教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and clear. Start with a concise topic sentence answering the question, avoid unclear references and errors (e.g., 'DJ', article use). Add one short specific reason with a linking word. Keep within 1–3 sentences.

範例: Yes. One of my favorite teachers from senior secondary school is Mr. Tarun because he made English lessons interesting by using real-life examples and encouraging class discussions.

建議: Reduce hesitations and correct grammar. Use a clear topic sentence then a short reason with linking word (because/so). Avoid repetition and filler words.

範例: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future because I enjoy explaining ideas to others and helping students understand difficult topics.

建議: Be concise and clear. Start with a direct answer, correct awkward phrasing (e.g., 'the Tarun, he's my English name' is confusing). Use one linking word to introduce a specific reason or example.

範例: Yes, I still remember my English teacher Mr. Tarun because he always took extra time to explain grammar points and helped me overcome my doubts during lessons.

建議: Avoid fillers and repetitive words. Give a clear statement and one specific detail about how you keep in touch (which platforms or how often). Use linking words like 'so' or 'via'.

範例: Yes. I keep in touch with several primary school teachers via social media platforms such as Facebook and WhatsApp, and we message each other a few times a year to catch up.

建議: Structure the answer with a clear topic sentence and one specific example using correct tense and names. Reduce repetition and correct errors ('the turn' -> 'he'). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'so' to make it coherent.

範例: He helped me when I had difficulty with a group project; for example, he guided our planning, suggested roles for each member, and reviewed our draft, which allowed us to finish the project successfully.

建議: Answer the question directly (compare primary vs high school teachers). Fix contradictions and grammar, and give one clear reason with a linking word. Avoid fillers and unclear statements.

範例: I prefer my high school teachers because they were more friendly and provided extra academic support, which helped me improve my grades.

× Of course, I have a lot of favorite teachers in my senior secondary school.

✓ Of course, I have many favorite teachers from my senior secondary school.

The phrase 'a lot of' is acceptable, but 'many' is more appropriate with countable noun 'teachers' in formal speech. Also 'in my senior secondary school' is better as 'from my senior secondary school' to indicate origin; this avoids ambiguity.

× The one of my favorite DJ is the Tarun.

✓ One of my favorite teachers is Tarun.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'DJ' and 'the Tarun' and has an article error. 'One of my favorite' should be followed by a plural noun 'teachers'. Remove the definite article before a proper name and correct the role to 'teacher'. Use 'Tarun' without 'the'.

× Yes, of course, if I get a chance, I will be become a teacher in the future because I, I love to, uh, to teach uh.

✓ Yes, of course. If I get a chance, I will become a teacher in the future because I love to teach.

The phrase 'will be become' is ungrammatical; use either 'will become' or 'will be' plus present participle (e.g., 'will be teaching') but here 'will become' is correct. Remove repeated fillers and the extra 'to' after 'love'. Keep verb tense consistent for a future intention.

× Yes, of course, as I mentioned before, the Tarun, he's my English name.

✓ Yes, of course. As I mentioned before, Tarun is my English name.

Using 'the' before a proper name is incorrect. Also contraction 'he's' is unnecessary and confusing here because 'Tarun' refers to a name; use a clear declarative clause 'Tarun is my English name'.

× He was my English teacher.

✓ He was my English teacher.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It correctly uses past tense 'was' to describe a former role. No change needed.

× And I really, uh, I remember because he always helped me in my studies and to clear my doubts.

✓ I remember him well because he always helped me with my studies and cleared my doubts.

Avoid filler repetitions and use consistent verb forms. 'Helped me in my studies' is improved to 'helped me with my studies'. 'And to clear my doubts' is an infinitive phrase awkwardly attached; use past tense 'cleared my doubts' to match 'helped'.

× Yes, with the help of like modern era, there are a lot of like, uh, social, social media websites.

✓ Yes, with the help of modern technology, there are many social media websites.

'With the help of like modern era' is ungrammatical. Use 'with the help of modern technology' or 'in the modern era'. Also use 'many' for countable 'websites' and remove filler 'like' and repetition.

× So through these websites I am, umm, I am still in touch with my, uh, primary school teachers.

✓ So through these websites I am still in touch with my primary school teachers.

Remove fillers and repeated 'I am'. The present continuous 'am still in touch' appropriately describes ongoing contact; keep it concise.

× Uh, the, there are a lot of teachers like uh, Tarun Bankaj and many more.

✓ There are many teachers, such as Tarun Bankaj and many others.

Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for formal clarity and 'such as' to introduce examples. 'And many more' is informal; 'many others' is clearer.

× One one time I face a problem with my group project.

✓ One time I faced a problem with my group project.

The event is in the past, so use past tense 'faced' rather than present 'face'. Also remove repeated 'one'.

× So at that time the turn helped me a lot into complete my my project.

✓ So at that time Tarun helped me a lot to complete my project.

'the turn' is likely a mispronunciation of 'Tarun'. Use 'to complete' rather than 'into complete'. Remove duplicate 'my'. 'Helped me a lot to complete' is idiomatic.

× So at that that time I become my favorite teacher.

✓ So at that time he became my favorite teacher.

The sentence needs past tense 'became' to match the past context and correct subject 'he' (Tarun), not 'I'. Remove duplicate 'that'.

× Uh yes of course. I like my high school teachers as they are more friendly and always L help me helps me a lot in my studies.

✓ Yes, of course. I like my high school teachers because they are friendlier and always help me a lot with my studies.

Use comparative adjective 'friendlier' rather than 'more friendly'. Remove stray 'L'. Use correct verb form 'help' (plural subject 'teachers' takes base verb in present). Use 'help me with my studies' for correct preposition.