教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để trả lời rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn; tránh lặp từ và đưa thêm chi tiết cụ thể về lý do bạn ngưỡng mộ (ví dụ cách dạy, bài học cụ thể). Sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nối thêm bằng liên từ như "because" hoặc "for example".

範例: Yes. My favorite teacher is my English teacher, who has supported me since grade five. I admire her because she explains difficult grammar clearly and gives useful feedback on my speaking. For example, she used role-plays to help me improve my pronunciation, which made me much more confident.

建議: Tránh lặp ý, phát triển câu bằng lý do cụ thể và dùng từ nối để mạch lạc (ví dụ "because", "therefore"). Bổ sung một ví dụ ngắn về việc bạn đang làm gì để theo đuổi giấc mơ đó (học khóa, thực hành, dạy kèm).

範例: Yes, I do. I want to become an English teacher because I enjoy helping others learn and I love the language. For example, I tutor younger students twice a week to practise teaching and improve my lesson planning.

建議: Sửa ngữ pháp và từ sai (ví dụ "dodged" không đúng), làm rõ ý bằng câu chủ đề và chi tiết cụ thể về kỷ niệm hoặc hành động của giáo viên khiến bạn nhớ. Dùng từ nối như "because" hoặc "for instance" để liên kết ý.

範例: Yes. I remember my secondary school math teacher very well because she always encouraged me when I struggled. For instance, she spent extra time after class to explain problems and praised my progress, which made me feel more confident.

建議: Tinh gọn câu và sửa trật tự từ để tự nhiên hơn; dùng liên từ để nối hai ý (không giữ liên lạc với tiểu học nhưng vẫn giữ liên lạc với trung học). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về cách bạn giữ liên lạc (tin nhắn, thăm hỏi) để câu có chiều sâu hơn.

範例: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers because it was a long time ago. However, I keep in contact with my secondary school teachers; I visit them at my old school and message them occasionally to say hello.

建議: Kết hợp câu ngắn thành câu hoàn chỉnh, sửa ngữ pháp và phát triển bằng chi tiết cụ thể (những phương pháp giáo viên dùng để cải thiện phát âm). Dùng liên từ như "by" hoặc "through" để giải thích cách thức.

範例: She helped me improve my pronunciation by correcting my sounds and giving me practice activities. For example, she focused on vowel sounds and listened to me read aloud every lesson, so now I feel much more confident speaking English.

建議: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và lựa chọn từ ("touch" không đúng ngữ cảnh). Trình bày ý rõ ràng: nêu chủ đề rồi giải thích cụ thể sự khác nhau về nội dung giảng dạy và bài học cuộc sống. Tránh câu rời rạc; dùng liên từ như "because" hoặc "whereas" và đưa ví dụ cụ thể về bài học quan trọng của cả hai giai đoạn.

範例: No, I prefer my high school teachers because they taught me more valuable academic and life skills. For example, primary teachers taught basic manners and routines, whereas high school teachers prepared me for exams and critical thinking, which feels more useful now.

× Yes, my favorite teacher is my English teacher who have touched me since I was student in grade 5 till now.

✓ Yes, my favorite teacher is my English teacher who has touched me since I was a student in grade 5 until now.

The relative clause 'who have touched me' must match the singular subject 'teacher', so use 'has' (singular) not 'have'. Also add the article 'a' before 'student' and use 'until' for clarity. Suggestion: ensure the verb agrees with its subject and include necessary articles.

× I was student in grade 5 till now.

✓ I was a student in grade 5 until now.

Missing singular article 'a' before 'student' makes the noun phrase incorrect. Use 'a student' for one person. Use 'until' instead of 'till' for formality. Suggestion: include articles with singular countable nouns.

× She's very kind to me and she is a very talented teacher so I look up to her the most.

✓ She is very kind to me and she is a very talented teacher, so I look up to her the most.

Contraction 'She's' is acceptable but consistency with 'she is' improves formality; missing comma before 'so' joins independent clauses. Suggestion: use punctuation to separate clauses and maintain consistent tense.

