I remember a teacher called Mr. Mohis. He was very strict and often gave severe punishments, for example making students stand after class for minor mistakes, so his strictness is what I still remember.

建議: Be more fluent and avoid repetitions. Start with a direct answer and then explain briefly how you connect (e.g. via Facebook) and how often you speak to them, using linking words like 'but' or 'however'.

範例: I am connected with some primary school teachers on Facebook, but we rarely talk. However, when I meet them by chance, we usually greet each other and catch up briefly.

建議: Organise the answer: give a clear topic sentence then two specific ways she helped (academic and personal) with concrete examples. Use correct collocations (e.g. 'academic perspective', 'helped me overcome a family problem') and smooth linking words.

範例: She supported me academically by advising on research methods and reading drafts, and personally she listened when I had family problems and suggested practical steps to cope, so I am very grateful to her.

建議: Make a comparative structure: state your preference and give two clear reasons with linking words (for example, because / whereas). Correct grammar and plural forms (teachers, students) and use specific examples to support your points.

範例: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers because they were more caring and communicated regularly about both academic and personal issues, whereas high school teachers were more distant and less willing to address students' problems in depth.

× Yes, I do have a filter. You just heard me, listen to Grady, uh, sees my undergraduate, uh, teacher, uh, she helped me a lot in doing my research. Umm, she was assigned as a supervisor for my research, but not only for the research, she has also helped me in other things too.

✓ Yes, I do have a favorite. You just heard me mention Grady, my undergraduate teacher. She helped me a lot with my research. She was assigned as my research supervisor, but she also helped me with other things.

Sentence structure errors and incorrect word choice caused confusion. 'Filter' is incorrect; context indicates 'favourite' or 'favorite'. The original included run-on phrases and unclear clauses ('you just heard me, listen to Grady, uh, sees my undergraduate'). Split into clear sentences, use correct prepositions ('helped me with my research') and possessive form ('my research supervisor'). Avoid filler words and ensure subject-verb clarity. Grammar problem type ID:26

× When I was a child I was dreamed of being teacher but getting older I got to know that there is being teacher is so difficult and hard working. So I nowadays I don't like to be a teacher.

✓ When I was a child I dreamed of being a teacher, but as I got older I learned that being a teacher is very difficult and requires hard work. So nowadays I don't want to be a teacher.

Incorrect verb forms and awkward phrasing: 'was dreamed' should be simple past 'dreamed'. Use article 'a teacher'. 'Getting older I got to know' should be 'as I got older I learned'. 'There is being teacher' is ungrammatical; correct to 'being a teacher'. 'Hard working' as a noun requires 'requires hard work' or adjective 'hard-working'. Use 'nowadays I don't want' for present preference. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Yes, I remember 1 surname Mohis and he was the most arrogant teacher I have ever seen in my life because of the harsh punishment he gave to the individual students and I will always remember him.

✓ Yes, I remember a teacher whose surname was Mohis, and he was the most arrogant teacher I have ever seen because of the harsh punishments he gave individual students, and I will always remember him.

Article and noun number issues: use 'a teacher' instead of '1 surname'. 'Surname Mohis' needs rephrasing. 'Harsh punishment' should be plural 'harsh punishments' when referring to repeated actions toward multiple students. Remove redundant phrases and keep sentence flow. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Umm, talking frankly, I have friends with them on a social media platform, so that's Facebook, but uh, we don't have conversations with them. I don't have conversations with them, but when we met on umm, random path, then I just agreed to them.

✓ Frankly, I am friends with them on a social media platform, Facebook, but we don't really converse. If we meet by chance, I usually greet them.

Preposition and verb choice errors: 'friends with them on a social media platform' is acceptable but passive phrasing improved to 'I am friends with them on Facebook'. 'We don't have conversations with them' is awkward; use 'we don't really converse'. 'Met on random path' is incorrect preposition and noun; use 'meet by chance' or 'meet on a random street'. 'Agreed to them' is incorrect; likely intended 'greet them'. Grammar problem type ID:11

× My favorite teacher helped me not only in academic pro perspective but also in my personal life. I was going through a little bit of time in my family and I shared with her and she helped me to overcome with the problem. And so I'm always grateful for her.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me not only in an academic/professional capacity but also in my personal life. I was going through a difficult time with my family, and I shared it with her; she helped me overcome the problem, so I will always be grateful to her.

Multiple preposition and collocation errors: 'in academic pro perspective' is incorrect—use 'in an academic or professional capacity' or 'in my academic studies'. 'Going through a little bit of time in my family' should be 'going through a difficult time with my family'. 'Shared with her' needs an object ('shared it with her'). 'Helped me to overcome with the problem' should be 'helped me overcome the problem'. Use correct preposition 'grateful to her'. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Yes, I like primary school teacher more than higher school because in primary school teacher was so connected with the children. They tried to communicate with the children and they about their academic problems, personal problem. Also in higher school teacher are ignoring student, they don't even solve the problem of the incident in depth.

✓ Yes, I like primary school teachers more than high school teachers because primary school teachers were more connected with the children. They tried to communicate with the children about their academic and personal problems. Also, high school teachers often ignore students; they don't even address incidents in depth.

Mix of singular/plural and subject-verb agreement errors: use plural 'teachers' consistently. 'Higher school' is nonstandard; use 'high school'. 'Primary school teacher was' should be 'primary school teachers were'. 'They about their academic problems, personal problem' missing verb; include 'communicate ... about their academic and personal problems'. 'Teacher are ignoring student' requires plural subjects and objects: 'teachers often ignore students'. Improve verb choice: 'address incidents in depth'. Grammar problem type ID:1