教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문장이 어색하고 문법 오류(시제, 관사, 어순 등)가 많습니다. 답변은 직접적인 주제 문장으로 시작하고, 추가 정보는 1~2개의 간결한 문장으로 연결어를 사용해 덧붙이세요. 예를 들어 ‘My favorite teacher was my middle school homeroom teacher.’로 시작한 뒤 Why/How(왜/어떻게)를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 또한 ‘supportive’나 ‘kind’ 같은 형용사를 적절히 사용하고, 중복 표현(‘supportive’와 ‘was kindly’)을 피하세요.

範例: My favorite teacher was my middle school homeroom teacher. She was very supportive and always encouraged me when I struggled with my studies. For example, she stayed after class to explain difficult concepts and gave me extra practice materials.

建議: 답변이 길고 중복되며 문법과 표현(‘more easier’, ‘our way’)에 오류가 있습니다. 먼저 명확한 주제문(Yes/No)으로 시작하고 이유를 한두 문장으로 간결하게 설명하세요. 연결어(For example, Because, However)를 사용해 논리를 정리하고 문법적으로 정확한 표현을 쓰세요.

範例: No, I don't. I don't feel confident explaining things to others because I find it difficult to simplify complex ideas. For example, when I try to teach my friend, I struggle to break down the steps clearly.

建議: 의도는 분명하지만 문장이 어색하고 중복(‘my favorite teacher was someone another teacher’)이 있습니다. 간결한 주제문을 사용하고 구체적 사례(무엇을 했는지)를 덧붙이면 좋습니다. 연결어(Also, For example)를 사용해 흐름을 매끄럽게 만드세요.

範例: Yes, I still remember my middle school homeroom teacher. She encouraged me to study harder by giving me regular feedback and extra exercises, which really helped improve my grades.

建議: 의미 전달이 불분명하고 문법·어휘 오류가 많습니다(‘teaching with the teaching with teacher’, ‘feels loud’). 질문에는 간단히 Yes/No로 답하고 이유를 구체적으로, 명확한 표현으로 설명하세요. 예: ‘In Korea, contact between former students and primary teachers is uncommon.’ 같은 표현을 사용하세요.

範例: No, I am not. In Korea, it is uncommon for former students to keep in touch with their primary school teachers, and I haven't maintained contact with mine.

建議: 말이 어색하고 비문(‘explaining clear’, ‘asking me to do more activities about my difficulties’)이 있습니다. 구체적인 방법을 하나나 두 개로 정해 연결어로 설명하고, 예시를 통해 보여주면 더 설득력 있습니다.

範例: In my opinion, she helped me by explaining difficult topics clearly and giving me extra practice activities. For example, she assigned additional exercises and reviewed my mistakes with me after class.

建議: 답변 구조는 괜찮지만 문법과 어순, 중복(‘the teachers most teachers’) 문제가 있습니다. 비교 질문이므로 ‘because’ 뒤에 구체적 비교 포인트(예: teaching style, expectations, support)를 명확히 제시하세요. 문장을 깔끔하게 마무리하세요.

範例: No, I don't. Primary school teachers treated me more like a child, while high school teachers pushed me academically and motivated me to study harder, which I preferred.

× Yes I have. I usually met a kind of friend supportive teacher, but I my favorite teacher who I ever met is my middle school homeroom teacher. ** *** was so supportive and was kindly to me.

✓ Yes, I have. I usually meet kind and supportive teachers, but my favorite teacher was my middle school homeroom teacher. She was very supportive and kind to me.

The original mixes past and present incorrectly and has word order issues. 'I usually met' should be present habit 'I usually meet' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). 'A kind of friend supportive teacher' is incorrect word order and word choice; correct to 'kind and supportive teachers' (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). 'Who I ever met' is unnecessary; use past tense 'was' to describe the specific teacher (Grammar Problem Type ID 5). 'Was kindly to me' uses the adverb 'kindly' incorrectly; use the adjective 'kind' with 'to' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). Suggestions: keep consistent tense when describing habits vs past events, place adjectives in correct order, and use 'kind' not 'kindly' in this context.

