教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more coherent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (why you like her and an example). Avoid filler words (uh) and correct grammar (she is my teacher, not classmate).

範例: Yes, my favorite teacher is my English teacher. She is very kind and always smiles, which makes the lessons enjoyable. For example, she spent extra time after class helping me improve my writing, and that really boosted my confidence.

建議: Begin with a direct statement answering the question, then give two clear reasons using linking words. Fix grammar and use concise language. For instance, say ‘I don’t want to be a teacher because…’ then add reasons with connectors like ‘because’ or ‘since’.

範例: No, I don’t want to be a teacher in the future because it is a very demanding job and teachers often work long hours. Also, the salary is relatively low, so I prefer a career with better pay and more free time.

建議: Give a direct answer and, if you cannot remember, explain briefly and clearly why. Avoid confusion and irrelevant phrases. Use one linking phrase like ‘because’ to clarify. Keep it short and grammatical.

範例: No, I can’t remember a specific teacher from my past because I moved schools several times when I was young and lost contact with my early teachers.

建議: Respond directly and then provide a clear reason using correct grammar and linking words. Say who you mean (teachers) and use past/time expressions (for a long time).

範例: No, I’m not still in touch with my primary school teachers because I haven’t seen them for a long time after I changed schools. We don’t have a way to contact each other now.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence saying how she helped, then give a specific example and use past tense correctly. Use linking words like ‘so’ or ‘by’ to show method.

範例: She helped me improve my grades last year by giving me extra lessons and discussing my progress with other teachers. Because of her help, my exam scores improved significantly.

建議: Answer directly, then compare clearly using comparative structures. Use one or two specific reasons and correct tenses. Avoid vague phrases like ‘best of the best’ and unclear time references.

範例: No, I prefer my high school teachers because one of them taught me from around grade five and helped me a lot. She was very supportive and made difficult subjects easy to understand, so I admire her more.

× Yes, I have a favorite teacher, uh, this teacher, uh, English teacher, she is uh, uh, beautiful teacher and uh, she is kind and smile.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher. She is my English teacher. She is beautiful, kind, and always smiling.

Original sentence has incorrect adjective usage and missing articles. 'beautiful teacher' should be 'beautiful' or 'a beautiful teacher' and 'smile' should be the adjective/participle 'smiling' or phrase 'she smiles often'. Also run-on fragments need splitting into sentences. Suggestion: use articles and appropriate adjective forms: 'a beautiful teacher', 'always smiling'.

× I love this teacher and uh, she is my classmate.

✓ I love this teacher, and she is my class teacher.

The original 'my classmate' conflicts with context; likely intended 'my class teacher' or 'my teacher in class'. Also comma needed before 'and'. Suggest clarifying relationship: 'my class teacher' or 'my homeroom teacher'.

× I know I don't want to become a teacher and in the future because this is hard job and this job. Not many payment and I.

✓ I know I don't want to become a teacher in the future because it is a hard job and it doesn't pay well.

Problems: word order and tense/verb forms. Use present simple for general statements: 'it is a hard job' and negative with 'doesn't pay well' instead of 'Not many payment'. Remove extra fragments. Suggest using 'it' to refer to the job and correct verb 'doesn't pay'.

× No. Why? No, I don't have a teacher from my past and I don't remember here because my teacher, I go with me in my childhood, from my childhood when she won.

✓ No, I don't have a teacher from my past that I remember. My teacher was with me in my childhood, but I don't remember her clearly.

Original contains fragments, unclear pronouns, and incorrect verbs ('won'). Restructure into clear sentences: use relative clause 'that I remember'. Use past simple 'was with me' and 'don't remember her clearly'. Avoid ambiguous words.

× No, we are not still touch with my primary school teacher because they are don't come to school and I don't see they in a long time.

✓ No, we are not still in touch with my primary school teachers because they don't come to school and I haven't seen them for a long time.

Incorrect pronouns and verb forms: use 'in touch with' correct word order; plural 'teachers' requires 'them' not 'they'. Use 'don't come' (or 'no longer come') and present perfect 'haven't seen' for an action continuing to present. Also remove 'we are not still touch' and replace with 'we are not still in touch' or better 'we are not in touch'.

× My favorite teacher helped me with my school marks in last year because my school marks was a bad and she is go with to teachers and talk about.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me with my school marks last year because my marks were bad, and she spoke to the other teachers about it.

Use simple past 'helped' and 'last year' (no 'in'). Use plural 'marks were bad' (subject-verb agreement). 'She is go with to teachers and talk about' is incorrect; use past 'she spoke to the other teachers about it' or 'she talked to other teachers'. Ensure tense consistency.

× No I don't like my primary school teachers than my high school teacher because my high school teacher is the best of the best teacher and she go with me from five class or 4 I don't remember and she was the best.

✓ No, I don't like my primary school teachers more than my high school teacher because my high school teacher is the best. She has taught me since around fourth or fifth grade, I don't remember exactly, and she was the best.

Errors: comparative structure 'don't like X more than Y' needs 'more than' and clarity. Original mixed pronouns and tenses. Use 'more than' and simplify 'the best of the best' to 'the best'. Use present perfect 'has taught me since' or simple past 'taught me since' to indicate duration; provide approximate grade phrasing 'around fourth or fifth grade'. Keep tense consistency.