教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and combine short sentences to avoid repetition. Add one brief supporting detail with a linking word.

範例: Yes. My Cantonese tutor is my favourite because she explains difficult concepts clearly. For example, she helped me practice tones during our meeting in Macau last month, which improved my pronunciation.

建議: Respond directly about whether you want to be a teacher, use correct tense and clearer structure. Begin with a topic sentence stating your desire, then give one specific reason using linking words. Avoid repeated words and unclear phrasing.

範例: I might, but I am not sure. Although I’ve studied animation for 11 years and have considered teaching animation classes, I find it challenging to enjoy teaching full-time, so I am still deciding.

建議: Use correct verb tenses and a clear linking word to show sequence. Start with a topic sentence about remembering a teacher, then give a specific example and its effect on you.

範例: Yes, I remember my junior college teacher who taught me 3D animation using Blender. Because of him, I started researching more about animation and discovered what could be my future hobby, so I really appreciate his guidance.

建議: Answer the exact question (primary school teachers) and keep sentences coherent. Use correct past tense and avoid filler words. If you mean college teachers, state that clearly and give one specific example of contact.

範例: Not really with my primary school teachers. However, I still meet my college teacher sometimes; for example, we had dinner with classmates recently and talked about our current projects and careers.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence explaining how the teacher helped, then give one specific result. Avoid vague adjectives and filler words; use precise verbs and nouns.

範例: My favourite professors pushed me to try new ideas, which helped me develop an outstanding and more outgoing portfolio. For example, their feedback encouraged me to include experimental 3D pieces that impressed recruiters.

建議: Answer directly and calmly, use correct grammar and clear chronology. State a comparison, give one specific reason with linking words, and avoid repetition. If describing past conflict, keep language concise and factual.

範例: No, I prefer my primary school teachers. I had bad experiences in high school because some teachers ignored instances of bullying and even punished me unfairly, so I don’t remember them fondly.

× We have meet up in Macau last month.

✓ We met up in Macau last month.

The present perfect 'have' requires a past participle (met). However, the time expression 'last month' specifies a finished past time, so simple past 'met' is more appropriate. Use 'met' for completed actions at a specific past time.

× I try to have a preparation about animation class 'cause I have learned animation for 11 years, but for me it is a difficult way to to enjoy.

✓ I'm trying to prepare for an animation class because I have studied animation for 11 years, but for me it is difficult to enjoy it.

Use progressive 'I'm trying' to show current effort. 'Have a preparation' is incorrect; use 'prepare' or 'prepare for'. Use 'because' instead of informal ''cause'. 'Have learned' is acceptable but 'have studied' is clearer for duration. 'Difficult to to enjoy' has repeated 'to' and needs an object 'it'.

× When I was in junior college, my former teacher taught me 3D animation blender. I start to research more and I feel like I found my future hobby, so I really appreciate him.

✓ When I was in junior college, my former teacher taught me 3D animation using Blender. I started to research more and I felt like I had found my future hobby, so I really appreciated him.

'Blender' is a proper noun for the software and needs 'using' or similar. 'I start' should be past ('I started') to match 'When I was'. 'I feel like I found' mixes tenses; use past 'I felt like I had found' or 'I felt I had found' to show completed realization. Also maintain past-tense consistency within the narrative.

× The last time I had meet up with my college teacher, we have dinner together and hang out with other classmates to like, talk, talk about invention, what we are doing and work work.

✓ The last time I met up with my college teacher, we had dinner together and hung out with other classmates to talk about inventions, what we are doing, and work.

'Had meet up' is incorrect: use simple past 'met' for a specific past event. Then use past 'had' and 'hung out' to keep past-tense consistency. Remove filler 'to like' and duplicate words 'talk, talk' and 'work work'. 'Invention' should be plural 'inventions' if general topics are meant.

× Actually, many of my professors were conservative, but I really appreciate them. Because of them, I have a like outgoing, outstanding portfolio.

✓ Actually, many of my professors were conservative, but I really appreciate them. Because of them, I have an outgoing, outstanding portfolio.

'I have a like outgoing' is ungrammatical. Remove 'like' and use the article 'an' before a vowel sound adjective cluster. Keep adjectives in correct order and remove unnecessary words.

× I have really bad memories about my high school teachers.

✓ I have really bad memories of my high school teachers.

Use 'memories of' rather than 'memories about' for typical collocation in English.

× Currently they they ignore the ignore that what happened because me and between me and my classmates they bullied me but she didn't say anything and she even punished me punish all.

✓ Currently they ignore what happened between me and my classmates; they bullied me, but she didn't say anything and even punished me.

The sentence has many pronoun and structural errors. Remove duplicated 'they'. Use 'ignore what happened between me and my classmates' for correct preposition and object order. 'Because me and between me and my classmates they bullied me' is incorrect; rephrase to 'they bullied me'. Use proper subject 'she' with correct verbs 'didn't say' and 'punished'. Ensure clauses are ordered logically and unnecessary repetitions removed.