教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundant phrases and incorrect word order (e.g., “the teaching style of her” → “her teaching style”).

範例: Yes. My favorite teacher was my high school biology tutor; her teaching style was clear and engaging, and she gave me extra guidance during labs. As a result, she encouraged me to study medical science, which led me to pursue a related degree.

建議: Open with a direct answer, then give concise reasons using linking words. Fix awkward phrasing (e.g., “managing the time management”) and avoid contradictions—if you say “not really” don’t later sound eager. Be specific about which aspects you find difficult and when you might consider teaching.

範例: Not really; I prefer research work. However, I respect teaching because it requires classroom management and strong time-management skills. If I had the opportunity to teach a small seminar or supervise students, I would consider it.

建議: Answer directly and give one or two specific memories. Use correct verb forms and phrasing (e.g., “she bonded with all the students” and avoid repeating words). Provide a concrete example of her attitude or method.

範例: Yes. I still remember my English teacher Aishwarya because she always made lessons interactive and treated every student respectfully. For example, she held weekly reading circles where everyone could share ideas, which helped me gain confidence.

建議: Keep the response concise and avoid repetition. State clearly who is in touch and give one specific reason or example of how you stay connected. Correct plural and possession issues (e.g., “my family” not “my families”).

範例: Yes, I am. My parents and I still contact several of my primary school teachers by phone or social media because we value their long-term support; for instance, my first teacher still gives advice about study choices.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence describing one concrete way she helped you, then add a brief result. Use clearer phrasing (e.g., “encouraged me to study biotechnology”) and avoid redundant time markers (“right now I recently”).

範例: She encouraged me to study biotechnology, which influenced my academic path; as a result, I recently completed my Master’s degree and am now considering a PhD in the same field.

建議: Give a clear direct answer first (e.g., yes or no), then briefly explain with one clear comparison and example. Remove filler words (“uh”, “this is a very confusing question”) and use comparative forms correctly (“more friendly compared to”).

範例: Yes, I prefer my high school teachers because I interacted with them more recently and they were friendlier. For example, my high school math teacher offered extra help after class, which made learning easier.

× My favorite teacher was from my school.

✓ My favorite teacher was at my school.

Using 'from my school' is not wrong but 'at my school' is more natural when referring to a teacher who taught there. Change improves naturalness and clarity. Suggestion: Use 'at' to indicate where the teacher worked.

× She, the teaching style of her was fantastic.

✓ Her teaching style was fantastic.

The original sentence uses an incorrect and redundant phrase structure. 'She, the teaching style of her' is ungrammatical. Use the possessive adjective 'her' followed by the noun 'teaching style' to form a correct noun phrase. Suggestion: Keep subject and possessive adjective together: 'Her teaching style...'.

× She encouraged me to opt the medical science.

✓ She encouraged me to choose medical science.

'Opt' is usually used intransitively or with 'for' (opt for). 'Opt the medical science' is incorrect. Use 'choose medical science' or 'opt for medical science'. Also omit the article 'the' with academic fields. Suggestion: Use 'choose' or 'opt for' and drop 'the' before field names.

× So I do, and she's the best wisher of mine.

✓ So I did, and she's one of my biggest supporters.

'So I do' in past context is wrong; the teacher encouraged in the past so 'I did' fits. 'Best wisher of mine' is an awkward literal translation; use 'one of my biggest supporters' or 'my biggest supporter'. Suggestion: Match tense and use natural collocations like 'supporter'.

× Not really, but as I think that teaching is a very big responsibility, not everyone can handle this.

✓ Not really, but I think that teaching is a very big responsibility, and not everyone can handle it.

'As I think' is awkward; 'I think' is natural. 'Handle this' should be 'handle it' when referring to the general idea 'teaching'. Use coordinating conjunction 'and' for clear clause connection. Suggestion: Use 'I think' and refer back with 'it'.

