教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar; avoid fillers and gender confusion. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use correct tense and pronouns.

範例: Yes. My favorite teacher was my high school chemistry teacher. He made chemistry clearer and more exciting by using simple, precise examples and patient explanations, so I became motivated to study chemistry further.

建議: Fix sentence fragmentation and grammar, avoid repetition. Give a short topic sentence then one clear reason using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: No, I don't plan to become a teacher. Although teaching is rewarding, it often involves long hours and relatively low pay, so I would prefer a career that offers better compensation and less exhaustion.

建議: Organize your response: state who she was, give specific examples of her actions, and explain the result. Correct grammar (e.g., 'made us write a to-do list', 'phone use in class') and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes. She was my high school homeroom and religious studies teacher who was very strict. For example, she made us write a to-do list every morning and banned phone use in class, which helped me develop responsibility and discipline that still keeps me organized today.

建議: Use consistent pronouns and smoother linking words. Be concise: one topic sentence, one reason, and one reflection. Correct small errors ('with them', 'all my teachers').

範例: No, I'm not in touch with them because I moved away for college and we lost contact. However, I sometimes wish I could reconnect since I miss my teachers.

建議: Make a clear topic sentence and use correct verb forms. Remove fillers and be specific about methods and outcomes. Use linking words to show cause and effect.

範例: She encouraged independent thinking by giving me hints and guiding me to approach problems step by step, which helped me learn how to work things out on my own and improved my problem‑solving skills.

建議: Begin with a clear direct answer and correct word choice ('prefer' instead of 'perform'). Explain reasons with linking words and avoid fragmented sentences. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer my high school teachers because I saw them more recently and they helped me develop good study habits. Since it's been about ten years since primary school, I don't remember many details from those teachers.

× Yes I do my favorite teacher is my high school chemistry teacher umm actually when I was in middle school I already liked chemistry but he made the subject more clearer and exciting he was so patient and encouraging and she he always used exact simple examples umm to explain the. Concepts and ideas. Umm so he made me want to study chemistry further.

✓ Yes, I do. My favorite teacher is my high school chemistry teacher. Actually, when I was in middle school I already liked chemistry, but he made the subject clearer and more exciting. He was very patient and encouraging, and he always used simple, precise examples to explain the concepts and ideas. He made me want to study chemistry further.

Multiple pronoun inconsistencies occurred: the student switches between he and she; this creates confusion. Use a single consistent pronoun (he) for the teacher. Also corrected small word-order and word-choice issues (more clearer -> clearer; exact simple -> simple, precise) and added punctuation to separate clauses. Suggestion: decide the teacher's gender and consistently use the correct pronoun; review adjective order and avoid redundant comparatives.

× No, I don't think I will be a teacher. Although teaching can be rewarding and help students grow, it often offers low pay and a very demanding schedules schedule, so I would prefer a different career. Which is less exhausting and better compensation.

✓ No, I don't think I will be a teacher. Although teaching can be rewarding and help students grow, it often offers low pay and very demanding schedules, so I would prefer a different career that is less exhausting and better compensated.

Errors: plural/singular and sentence fragment. 'a very demanding schedules' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'very demanding schedules' or 'a very demanding schedule'. The final sentence fragment 'Which is less exhausting and better compensation.' should be integrated into the previous sentence and use correct form 'better compensated'. Suggestion: ensure noun and article agree in number and avoid sentence fragments by connecting clauses properly.

× Yes I do. She was my high school faith teacher and also our class teacher. She was very strict and imposed the rules such as making us write A to do list every morning and then in the use of phones is in class. She did this to help us develop. Responsibility and discipline and those habits have helped me stay organized even now. So I'm so appreciate still. I still appreciate.

✓ Yes, I do. She was my high school faith teacher and also our class teacher. She was very strict and imposed rules such as making us write a to-do list every morning and limiting the use of phones in class. She did this to help us develop responsibility and discipline, and those habits have helped me stay organized even now. I still appreciate that.

Problems fixed: pronoun is consistent but several structure errors: 'A to do list' should be 'a to-do list' (article and hyphen), 'in the use of phones is in class' is ungrammatical—replaced with 'limiting the use of phones in class'. 'She did this to help us develop. Responsibility' was split incorrectly; combined into one sentence. 'So I'm so appreciate still. I still appreciate.' are ungrammatical; corrected to 'I still appreciate that.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments, use articles correctly, and make sure actions are clearly described.

× No, I'm not in touch with him. I moved away to college which is far from my hometown so we lost contact. Although I sometimes wish I could speak to my all teachers because I miss them a lot.

✓ No, I'm not in touch with them. I moved away to attend college, which is far from my hometown, so we lost contact. Sometimes I wish I could speak to all my teachers because I miss them a lot.

Pronoun error: 'him' is singular but context refers to primary school teachers (plural) so use 'them'. 'Moved away to college' improved to 'moved away to attend college'. 'my all teachers' is incorrect word order; use 'all my teachers'. Suggestion: match pronoun number to the referent and use natural word order for quantifiers.

× My favorite teacher helped me to solve the problems is encouraging independent thinking. She always give me some hints and guidance to uh improve umm me to things problems thorough and and work out the answers by myself. This is improve the me the problem solving skills.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me by encouraging independent thinking. She always gave me hints and guidance to think through problems and work out the answers by myself. This improved my problem-solving skills.

Multiple tense and agreement issues plus awkward phrasing. 'helped me to solve the problems is encouraging independent thinking' was ungrammatical; changed to 'helped me by encouraging independent thinking.' 'She always give' should be past tense 'gave' to match 'helped'. 'think through problems' replaces unclear phrase. 'This is improve the me the problem solving skills' corrected to 'This improved my problem-solving skills.' Suggestion: maintain consistent tense within the description of past events and use correct possessive forms.

× I perform a high school teachers more I saw because I saw them more recently and they helped me a lot. It's about 10 years since I finished my primary school so I can't recall the details of these teachers, but my high school teachers had a big influence on my learning habits and the personal. Development.

✓ I prefer my high school teachers because I saw them more recently and they helped me a lot. It's been about 10 years since I finished primary school, so I can't recall the details of my primary teachers, but my high school teachers had a big influence on my learning habits and personal development.

Errors fixed: 'perform' should be 'prefer'. 'I saw' is unnecessary and confusing; removed. 'It's about 10 years since I finished my primary school' improved to 'It's been about 10 years since I finished primary school.' 'the personal. Development' was broken and incorrect; corrected to 'personal development.' Suggestion: choose the correct verb (prefer) for expressing preference and keep noun phrases intact.