教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific examples of what makes the teacher good. Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes. My favorite teacher at college teaches artificial intelligence and I really enjoy his lessons. He comes three times a week and explains difficult concepts with clear examples and practical exercises, which makes the subject easier to understand. For instance, he uses real-world case studies that help me see how algorithms work in practice.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and then provide a clear reason with one supporting detail. Avoid vague or philosophical statements that confuse the listener.

範例: No, I don't want to be a teacher. I prefer roles where I can focus on technical work rather than teaching, because I enjoy building systems more than explaining concepts to others. For example, I prefer programming and research tasks that let me solve problems independently.

建議: Start with a clear statement naming the teacher and then give specific memories or examples of what they did that made them memorable. Use linking words to organize points.

範例: Yes, I remember my high school math teacher very well. He not only taught difficult topics clearly but also encouraged discipline by giving regular homework and motivating students with small rewards. For instance, he would stay after class to explain algebra problems to anyone who was struggling.

建議: Answer directly and give a specific reason and a brief future intention. Keep sentences concise and correct tense usage.

範例: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers because I moved to another city for my bachelor's degree. However, I would like to meet them someday to thank them and ask for their advice about career and life choices.

建議: Be specific about how the teacher helped and finish your sentence. Use one or two concrete examples and linking words such as 'for example' or 'as a result'.

範例: She helped me overcome shyness and become more confident in public speaking. For example, she encouraged me to join class discussions and gave positive feedback after presentations, so as a result I now feel comfortable speaking in college seminars and social settings.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and then support with one or two specific comparisons. Avoid exaggerated phrases and keep it concise.

範例: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers because they were friendlier and more caring than my high school teachers. For instance, primary teachers spent time talking to students individually and created a homely atmosphere, which made learning less stressful.

× Yes, I have my I have a favorite teacher in my college who teaches me artificial intelligence.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher at my college who teaches artificial intelligence.

The original sentence repeats 'I have' and uses an awkward preposition 'in my college'. Remove the duplicate phrase and use the correct preposition 'at' for institutions like college. Suggestion: say 'a favorite teacher at my college'.

× He usually comes three times in a week and teaches us artificial intelligence.

✓ He usually comes three times a week to teach us artificial intelligence.

The phrase 'in a week' is less natural than 'a week' and word order is awkward. Place frequency expression 'three times a week' after 'usually' and use an infinitive clause 'to teach us' for clarity. Suggestion: 'He usually comes three times a week to teach us artificial intelligence.'

× I love the way of teaching.

✓ I love his way of teaching.

'The way of teaching' is vague and lacks an agent. Use possessive 'his' to indicate whose teaching method you mean and natural collocation is 'way of teaching'. Suggestion: 'I love his way of teaching.'

× It usually makes me feel comfortable and very easier to understand.

✓ It usually makes me feel comfortable and makes it much easier to understand.

'Very easier' is ungrammatical; 'easier' cannot combine with 'very'—use 'much easier' or 'far easier'. Also clarify the subject 'it' and parallel structure by repeating the verb. Suggestion: 'It usually makes me feel comfortable and makes it much easier to understand.'

× No, I usually don't enjoy sharing my knowledge to others.

✓ No, I usually don't enjoy sharing my knowledge with others.

Use the preposition 'with' after 'sharing' rather than 'to'. The modal/auxiliary 'don't enjoy' is fine. Suggestion: 'I don't enjoy sharing my knowledge with others.'

× I feel like knowledge is given, not taken or taught.

✓ I feel that knowledge is given, not taken or taught.

Use 'that' instead of 'like' to introduce a clause expressing opinion. 'Like' is for comparisons or informal speech. The rest is acceptable. Suggestion: 'I feel that knowledge is given, not taken or taught.'

× Yes, I still remember my teacher from my school who taught me to be disciplined and be motivated.

✓ Yes, I still remember my school teacher who taught me to be disciplined and motivated.

Avoid redundant 'my teacher from my school'; 'my school teacher' is more natural. Also parallel structure: 'to be disciplined and motivated' can be simplified to 'disciplined and motivated'. Suggestion: 'I still remember my school teacher who taught me to be disciplined and motivated.'

× I really want to talk about my teacher who taught me math because it was really hard to understand.

✓ I really want to talk about my math teacher because the subject was really hard to understand.

Clarify 'it' by specifying 'the subject' and make sentence smoother by using 'math teacher' and 'the subject was really hard to understand.' Suggestion: 'I want to talk about my math teacher because the subject was really hard to understand.'

× No, it had been long time since I met them or spoke to them because I had to move to another city to do my bachelors.

✓ No, it has been a long time since I met or spoke to them because I had to move to another city to do my bachelor's degree.

Use present perfect 'has been' for a period continuing to the present. Add article 'a' before 'long time' and use 'bachelor's degree' for correct noun form. Also drop redundant 'them' after 'met'. Suggestion: 'It has been a long time since I met or spoke to them; I had to move to another city to do my bachelor's degree.'

× So I usually don't talk to them but I really want to meet them and take their advices.

✓ So I usually don't talk to them, but I would really like to meet them and get their advice.

'Advices' is uncountable; use 'advice'. Use 'would really like' for polite desire and 'get their advice' or 'seek their advice' is natural. Suggestion: 'I would really like to meet them and get their advice.'

× My favorite teacher helped me to overcome my shyness and speak confidently whether I'm in school or maybe in college or maybe maybe in the society with people.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me overcome my shyness and speak confidently, whether I was at school, in college, or in social situations.

Use parallel infinitive 'helped me overcome' without 'to' is acceptable; simplify repeated 'maybe'. Use past tense 'was' to match 'helped' or present context consistently; 'in the society with people' is unnatural—use 'in social situations'. Suggestion: 'She helped me overcome my shyness and speak confidently in school, college, and other social situations.'

× So I truly respect her and.

✓ So I truly respect her.

Sentence fragment: trailing 'and' leaves the sentence incomplete. Remove 'and' or complete the clause. Suggestion: 'So I truly respect her.'

× Yes, I like my primary school teachers more than my high school teachers because they are more friendly and they were nothing less than our parents.

✓ Yes, I like my primary school teachers more than my high school teachers because they were friendlier and were like our parents.

Comparative form: 'more friendly' should be 'friendlier'. Maintain consistent tense: use past 'were' if referring to past. 'Nothing less than our parents' is idiomatic but 'were like our parents' is clearer. Suggestion: 'They were friendlier and were like our parents.'

× They used to talk to us in a friendly manner and taught us everything in a comfortable way which made us feel like home.

✓ They used to talk to us in a friendly manner and taught us everything in a comfortable way, which made us feel at home.

Add comma before 'which' for nonrestrictive clause and use idiomatic expression 'feel at home' rather than 'feel like home'. Suggestion: '...which made us feel at home.'