× Handling students, managing the class, managing the time management is the difficult thing one can do, so I would love to if I get a chance.

✓ Handling students, managing the class, and managing time are difficult tasks, so I would love to if I got the chance.

Original sentence has redundancy ('managing the time management') and number disagreement ('is' with a list of items). Also conditional timing should match hypothetical 'if I got the chance' rather than 'if I get a chance' after 'would love'. Suggestion: Remove redundancy, make plural 'are difficult tasks', and use correct conditional tense.

× Yes, recently I met my English teacher.

✓ Yes, I recently met my English teacher.

Word order is slightly off; 'recently I met' is understandable but 'I recently met' is more natural in English. Suggestion: Place adverbs like 'recently' after the subject and before the verb.

× Her name was Aishwarya.

✓ Her name is Aishwarya.

If she is still alive or the name remains true, present tense 'is' is appropriate when stating someone's name. Using past tense 'was' suggests she is no longer living or no longer has that name. Suggestion: Use present tense 'is' for names unless referring to a past situation.

× She was the most amazing teacher that I ever had met.

✓ She was the most amazing teacher that I ever met.

The verb 'met' already conveys past; adding 'had' creates an unnecessary and incorrect past perfect. Use simple past 'I ever met' after 'was'. Suggestion: Use simple past for events in the past unless you need to show an earlier past event.

× She bounded with all the student in very friendly manner and the the one thing that I like her is her attitude.

✓ She bonded with all the students in a very friendly manner, and the one thing I liked about her was her attitude.

'Bounded' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'bonded'. 'Student' should be plural 'students'. 'In very friendly manner' needs the article 'a' and 'manner' is singular. The clause 'the the one thing that I like her' is ungrammatical; use 'the one thing I liked about her'. Tense consistency requires past: 'liked' and 'was'. Suggestion: Use 'bonded with the students', pluralize nouns, add articles, and use correct clause 'the thing I liked about her'.

× Not only me, but my families are also connected with all my teachers from the primary school because the bonding that I have with them and my parents as well is amazing.

✓ Not only me, but my family is also in touch with my primary school teachers because the bond my parents and I have with them is amazing.

'Families' is incorrect; singular 'family' refers to the speaker's family. Use 'in touch with' instead of 'connected with' for people. 'Bonding' should be 'bond' as a noun. The original sentence has awkward word order; restructure for clarity and subject-verb agreement ('family is'). Suggestion: Use 'my family', 'in touch with', and 'bond' and keep subject-verb agreement.

× If I talk about there are plenty ways that she helped me but the one that is with me is she encouraged me to opt the biotechnology and right now I recently completed my masters and now I'm contemplating to pursue my PhD.

✓ There are many ways she helped me, but the one that stands out is that she encouraged me to choose biotechnology. I recently completed my master's and now I'm considering pursuing a PhD.

Original has mixed structures, wrong use of 'opt the biotechnology', redundancy ('right now I recently'), incorrect noun forms ('masters' -> 'master's'), and awkward verb 'contemplating to pursue' which should be 'considering pursuing'. Suggestion: Split into two sentences, use 'choose' or 'opt for', correct degree name to 'master's', and use 'considering pursuing'.

× Uh, this is very confusing question, but I would like to say that my high school teachers are the teachers that I recently interacted with and they are more friendly as comparative to my primary teacher because they were a bit strict, uh, in a good manner, but I like my high school teachers more.

✓ This is a very confusing question, but I would say that I prefer my high school teachers because I interacted with them more recently and they are friendlier compared to my primary school teachers, who were a bit strict in a good way.

Add article 'a' before 'very confusing question'. 'More friendly' should be 'friendlier'. 'As comparative to' is incorrect; use 'compared to' or 'in comparison with'. 'Primary teacher' should be plural 'primary school teachers' to match context. 'In a good manner' is awkward; use 'in a good way'. Suggestion: Use correct comparative form 'friendlier', 'compared to', and plural nouns where needed.