× I like studying English, so I now pursue my dream to be an English teacher.

✓ I like studying English, so I am now pursuing my dream of becoming an English teacher.

Use present continuous 'am pursuing' or present perfect progressive for ongoing action. 'Pursue' without 'am' is awkward here. Also use gerund/infinitive form 'of becoming' rather than 'to be'. Suggestion: use progressive form for ongoing plans and correct verb patterns ('dream of doing').

× Yes I do, I have a math teacher who did who dodged me from my secondary school.

✓ Yes, I do. I had a math teacher who taught me at my secondary school.

Original sentence has duplicative and incorrect verbs 'did who dodged'. Likely meaning is 'taught me'. Use past tense 'had' and correct verb 'taught'. Suggestion: choose the correct verb meaning and keep one clause per sentence.

× I still remember till now.

✓ I still remember her now.

'Till now' is awkward with 'still remember'; 'now' or 'to this day' is clearer. Ensure pronoun refers to the person ('her'). Suggestion: use clear time expressions and include object pronoun.

× I'm currently a high school student but I very miss her because she's so kind to me.

✓ I'm currently a high school student, but I miss her very much because she is so kind to me.

'Very miss her' is incorrect word order; use 'miss her very much'. Add comma before 'but' and avoid contraction for formality consistency. Suggestion: place adverbs like 'very' with appropriate structures ('very much' with 'miss').

× No, I'm not because now I'm a high school student and this was a very long time ago so I don't think so.

✓ No, I'm not, because now I'm a high school student and that was a long time ago, so I don't think so.

Use 'that' to refer to a past period and add commas for readability. 'Very long time ago' is acceptable but 'a long time ago' is more natural. Suggestion: adjust demonstratives and punctuation for clarity.

× But I still in touch with my secondary school teachers.

✓ But I am still in touch with my secondary school teachers.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' before 'still in touch'. 'Be in touch with' requires a form of 'be'. Suggestion: include appropriate form of 'be' in stative expressions.

× My favorite teacher helped me. In my pronunciation when I'm speak English.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me with my pronunciation when I speak English.

Sentence fragments and incorrect word order: 'In my pronunciation when I'm speak English' is fragmentary and 'I'm speak' is ungrammatical. Use 'helped me with my pronunciation' and 'when I speak English' (simple present for habitual action). Suggestion: combine fragments into one complete sentence and use correct clause verb forms.

× I was very bad at speaking English before, but now I'm much more con confident thanks to her help.

✓ I was very bad at speaking English before, but now I'm much more confident thanks to her help.

Typo 'con confident' should be 'confident'. 'Bad at speaking' is correct gerund usage. Suggestion: fix typographical errors and keep gerund after 'bad at'.

× No, I don't. I like my high school teachers more than my primary one 'cause my high school teachers touch me.

✓ No, I don't. I like my high school teachers more than my primary school teachers because my high school teachers influenced me.

Mismatch in comparison: 'primary one' (singular) vs 'high school teachers' (plural). Also 'touch me' is incorrect collocation in English; likely meaning 'influenced' or 'touched my life'. Suggestion: keep items compared in the same number (plural vs plural) and use appropriate verbs ('influence', 'inspire').

× More valuable lessons than primary school.

✓ They taught more valuable lessons than my primary school teachers did.

Sentence fragment lacks subject and verb. Make it a complete comparative clause and specify the comparison target. Suggestion: include subject and verb to complete the sentence.

× Primary school just touch me. How to eat, how to act like a good girl.

✓ Primary school just taught me basic things like how to eat and how to behave like a good girl.

'Touch me' is incorrect; use 'taught me'. Original has fragment 'How to eat, how to act like a good girl.' Combine into one sentence with a verb. Suggestion: use past tense 'taught' for completed actions and form full sentences.

× But high school is different.

✓ But high school is different.

This sentence is acceptable but ensure it follows from the previous complete sentence. No grammatical change needed; keep as is. Suggestion: maintain coherence by connecting with previous sentence.