教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct, correct grammar, and give one specific reason with a brief example. Avoid vague phrases and plural/singular errors. Use a clear topic sentence, one supporting detail, and a short consequence or feeling.

範例: Yes, I do. My favorite teacher was my high school English teacher because he always made lessons interesting and was easy to talk to. For example, he held small discussion groups where we could ask questions, which helped me become more confident speaking English.

建議: Clarify your idea and fix grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give concise supporting details and a short reason. Avoid repetition and keep it within four sentences.

範例: I don't plan to be a school teacher, but I do want to teach my future children important life lessons. For instance, I would teach them responsibility and good study habits based on my own experiences, so they can avoid common mistakes.

建議: Use correct tense and pronouns and be concise. Provide one specific memory that explains why you remember them. Avoid repeating words and keep sentences natural and varied in vocabulary.

範例: Yes, I do. I still remember Sir Alfred, my high school biology teacher, because he always explained difficult concepts with simple experiments. For example, he used a small model to show cell structure, which made the topic much easier to understand.

建議: Answer directly and correct tense usage; provide a brief reason and, if possible, a short consequence. Use linking words for clarity and keep it natural.

範例: No, I'm not. I moved to the city after leaving my hometown, so I lost contact with my primary school teachers. As a result, I haven't kept in touch with them.

建議: Finish your sentence and correct grammar. Give one specific example of help and explain the effect on you. Use linking words and avoid incomplete endings.

範例: He helped me by encouraging us and offering extra help after class, which improved my grades and confidence. For example, he stayed after lessons to explain difficult topics and gave us practice problems that made the subject easier to understand.

建議: Give a clear, concise comparison with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid vague phrases like "everything is fine." Keep it to two or three sentences.

範例: No, I prefer my high school teachers because they taught in a more engaging way and supported my interests. As a result, I learned more and enjoyed school life during high school.

× That's why he is my favorite teachers.

✓ That's why he is my favorite teacher.

The noun 'teacher' should be singular to agree with the singular pronoun 'he'. Use singular 'teacher' because you refer to one person. Suggestion: match noun number to the subject (he -> teacher).

× Yes I won but not literally same as teacher in school but a teacher to my children.

✓ Yes, I would like to, but not literally the same as a school teacher; I mean a teacher to my children.

The original 'I won' is incorrect; context asks about the future desire, so a modal construction 'would like to' expresses intent. Also add articles and restructure for clarity. Suggestion: use appropriate modal ('would like to') and include articles ('a school teacher').

× I want to teach them on what I learned in life and based on the lesson I learned.

✓ I want to teach them what I learned in life and the lessons I learned.

Do not use the preposition 'on' before 'what' in this context. Also 'based on' is awkward here; simple noun phrases 'the lessons I learned' is clearer. Suggestion: remove 'on' and use parallel nouns for clarity.

× Yes, I have. I remembered Sir Alfred, my teacher in biology and high school.

✓ Yes, I have. I remember Sir Alfred, my biology teacher in high school.

Use present tense 'remember' when the memory still holds. Also reorder to place 'biology teacher in high school' as a clear noun phrase. Suggestion: use present tense for ongoing memories.

× He was nice and very approachable to her student.

✓ He was nice and very approachable to his students.

Pronoun 'her' is incorrect because 'he' is male; use 'his'. Also 'student' should be plural 'students' to match general reference. Suggestion: match pronouns to antecedents and use plural when speaking generally.

× When I left my hometown to move in the city, I don't have any connection with my previous teachers, so no.

✓ When I left my hometown to move to the city, I didn't have any connection with my previous teachers, so no.

Mix of past ('left') and present ('don't have') is inconsistent. Use past tense 'didn't have' for the time after leaving. Also use preposition 'to' with 'move to the city'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use correct preposition.

× I saw our teacher as our cheerleader because during in high school he always there to help us in every challenges that we face and.

✓ I saw our teacher as our cheerleader because during high school he was always there to help us with every challenge we faced.

Remove 'in' after 'during'. Add auxiliary 'was' for past continuous meaning. Use 'with' to indicate help regarding challenges. 'Challenges' should be singular in this phrasing 'every challenge'. Ensure past tense 'faced' to match 'was'. Suggestion: correct prepositions, include appropriate auxiliary verbs, and keep tense consistent.

× No, I choose my high school teachers because back in high school everything is fine and I can say that I learn a lot and at the same time I enjoy my high school life.

✓ No, I choose my high school teachers because back in high school everything was fine and I can say that I learned a lot and at the same time I enjoyed my high school life.

The sentence mixes present tense with past situations. Use past tense 'was', 'learned', and 'enjoyed' to describe past experiences. Suggestion: use past tense consistently when referring to past periods.