教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答总体清楚，但可以更自然、更紧凑，并补充具体例子以增加说服力。避免重复“math”的表述，使用连接词使句子更连贯。控制在不超过5句内。

範例: Yes. My favourite teacher in primary school was my maths teacher because he used funny stories to make difficult ideas simple. For example, he compared fractions to slices of pizza, which made the concept memorable and fun. As a result, I began to enjoy maths and felt more confident solving problems.

建議: 回答直接且信息充足，但第一句“Yes, I do”显得多余，可合并。可以用一两句补充为什么喜欢教学或未来目标，增加深度并保持自然流畅。

範例: Yes. I'm already a teacher — I've taught history at a secondary school for about ten years. I enjoy helping students connect past events to today's world, and I hope to develop more project-based lessons in the future.

建議: 内容明确但存在语言错误和模糊表达（例如“doing pony”不符合英语习惯，应为“doing poorly”或“struggling”）。建议用一到两句具体描绘老师如何帮助（教学方法、例子），并使用连接词使叙述更连贯。

範例: Yes. I still remember my secondary school English teacher. I was struggling with English at the time, but she gave me extra exercises and one-to-one feedback, which steadily improved my confidence and grades.

建議: 回答简洁但略显断裂（句子碎片“Actually.”）。可以合并句子并补充原因或感受，使回答更完整且自然，例如说明尝试过联系或为什么不保持联系。

範例: No, I'm not. I haven't been in contact with them for many years and unfortunately I no longer have their contact details, so I haven't been able to reach out.

建議: 回答具体且有细节，但可以更连贯并解释书籍如何帮助你（例如提升阅读、扩大词汇），用连接词衔接句子并避免重复信息。

範例: My favourite teacher was my secondary school English teacher. She encouraged me to work hard and even lent me a book by Jack London, which I still keep; reading it improved my vocabulary and made me more interested in English literature.

建議: 回答理由充分但语法和表达可更自然（避免重复“forget”相关短语）。建议压缩为两到三句，并用连接词表明因果，同时可加入简短结论。

範例: It's hard to compare because I've been away from school for over twenty years and have forgotten many teachers' faces and names. So I can't fairly say I prefer one group over the other.

× I remember at that time I was doing pony in English and I needed a lot of help.

✓ I remember at that time I was doing poorly in English and I needed a lot of help.

原句中“pony”不是正确单词，应该是“poorly”（表现差）或“poorly in English”表示“在英语学得不好”。另一方面，句子使用过去进行时“was doing”与表示当时状态的“poorly”搭配合理，保持时态与语境一致。建议多注意常用词汇拼写与固定搭配。

× One of teachers that I still remember is my English teacher from my secondary school.

✓ One of the teachers that I still remember is my English teacher from my secondary school.

原句缺少定冠词“the”造成名词短语不完整，应为“One of the teachers”表示“我记得的老师之一”。这是典型的限定词省略问题，添加“the”后主谓结构和名词短语都正确。建议复习“one of the + 复数名词”结构。

× I have long lost their contacts.

✓ I have long lost their contact information.

原句中“contacts”虽然可理解，但与代词“their”搭配不太自然，且在正式场合更常用“contact information”或“contacts”用于表示联系人时也常用复数，但“lost their contacts”建议改为“lost their contact information/phone numbers”。此外“have long lost”时态正确。建议使用更地道的固定搭配。

× Well, it's really hard to compare because I have been away from school for more than 20 years or I have nearly forgotten all of my teachers.

✓ Well, it's really hard to compare because I have been away from school for more than 20 years, so I have nearly forgotten all of my teachers.

原句用连词“or”连接两个因果相关的分句不合适，应使用“so”或“and”来表达结果关系。句子结构上需要一个表示因果/结果的连接词，以便逻辑通顺。建议注意连词的逻辑功能，选择符合语意的连词。

× Are you still in touch with your primary school teachers? Student: No, I'm not. Actually. I haven't contacted these teachers for a long time.

✓ Are you still in touch with your primary school teachers? Student: No, I'm not. Actually, I haven't contacted those teachers for a long time.

原句中“these teachers”通常指靠近说话者的人或事物，而谈论过去的老师时应使用“those teachers”。此外句中“Actually.”不应单独成句，应与后半句合并为“Actually, I haven't...”。建议注意指示代词“this/these/that/those”的远近区分以及句子标点和断句。

× he made many funny stories to encourage us to study math and he illustrated the importance of math.

✓ he told many funny stories to encourage us to study math and he illustrated the importance of math.

原句中“made many funny stories”措辞不自然，英语中常用“tell stories”或“create stories”。将“made”改为“told”更符合语义。整体时态和意思保持不变。建议熟悉常见动词与名词搭配（collocation）。

× I teach history at a secondary school.

✓ I teach history at a secondary school.

该句语法正确，无需修改——“a secondary school”用法恰当，因此保留原句。

× When I was at primary school, my favorite teacher was my math teacher because he made many funny stories to encourage us to study math and he illustrated the importance of math.

✓ When I was at primary school, my favorite teacher was my math teacher because he told many funny stories to encourage us to study math and he illustrated the importance of math.

与前述“made stories”问题相同，动词“made”与“stories”搭配不自然，应用第三人称过去时“told”。句中主语为“he”，动词用过去式“told”符合第三人称单数过去时的要求。建议记忆常见搭配并注意人称与时态一致。