教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No) and then briefly explain why with one or two specific reasons and avoid repetition and filler words. Use correct grammar (e.g., plural/singular agreement) and a natural phrase for changing preferences over time.

範例: No, I don't have a single favorite teacher. I’ve had many excellent teachers at different stages of my life, and my preference has changed as I grew older because different teachers helped me in different ways.

建議: Give a clearer reason and fewer hesitations. Use a topic sentence 'No' then provide one clear reason with concise supporting detail. Avoid long, unclear phrases and practice vocabulary for focus and public speaking.

範例: No, I don't want to be a teacher. I would struggle to stay focused for long lessons and I don't enjoy speaking in front of large groups, so I don't think teaching would suit me.

建議: Good: direct topic sentence and specific supporting details. Improve coherence by removing repetition and using linking words (e.g., 'for example', 'because') and correct tense/word choice. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and vary vocabulary (engaging → enthusiastic).

範例: Yes, I remember my high school English teacher very well. She was enthusiastic and used humor to make lessons enjoyable. For example, when I needed extra help she gave me additional materials and explained things patiently, which greatly improved my confidence.

建議: Answer directly and use past simple or present perfect correctly. Briefly explain the attempt to contact and the reason contact failed. Avoid excessive fillers and unclear timeline words.

範例: No, I am not still in touch with them. I once visited my primary school to see one teacher, but I was told he had retired after we graduated, so I couldn't thank him personally.

建議: Be specific about the help and explain the results. Start with a topic sentence then give one or two concrete examples of how the teacher supported you and how it improved your confidence or skills. Use clearer vocabulary for activities and avoid unclear phrases.

範例: My favorite teacher helped me by encouraging me to practice physical skills patiently. For example, she gave me extra exercises and simple drills to build strength and coordination, and as a result my confidence in PE improved.

建議: Make a clear comparison using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'whereas'). State your preference in one sentence and give one specific reason for each side. Avoid repetition and correct grammar (verb forms, articles).

範例: I prefer my primary school teachers because they encouraged me to be myself and focus on personal growth, whereas my high school teachers focused more on exam results, which was stressful because I'm not good at taking tests.

× I don't, even though I've encountered a lot of good teacher in my life, but I think favoritism to teacher was change uh, in different age of life.

✓ I don't, even though I've encountered a lot of good teachers in my life, but I think my favorite teacher changed at different ages of my life.

The noun 'teacher' should be plural ('teachers') because 'a lot of' requires a plural noun. Also 'favoritism to teacher was change' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'my favorite teacher changed' to convey meaning. Use 'ages' plural and 'changed' past tense to match 'encountered'. Suggestion: use plural nouns after quantifiers (a lot of + plural) and ensure verbs agree with subjects and tense.

× So uh, I, I can name exactly one of my favorite teacher in my life.

✓ So I can name exactly one of my favorite teachers in my life.

The phrase 'one of my favorite teacher' is ungrammatical because 'one of' must be followed by a plural noun ('teachers'). Also remove filler 'uh' and duplicate 'I' for clarity. Suggestion: after 'one of', use plural nouns and avoid unnecessary repetitions.

× No, I don't because, uh, as a student, I don't stay for, I can't stay focused for the world class and I don't enjoy seeing peop seeing people or student uh under the stage are uh are doing their doing their stuff as a teacher, I would feel, I mean, I think I, I may feel dismayed and distracted.

✓ No, I don't because, as a student, I can't stay focused in a classroom and I don't enjoy seeing people or students on the stage doing their things; as a teacher I think I would feel dismayed and distracted.

Incorrect and redundant modal/auxiliary usage ('don't stay for, I can't stay focused for the world class') and awkward phrasing. Use 'can't' for inability and 'would' for hypothetical future feelings as a teacher. Preposition 'in a classroom' is correct rather than 'for the world class'. Remove repetitions and fix 'people or student' to 'people or students'. Suggestion: use modals to express ability/inability (can/can't) and would for hypothetical scenarios; simplify and use correct prepositions ('in a classroom').

× She was very engaging and had a great sense of humor, where she makes the English class become more funny and interesting.

✓ She was very engaging and had a great sense of humor; she made the English class more fun and interesting.

Tense inconsistency: sentence begins in past tense ('was', 'had') but uses present tense 'makes'. Change 'makes' to past 'made'. 'Become more funny' is awkward; use 'more fun'. Use appropriate conjunction or punctuation instead of 'where'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent when referring to a past teacher and prefer 'fun' over 'funny' for class atmosphere.

