教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence naming the teacher, then add one or two specific examples of how she helps. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words for coherence.

範例: Yes. My favorite teacher is my high school math teacher because she is very passionate about teaching. For example, she stays after class to explain difficult problems and gives clear step-by-step methods, so I understand concepts better.

建議: Clarify tenses and choose natural verbs. Give a brief reason and one supporting detail using a linking word (because/so) to make your answer more specific and logical.

範例: Yes, I do. I am studying at a pedagogy university because I enjoy helping students learn, and I hope that, with training and practice, I will become an effective teacher.

建議: Make the sentence complete and avoid repetition. State clearly why she was memorable and give a specific example of what she did, using linking words like for example or because to connect ideas.

範例: Yes. My most memorable teacher is my English teacher because she encouraged me to speak more and corrected my mistakes kindly; for example, she held weekly conversation clubs that improved my confidence.

建議: Avoid fillers and unclear time expressions. Give a clear, concise answer with a precise reason and one brief detail about when you graduated.

範例: No, I'm not. I graduated from primary school about ten years ago, so we lost contact after moving to different cities.

建議: Be specific about the ways she helped. Use one or two concrete examples and linking words to show results (for example, as a result, so) and avoid vague phrases like "she helps" repeated.

範例: She made lessons interactive and gave regular speaking practice; as a result, I became more confident in conversations and improved my pronunciation.

建議: Use clear comparative language and correct grammar. State your preference in one sentence and support it with two specific reasons, using linking words like because or since. Avoid hesitations and repetitions.

範例: I prefer my high school teachers because they were friendlier and more professional; for instance, they used modern teaching methods and gave helpful feedback on my work.

× That's that is my math teacher who is passionate about her career.

✓ That is my math teacher, who is passionate about her career.

Redundant word 'That's that is' and missing comma before defining relative clause. Remove the duplicate 'that is' and add a comma to separate the main clause and nonrestrictive relative clause. Use: 'That is my math teacher, who is passionate about her career.'

× She always helps me and other classmates if I have any problem in.

✓ She always helps me and my classmates if I have any problems.

Incorrect preposition 'in' at the end and singular 'problem' when general. Use 'my classmates' (possessive) and plural 'problems' for general situations. Place 'if' clause correctly: 'if I have any problems.'

× I'm always yearning about being a teacher, so I had registered to a pedagogy university and I hope that one day I'll be a good teacher.

✓ I've always yearned to be a teacher, so I registered at a pedagogical university and I hope that one day I'll be a good teacher.

Verb choice and tense issues: 'yearning about' is incorrect; 'yearn to' or 'yearn for' is used. Present perfect 'I've always yearned' matches continuing desire. Use simple past 'registered' (completed action) rather than 'had registered' unless comparing past events. Preposition: 'registered at' or 'enrolled in' and adjective 'pedagogical' (not 'pedagogy university').

× The most memorable teacher to me is my English teacher who inspires me to learn English effectively because she always helped me to improve my English skills by always.

✓ The most memorable teacher to me is my English teacher, who inspired me to learn English effectively because she always helped me improve my English skills.

Tense inconsistency: use past 'inspired' and 'helped' for a past teacher. Redundant 'to' after 'helped me' and duplicate 'always' at end. Add comma before nonrestrictive clause. Remove extra words: 'helped me improve' is correct.

× Unfortunately, I'm no longer keep in touch with them because, you know, I am 20, so it means that, uh, it was about 10:10 or more years that I graduated from primary school.

✓ Unfortunately, I no longer keep in touch with them because I am 20, so it has been about ten or more years since I graduated from primary school.

Incorrect verb form 'I'm no longer keep' should be 'I no longer keep' or 'I am no longer in touch'. Use 'it has been ... since' to express time since graduation. '10:10' is incorrect; use 'ten' or 'ten or more years.' Remove filler words.

× As I mentioned, my most memorable teacher is my English teacher because she always made the lessons interesting and encourage me to speak more confidently, so she helps. She helped me quite a lot.

✓ As I mentioned, my most memorable teacher is my English teacher because she always made the lessons interesting and encouraged me to speak more confidently. She helped me quite a lot.

Mixed tenses: 'made' (past) should match 'encouraged' (past) not 'encourage'. Remove 'so she helps' which is awkward and redundant. Keep consistent past tense when describing past teacher's actions.

× Personally, I prefer my high school teachers because I feel like they are more friendly and more well they they have better but teaching performance and their professional.

✓ Personally, I prefer my high school teachers because I feel they are friendlier and better teachers; they are more professional and have better teaching performance.

Multiple errors: comparative form 'more friendly' -> 'friendlier'. Remove duplicated words 'they they' and misplaced 'but'. Reorder for clarity: 'friendlier and better teachers' or 'more professional and have better teaching performance.' Use consistent comparative structures.