教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear and direct: choose correct pronouns, use one topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Avoid contradictions and hesitations. Mention why she is memorable with a concise reason.

範例: Yes. My favorite teacher was my elementary school teacher because she challenged me to work harder. She seemed strict at first, but her high expectations helped me improve my grades and study habits.

建議: State your main idea clearly, correct word choice ('fit' not 'fake'), give one brief reason and a conditional closing sentence if needed. Reduce fillers and repetition.

範例: No, I don't think I will become a teacher because I am not very patient with children. However, if I had the opportunity and training, I might try it for a short time to gain experience.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the teacher and why you remember her. Use specific details (e.g., how she supported you) and avoid unclear phrases like 'tricky student' without explanation. Keep it concise and coherent with linking words.

範例: Yes, I still remember my elementary school teacher because she was patient and supportive. Although I could be difficult to manage, she took time to explain things clearly and encouraged me to participate more in class.

建議: Give a direct answer first, then one or two specific supporting details. Use correct phrases like 'keep in touch' and avoid confusing tense errors. If you lost contact, explain briefly why.

範例: No, I'm not still in touch with my primary school teachers. I saw my favorite teacher at graduation and we kept in contact for a short time, but we lost touch after I moved to another city.

建議: Answer directly and give specific examples of how she helped (encouragement, teaching methods). Use correct verbs ('stay close' or 'be supportive') and avoid pronoun errors. Provide one concrete example of a method she used.

範例: She helped me by encouraging me instead of scolding me, and by explaining lessons in a fun and visual way. For example, she used games and drawings to help me understand math concepts.

建議: Give a clear opinion first, then briefly compare with one or two reasons. Use comparative language correctly ('more traditional', 'more approachable'). Avoid vague endings and finish the sentence coherently.

範例: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers because they were more approachable and supportive. In contrast, my high school teachers were more traditional and strict, focusing more on exams than on individual help.

× Yes. And I still remember she, he's like very mean to me.

✓ Yes. I still remember her; she was very mean to me.

Original sentence mixes subject and object pronouns ('she' used where 'her' is needed) and switches between 'she' and 'he'. Use the object pronoun 'her' after 'remember' and a consistent subject 'she'. Also use past tense 'was' to describe a past characteristic.

× And he's my, she's my teacher in the elementary school.

✓ She was my teacher in elementary school.

The original alternates 'he' and 'she' incorrectly. Use a single correct pronoun 'she'. For past relationship use 'was'. Omit the article 'the' before 'elementary school' in general statements.

× I never think I will be a teacher umm, because I don't think that's fake for me.

✓ I never thought I would be a teacher because I don't think that's suitable for me.

Tense consistency: use past 'thought' or present perfect for past belief when contrasting with a future possibility. 'Will' becomes 'would' in reported or tentative contexts. 'Fake' is incorrect word choice; 'suitable' or 'right' fits meaning.

× I'm not very patient with like students so.

✓ I'm not very patient with students.

Remove filler 'like' which is informal and unnecessary. 'With students' is correct prepositional phrase; keep simple present for general statement.

× But if if I get a chance I will try.

✓ But if I get the chance, I will try.

Use definite article 'the chance' for a specific opportunity and include a comma after the conditional clause. Duplicate 'if' removed.

× Yes, this, uh, I should say she's in my elementary school and she's pretty nice because I think I'm tricky student, but she's uh, she doesn't have me instead of try to like close to me and.

✓ Yes. I should say she was my elementary school teacher and she was very nice because I was a difficult student, but she didn't give up on me; instead she tried to get closer to me.

Multiple issues: pronoun and tense consistency corrected to past ('was'). 'Tricky student' is wrong collocation; 'difficult student' fits. 'Doesn't have me' is incorrect — likely intended 'didn't give up on me'. Use past forms to describe past events and clarify clause structure using a semicolon or conjunction.

× No, but I remember when I was graduating from the elementary school, I was hanging out with her and but after that a widow keep in touch, but I I get I got her first.

✓ No. But I remember when I graduated from elementary school I was hanging out with her, and after that we didn't keep in touch. I tried to contact her first.

Corrected tense: 'was graduating' to simple past 'graduated' for a completed action. Remove extra articles 'the' before 'elementary school'. 'A widow keep in touch' is nonsensical; likely meant 'we didn't keep in touch'. Clarified 'I tried to contact her first' for intended meaning and removed repetitions.

× Uh, she didn't scold me, instead she kept encouraging me and tried to lie close to me.

✓ She didn't scold me; instead, she kept encouraging me and tried to be close to me.

'Lie close to me' is incorrect verb choice — use 'be close to me'. Punctuation improved and tense consistent past form 'kept encouraging'.

× And he just teach me in the way that I like.

✓ And she just taught me in a way that I liked.

Pronoun 'he' changed to 'she' to match teacher. Use past tense 'taught' and past preference 'liked' to maintain tense consistency. Article and phrasing simplified.

× And yes, but high school teacher is is good too and that's a difference.

✓ Yes, but my high school teachers were good too, and they were different.

Add possessive 'my' and plural for 'teachers' if referring to more than one. Use past tense 'were' for past experience and correct duplicated 'is is'. Clarify 'that's a difference' to 'they were different'.

× Like my high school student teacher is more traditional but the elementary school teacher is more close to.

✓ My high school teachers were more traditional, but my elementary school teachers were more approachable.

'Student teacher' changed to 'teachers' to match context. 'More close to' is incorrect collocation; use 'more approachable' or 'closer' as appropriate. Maintain plural consistency and past tense for completed schooling.