× And she when when when I need some extra help, she brought me additional materials and explained things passionately, which really improved my confidence.

✓ And when I needed some extra help, she brought me additional materials and explained things passionately, which really improved my confidence.

Tense mismatch: 'when I need' should be past 'when I needed' to match 'brought' and 'explained'. Remove repeated 'when'. The verb forms 'brought' and 'explained' are correct past tense, not past participles here. Suggestion: ensure time clauses use the same past tense as the main clause.

× No, sadly I didn't.

✓ No, sadly I didn't stay in touch.

Reply 'No, sadly I didn't.' is incomplete and ambiguous; it's missing the object (what the speaker didn't do). Add 'stay in touch' to clarify meaning. Suggestion: include the verb or object to make the sentence complete.

× I went to, I once went, went to high, uh, my primary school and tried to pay him a visit, but uh, our teacher told me that, uh, he retired since after we graduated from high school.

✓ I once went back to my primary school and tried to pay the teacher a visit, but our teacher told me that he had retired after we graduated from high school.

Pronoun and phrase errors: 'pay him a visit' is unclear without context; use 'the teacher'. 'I went to, I once went, went to high' is disfluent; simplify. 'Retired since after' is wrong: use past perfect 'had retired' to show retirement occurred before the time of visiting. Remove redundant fillers. Suggestion: use clear nouns (the teacher), proper verb tenses (past perfect for earlier past actions) and avoid repetition.

× So, uh, and we never get able to get in touch and thank him for his kindness.

✓ So we were never able to get in touch and thank him for his kindness.

Incorrect verb phrase 'never get able to get' should be 'were never able to get' to express past ability. Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary conjunction 'and' at sentence start. Suggestion: use 'be able to' with correct tense ('were able to' for past) and avoid redundant verbs.

× Because I'm pretty bad at physical education during my high school and primary school.

✓ Because I was pretty bad at physical education during primary and high school.

Tense and preposition issue: use past 'was' because referring to past schooling. Order 'primary and high school' is more natural. 'At physical education' is acceptable but 'in physical education' is slightly better for classes; changed to 'at' retained but tense corrected. Suggestion: ensure tense matches the time reference and prefer natural school order.

× So my favorite teacher would always encourage me to, uh, pay more, pay more attention on the skill and I, I can ask excel ads such as playing experiment or playing art, that I where, where I can, where I can get back myself confidence and, uh, sense of.

✓ So my favorite teacher would always encourage me to pay more attention to the skills, and I could try extracurricular activities such as drama or art, where I could regain my confidence and sense of self.

Incorrect prepositions: 'attention on' should be 'attention to'. 'I can ask excel ads' is unintelligible; likely 'I could try extracurricular activities'. 'Playing experiment' is wrong; 'drama' or 'art' fits. 'Get back myself confidence' should be 'regain my confidence' and 'sense of self' is the correct phrase. Also adjust modals to past/hypothetical forms ('would', 'could'). Suggestion: use 'attention to', 'regain my confidence', and specific activity nouns; keep tense/modal consistency.

× It definitely would be my primary school teacher because he always encouraged me to encourage me to live out myself and break the mood.

✓ It would definitely be my primary school teacher because he always encouraged me to express myself and lift my spirits.

Redundant phrase 'encouraged me to encourage me' and awkward 'live out myself' and 'break the mood'. Use 'express myself' and 'lift my spirits' to convey positive encouragement. Keep modal 'would' placement natural. Suggestion: avoid repetition, use idiomatic expressions like 'express myself' and 'lift my spirits'.

× And whereas my high school teacher always expect me to perform good at the exam score, which is different.

✓ Whereas my high school teacher always expected me to perform well on exams, which is different.

Subject-verb agreement: 'teacher always expect' should be 'expected' to match past context and third-person singular requires 'expects' in present. 'Perform good' is incorrect; use adverb 'perform well'. 'At the exam score' is wrong; use 'on exams'. Suggestion: match verb tense to context, use adverbs for performance ('well'), and proper prepositions ('on exams').

× I I'm not bad at, I'm I'm pretty bad at taking exams.

✓ I'm not good at taking exams; I'm pretty bad at them.

Sentence is repetitive and self-contradictory. Simplify to clear statement. Use 'not good at' or 'pretty bad at' consistently and replace repeated 'I'm' fragments. Add 'them' to refer to 'exams'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and ensure the sentence clearly states ability level.