教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more coherent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain why she was your favorite and give one specific example with correct vocabulary and sentence structure.

範例: Yes. My favourite teacher was my high school English teacher because she made lessons fun and engaging. For example, she often played short clips from Friends and used them to teach vocabulary and conversational skills, which helped me remember words in context.

建議: Clarify your position and avoid fragmented sentences. Give a concise opinion with reasons and use linking words (however, because, for example). Fix grammar (e.g., 'a teacher', 'I like the part that').

範例: I'm not sure I want to be a teacher. I like that teachers help students grow and feel rewarded when a student overcomes difficulties; however, I worry about the workload and responsibility that come with the job.

建議: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific memory and its effect on you. Avoid hesitations and repeated words. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'because' to explain why you remember him.

範例: Yes. I especially remember my primary school Chinese teacher because he was very supportive. For example, he once told me he believed I would do something amazing in the future, which boosted my confidence and motivated me to work harder.

建議: Give a direct answer, then add brief supporting detail with clear linking words. Correct fragmented phrases and sentence structure, and be specific about how often or why you don't keep in touch.

範例: Not really. I moved to different cities so it's been hard to keep contact; I only visited one primary teacher once when I was in middle school. I regret not staying in touch because I think they would appreciate hearing from former students.

建議: Begin with a clear statement of impact, then give a concise, specific example using linking words. Correct grammar and phrasing (e.g., 'I varied my pronunciation' -> 'my pronunciation varied' or 'I worried about my pronunciation').

範例: She helped me become much more confident. For example, I used to be afraid to speak English because I worried about my pronunciation, but during a presentation when I lost my place she encouraged me and helped me continue, which made me feel supported.

建議: Answer directly and give a reason with a supporting detail; correct grammar (e.g., 'she made me confident'). Avoid vague language like 'maybe' unless necessary. Use one clear sentence with a brief example.

範例: Yes, I prefer my primary school teacher because she helped me build confidence. For instance, she praised small improvements and encouraged me to speak up in class, which changed my attitude to learning.

× She was super funny and then made the class feel awkward or serious all time.

✓ She was super funny and then made the class feel awkward or serious all the time.

The adverbial phrase 'all the time' was missing the definite article 'the' and its placement should follow the adjective phrase it modifies. Use 'all the time' to indicate continuous frequency.

× I still remember she used to play clips from shows like friends in class and make us learns learns from them in self only memorizing vocabularies.

✓ I still remember she used to play clips from shows like Friends in class and made us learn from them, not just memorize vocabulary.

Errors: 'friends' should be capitalized as a proper noun; 'make us learns learns' is ungrammatical—after 'made' or 'make' the base verb 'learn' is required; 'in self only memorizing vocabularies' is incorrect phrasing and pluralization. Use 'not just memorize vocabulary' to contrast actions and use uncountable 'vocabulary'.

× I like the part but teacher can help students grow and learn something new.

✓ I like the idea of being a teacher because teachers can help students grow and learn new things.

Original lacks appropriate subject/article and has verb number issues. 'Teacher can' should be 'teachers can' for general statement; 'I like the part' is unclear—'I like the idea of being a teacher' fits the context. Use 'new things' or 'something new'.

× For example. I think it's really rewarding when someone finally understands the topic they used to also struggle with or become more confident because your help but at the same time don't.

✓ For example, I think it's really rewarding when someone finally understands a topic they used to struggle with or becomes more confident because of your help, but at the same time I am not sure I want that role.

Multiple structure issues: sentence fragments, misplaced pronouns, missing preposition 'because of', mixed tenses, and unclear final clause 'but at the same time don't.' Recast to clarify meaning and maintain consistent subject and tense.

× Actually, one of them I still remember is my Chinese teacher at primary school. And he was really supportive.

✓ Actually, one I still remember is my Chinese teacher from primary school, and he was really supportive.

Word order 'one of them I still remember' is awkward; 'one I still remember' is clearer. 'At primary school' -> 'from primary school' or 'from my primary school' is more natural.

× And I remember one time he told me he believed that I would grow up doing something amazing.

✓ I remember one time he told me he believed I would grow up to do something amazing.

Use 'grow up to do' rather than 'grow up doing' for intended future action. Remove redundant 'that' or keep but adjust word order.

× I feel like when I when when you were working was like that made a lot.

✓ I feel like when I was growing up, his encouragement helped me a lot.

Original has repeated words and unclear structure. Rephrase to express cause-effect: 'when I was growing up' and 'his encouragement helped me a lot.'

× Not really, it's been too long and I've moved to different cities in the I remember visit one of my primary school teachers when I when I was in middle school but that was the only time.

✓ Not really. It's been too long and I've moved to different cities. I remember visiting one of my primary school teachers when I was in middle school, but that was the only time.

Original mishmashes tenses and has missing gerund. Use 'visiting' after 'remember' for past recollection; split into sentences for clarity and fix article/word order.

× I feel like I should with them more 'cause they would really appreciate it.

✓ I feel like I should keep in touch with them more because they would really appreciate it.

Missing verb 'keep in touch' after 'should'; avoid colloquial ''cause' in formal correction—use 'because'.

× I think she really helped me become more confident. Back then I was kind of scared of speaking English in front of people because I varied my pronunciation.

✓ I think she really helped me become more confident. Back then I was kind of scared of speaking English in front of people because my pronunciation varied.

Use correct placement: 'my pronunciation varied' rather than 'I varied my pronunciation' which implies intentional action. Both are grammatical but 'my pronunciation varied' is more natural here.

× Sound weird but she was always super encouraging.

✓ It sounds weird, but she was always super encouraging.

Missing subject 'It' and verb 'sounds' for correct clause. Add comma before conjunction.

× I remember one time I gave a presentation and forgot where I was at and she kind of jumped in.

✓ I remember one time I gave a presentation and forgot where I was, and she kind of jumped in.

Informal 'where I was at' is colloquial; remove 'at'. Add comma before coordinating conjunction for clarity.

× Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

✓ Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

This question is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I think maybe I prefer my primary school, yeah, because she helped me a lot. She make me confident.

✓ I think maybe I prefer my primary school teacher, yeah, because she helped me a lot. She made me confident.

'She make me confident' is wrong for past reference—use past tense 'made'. Also specify 'primary school teacher' for clarity.