× Umm no I don't because I'm not good at teaching someone or explaining something more easier our way. But I think in my opinion teacher is someone who always good at explaining something.

✓ Umm no, I don't, because I'm not good at teaching people or explaining things more easily. But in my opinion, a good teacher is someone who is always good at explaining things.

'Teaching someone' is more naturally 'teaching people' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11). 'More easier' is a double comparative; use 'easier' or 'more easily' depending on structure; here adverb 'easily' modifies 'explaining' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13 and 20). 'Our way' is unclear and unnecessary (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). 'In my opinion teacher is someone who always good' misses articles and the verb 'is' before 'good' (Grammar Problem Type ID 17 and 23). Suggestions: avoid double comparatives, use adverbs to modify verbs, include articles, and ensure verbs are present in clauses.

× As I mentioned, my favorite teacher was someone another teacher that I still remember. She was my homeroom teacher and also encouraged me to study harder.

✓ As I mentioned, my favorite teacher was my homeroom teacher, and she is someone I still remember. She encouraged me to study harder.

'Was someone another teacher' is ungrammatical; simplify to 'was my homeroom teacher' (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). 'That I still remember' should be 'someone I still remember' and tense consistency matters: if she is still remembered now, present 'is someone I still remember' fits (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). 'Also encouraged me' is fine but ensure past tense 'encouraged' to match 'was' (Grammar Problem Type ID 5). Suggestions: remove redundant words, keep tenses consistent for ongoing facts vs past actions.

× Actually, no I'm not because in South Korea teaching with the teaching with teacher is not allowed to students and it feels it feels loud for some to some people. So I am not still in touch with my.

✓ Actually, no, I'm not, because in South Korea it is not allowed for teachers to keep in touch with students, and it feels awkward for some people. So I am not still in touch with them.

Phrase 'teaching with the teaching with teacher' is garbled and needs restructuring to 'it is not allowed for teachers to keep in touch with students' (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). 'Allowed to students' should be 'allowed for students' or better 'allowed for teachers to keep in touch with students' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11). 'Feels loud' is incorrect collocation; use 'awkward' or 'inappropriate' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). The sentence ends with missing object after 'my'—should be 'them' referring to teachers (Grammar Problem Type ID 12). Suggestions: clarify who is allowed or not, choose appropriate adjectives, and ensure pronouns are complete.

× Uh, in my opinions, explaining clear and asking me to do more activities about my difficulties is, uh, the best way to help me or any students.

✓ Uh, in my opinion, explaining things clearly and asking me to do more activities to address my difficulties is the best way to help me or any student.

'In my opinions' should be singular 'in my opinion' (Grammar Problem Type ID 27/6). 'Explaining clear' needs adverb 'clearly' and an object 'things' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13 and 10). 'Asking me to do more activities about my difficulties' is better as 'to address my difficulties' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11). 'Any students' should be 'any student' to match singular concept 'me or any student' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1/14). Suggestions: use correct adverb forms to modify verbs, keep noun number consistent, and choose clear prepositions.

× No I don't because in my primary school time the teachers most teachers always consider me as a child but in high school the most teachers always motivated me to study harder and.

✓ No, I don't, because in primary school most teachers always considered me a child, but in high school most teachers always motivated me to study harder.

'In my primary school time' is unidiomatic; use 'in primary school' (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). 'The teachers most teachers' is redundant; 'most teachers' is correct (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Tense must be past 'considered' to match past periods (Grammar Problem Type ID 5). 'Consider me as a child' should be 'considered me a child' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). Final 'and.' is incomplete and should be removed (Grammar Problem Type ID 23). Suggestions: remove redundancy, use simple past for past periods, and avoid extra conjunctions.