教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and provide one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Also correct subject-verb agreement and minor vocabulary form (love → loves).

範例: Yes. My favorite teacher is Gloria, my Spanish teacher from Spain. I admire her patience and sense of humor, which make lessons enjoyable and help me feel confident speaking in class.

建議: Avoid repeating phrases and use a clear structure: topic sentence plus specific details connected with linking words. Use accurate terms (e.g., ‘private tutor’ not ‘private linked tutor’) and mention why you want this to add depth.

範例: Yes. I want to be a teacher and eventually run my own school. Specifically, I plan to work as a private tutor for Mandarin-speaking students, because I enjoy helping learners improve their English pronunciation and confidence.

建議: Fix contradictions and grammar, and be more coherent. Give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Remove redundant connectors (‘although… but however’) and correct verb forms.

範例: Yes. I still remember Miss Lowe, my elementary school math teacher from Beijing. Although she was strict, she encouraged me a lot and often praised my work, which boosted my confidence.

建議: Be more concise and use correct tense and phrasing. Use linking words to show cause and effect and avoid awkward vocabulary (extravagant). Provide one clear reason or two brief reasons.

範例: No, I am not. I moved to New Zealand 20 years ago, and at the time social media was limited and international calls were expensive, so I lost contact with most primary school teachers.

建議: Combine sentences to avoid redundancy and use linking words. Be specific about methods she used (e.g., exercises, feedback). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: She helped me most with Spanish grammar and pronunciation. For example, she gave clear explanations and practical exercises, and she corrected my pronunciation patiently during speaking activities.

建議: Clarify comparisons and correct grammar. Use one linking phrase to compare and avoid contradictory connectors. Be specific about what ‘teaching standard’ means or give an example.

範例: I wouldn't say I prefer primary over high school teachers. Although primary school in China felt more relaxed compared with New Zealand high schools, I found that both levels had dedicated teachers who taught effectively in different ways.

× Everyone in my Spanish class love her.

✓ Everyone in my Spanish class loves her.

Subject 'Everyone' is singular, so the verb must be singular 'loves'. Use subject-verb agreement: replace 'love' with 'loves'.

× I would like to be a private linked tutor.

✓ I would like to be a private tutor who offers tutoring online/linked services.

The phrase 'private linked tutor' is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace with a clear noun phrase: 'private tutor' and add a relative clause or modifier (for example 'who offers online tutoring' or 'who provides linked services') to convey the intended meaning.

× I would like to set up my own school and teach Mandarin speaking students English.

✓ I would like to set up my own school and teach Mandarin-speaking students English.

Compound adjective 'Mandarin-speaking' should be hyphenated when placed before the noun. This is a punctuation/word-formation convention; use 'Mandarin-speaking students'.

× She's from Beijing.

✓ She was from Beijing.

Context: the student is referring to a past teacher. If the teacher taught in the past and may no longer be there, use past tense 'was'. However, if the teacher still lives in Beijing, 'She's from Beijing' is acceptable. Choose tense to match intended meaning.

× she was a straight teacher, but however I was her favorite student and she always say good things about me.

✓ She was a strict teacher, but I was her favorite student and she always said good things about me.

Multiple errors: 'straight' should be 'strict' (word choice). 'However' is redundant with 'but'; remove one. 'say' must be past tense 'said' to match 'she was' and the past narrative. Maintain consistent past tense.

× so I don't contact with my primary school teacher.

✓ so I don't contact my primary school teachers.

The verb 'contact' does not take the preposition 'with' when used in this transitive sense in this context; say 'contact my teachers'. Also plural 'teachers' matches earlier plural context. Use present simple to state a habitual fact: 'I don't contact'.

× Long distance calls were very costly and it is quite extravagant to always make long distance calls so I don't contact with my primary school teacher.

✓ Long-distance calls were very costly and it was quite extravagant to make them often, so I didn't contact my primary school teachers.

Tense inconsistency and awkward phrasing: match past time frame (20 years ago) with past tense 'was'/'didn't contact'. Hyphenate 'Long-distance'. Remove 'always' and rephrase to 'make them often' or 'make them frequently'. Also fix 'contact with' to 'contact'.

× My favorite teacher has helped me with my Spanish grammar, which I found extremely difficult.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me with my Spanish grammar, which I found extremely difficult.

Context refers to completed help in the past classroom; simple past 'helped' is more appropriate than present perfect 'has helped' if speaking about a past class. Keep tense consistent: use past simple for past events.

× And she also helped me to improve my Spanish pronunciation as well.

✓ She also helped me improve my Spanish pronunciation.

Avoid redundancy: 'and', 'also', and 'as well' together are repetitive. Use 'She also helped me improve...' and omit 'to' after 'helped' when followed by a bare infinitive in this structure.

× I can't say that I like my primary school teachers more than my high school teachers, although the atmosphere is more relaxed and high school classes here in New Zealand then primary schools in China.

✓ I can't say that I like my primary school teachers more than my high school teachers, although the atmosphere in high school classes here in New Zealand is more relaxed than in primary schools in China.

Comparative structure is incorrect: use 'more relaxed than' to compare two things and maintain parallel structure. Place 'in high school classes' before 'is more relaxed than in primary schools' and use 'than' not 'then'.

× But however I would say that by teaching standard, all teachers I came across are equally good.

✓ However, I would say that, by teaching standards, all the teachers I came across are equally good.

Avoid 'But however' (redundant). Use 'However' alone. Add commas for clarity and correct noun phrase: 'by teaching standards' (plural) and include definite article 'the teachers' to refer to teachers encountered. Maintain past tense 'came across'.