教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and add one specific detail about what made the teacher memorable using a linking word. Keep it under 4-5 sentences.

範例: I have several favorite teachers, but my history teacher stands out the most. His explanations were very clear and he used stories about ancient people and cultures to make lessons interesting. For example, he showed us artifacts and videos that helped me remember events easily, so I really enjoyed his classes.

建議: Provide a concise topic sentence and polish grammar. Use linking words to explain reasons and give a specific example of your father’s influence. Avoid redundancy.

範例: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future. When I was a child I admired my father because he always encouraged and supported his students, and many of them succeeded. For instance, he helped a shy pupil improve confidence by giving extra tutoring, which inspired me to follow his example.

建議: Improve grammar and coherence by combining short sentences and adding linking words. Give a specific memory or example to make the answer more vivid.

範例: Yes, I still remember my history teacher very well because he used videos and images to explain topics clearly. As a result, I could visualize historical events and remember them easily. For example, a documentary he showed about Roman life stayed with me for years.

建議: Make the answer more fluent and concise. Use linking words to explain cause and contrast, and avoid unnecessary phrases. Provide one brief detail about how you keep memories instead.

範例: No, I am not in touch with them because I moved to another region after primary school. However, some of my friends still meet their teachers occasionally. I keep in touch with those memories by looking at old photos from school.

建議: Correct grammar and clarify the meaning. Use a topic sentence, then give one specific example of how the teacher helped you and a linking word to show effect. Avoid self-deprecating phrases like 'lazy' without context.

範例: My favorite teacher helped me by explaining difficult topics in a simple, step-by-step way. For example, he broke lessons into small tasks and gave encouraging feedback, so I became more motivated and improved my grades.

建議: Give a clear reason and a specific contrast between primary and high school teachers. Use linking words and correct grammar to explain why you prefer them.

範例: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers because they focused on building good study habits and inspired me early on. For instance, they taught me how to organize my time and encouraged me, whereas high school teachers were more exam-focused.

× I have several favorite teachers, one of them is history teacher.

✓ I have several favorite teachers; one of them is a history teacher.

Missing indefinite article before singular countable noun 'history teacher'. Use 'a' to indicate one among many and use a semicolon or conjunction to connect clauses properly.

× His explanation so good and he taught us about ancient people, historical cultures and other things.

✓ His explanations are so good, and he taught us about ancient peoples, historical cultures, and other topics.

Missing verb 'are' for the adjective 'good' and pluralize 'explanation' to 'explanations' to match context. Use plural 'peoples' when referring to distinct groups and 'topics' is more appropriate than 'other things'. Add commas for list separation.

× I love his lessons.

✓ I love his lessons.

Sentence is correct; no change needed. (No grammar problem from the provided list.)

× Yes, I do. When I was a child, I wanted to be a teacher like my father because he inspired many students to achieve success and he supported all the time.

✓ Yes, I do. When I was a child, I wanted to be a teacher like my father because he inspired many students to achieve success and he supported them all the time.

Missing object 'them' after 'supported' to show who received the support. Maintain past tense 'was' and 'wanted'; 'inspired' and 'supported' are correct past forms.

× His students admitted him as a knowledgeable teacher.

✓ His students regarded him as a knowledgeable teacher.

'Admitted' is incorrect in this context; 'regarded' or 'considered' correctly expresses that students viewed him as knowledgeable. 'Admitted' means confessed, which is unintended.

× I had a history teacher and I liked his lessons all the time.

✓ I had a history teacher, and I always liked his lessons.

'All the time' is awkward here; 'always' is a better adverb for frequency. Comma before conjunction improves readability.

× He explained a lot of topics by using videos and images.

✓ He explained many topics by using videos and images.

Use 'many' with countable noun 'topics' instead of 'a lot of' for slightly more formal phrasing; original is acceptable but this correction improves register.

× His explanation so clear.

✓ His explanations were so clear.

Missing verb 'were' to link subject and adjective; plural 'explanations' fits repeated lessons. Past tense 'were' matches surrounding past narration.

× He was skilled teacher.

✓ He was a skilled teacher.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before singular countable noun 'skilled teacher'.

× I remember all the time his lessons.

✓ I always remember his lessons.

Word order and adverb placement: place frequency adverb 'always' before the verb phrase for natural English. Original word order is awkward.

× No I'm not because I moved to another region after primary school and I rarely see them, but I have several friends and they are still in touch with their teachers and meet occasionally.

✓ No, I'm not, because I moved to another region after primary school and I rarely see them. I do have several friends who are still in touch with their teachers and meet them occasionally.

Add commas for clarity and split into two sentences for readability. Add 'who' to introduce relative clause and 'them' to clarify 'meet occasionally'.

× My favorite teacher is taught me in a easy way to learn new things because I was so lazy and I didn't want to learn new things and they inspired me and supported to achieve success.

✓ My favorite teacher taught me in an easy way to learn new things because I was lazy and didn't want to learn, and they inspired and supported me to achieve success.

Use past simple 'taught' instead of passive 'is taught'. 'a easy' should be 'an easy'. Remove repeated phrases and correct object placement: 'supported me'. Ensure pronoun agreement: 'they' is plural but context earlier refers to one teacher; if singular, use 'he' or 'she'.

× Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

✓ Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

Question sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed.

× Yes, I do. When I started primary school I learned plenty of things to achieve success and those teachers were so skilled and they inspired to me to achieve success.

✓ Yes, I do. When I started primary school, I learned many things that helped me achieve success, and those teachers were very skilled; they inspired me to succeed.

'Plenty of things' can be replaced by 'many things' or 'a lot of things' for naturalness. Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'inspired' and place 'me' after the verb: 'inspired me'. Add commas and semicolon for clarity and improve word choice ('succeed' instead of repeated 'achieve success').