教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like “closure.”

範例: I don't have a single favorite teacher because many of them have helped me in different ways. For example, my math teacher helped me understand difficult concepts by giving extra practice, so I appreciate many teachers equally.

建議: Answer directly and give a clear reason. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'I have low patience') and avoid vague endings. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and include one specific reason or example.

範例: No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I don't feel patient enough to work with young children. For instance, when I babysit, I find it hard to stay calm during long tantrums, so I prefer a different career.

建議: Organize the answer: give a clear topic sentence naming the teacher, then provide specific details about how he helped using linking words. Remove fillers and redundant phrases.

範例: Yes, I remember one professor from college called Sir Mike who was our advisor. He helped me a lot by offering career advice and connecting me with internship opportunities, which improved my confidence and experience.

建議: Be concise and avoid repeating the same idea. Give one clear sentence stating whether you are in touch, then add a brief reason or exception. Correct awkward phrasing like 'friends in Facebook teachers.'

範例: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers because I don't remember them well. However, I have a few former classmates and teachers on Facebook whom I occasionally see updates from.

建議: First, answer directly about who helped you, then give specific ways they helped using linking words (for example, 'for instance,' 'by'). Avoid vague praise like 'super fun' without examples.

範例: I don't have one favorite teacher, but Sir Mike stands out because he made learning enjoyable and practical. For example, he used real-world case studies in class and gave detailed feedback on my assignments, which improved my skills.

建議: Give a clear comparative answer and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' and avoid repeating the same idea.

範例: I prefer my high school teachers because they provided more guidance during important decisions. For example, my history teacher helped me develop study techniques and my chemistry teacher offered extra tutoring before exams.

× I don't think I have a favorite, favorite teachers 'cause every teacher that I've met or teaches me or guides me helps me a lot.

✓ I don't think I have a favorite teacher, because every teacher who has taught me or guided me has helped me a lot.

The original mixes singular and plural and uses inappropriate pronouns and verb forms. Use singular 'teacher' to match 'a favorite'. Use 'who' for people, and 'has taught'/'has guided' (present perfect) to show past experience up to now. Also use 'because' instead of informal 'cause.' Suggestion: Keep subject number consistent and use relative pronoun 'who' with correct verb tense.

× I don't have any teacher in favorite.

✓ I don't have any favorite teacher.

The phrase 'in favorite' is incorrect. Use the adjective 'favorite' before the noun: 'favorite teacher.' Alternatively say 'a favorite teacher.' Suggestion: Place modifiers before the noun: 'favorite teacher' or 'a favorite teacher.'

× To be honest, I've never ever dreamed of becoming a teacher since I was a child.

✓ To be honest, I have never dreamed of becoming a teacher since I was a child.

'Never ever' is colloquial and redundant; 'I've' is fine but 'have never dreamed ... since I was a child' correctly uses present perfect with 'since' to indicate a period from childhood until now. Suggestion: Use 'have never dreamed' and avoid redundant adverbs.

× I don't know, just the thought of teaching kids were not on my thing.

✓ I don't know, the thought of teaching kids was not my thing.

Subject 'the thought' is singular, so the verb should be 'was' not 'were.' Also 'not on my thing' is unnatural; use 'not my thing.' Suggestion: Match verb number to subject and use idiomatic expression 'not my thing.'

× So 'cause I have a low patience when it comes to kids that are super.

✓ Because I have low patience with very young children.

'A low patience' is uncountable so drop the article; 'when it comes to' is wordy; 'kids that are super' is unclear—likely meant 'very young' or 'energetic.' Use 'with' for tolerance. Suggestion: Say 'I have low patience with very young children' or 'I have little patience with very energetic kids.'

× So I've recently graduated college so I've met a lot of more.

✓ I recently graduated from college, so I met many more [teachers].

'I've recently graduated college' is acceptable in some varieties but 'graduated from college' is clearer. 'I've met a lot of more' is incorrect; use 'met many more' or 'met a lot more teachers.' Keep tense consistent: past simple 'graduated' and 'met' for recent completed actions. Suggestion: Use 'graduated from college' and 'met many more teachers.'

× So I do have one. It's his name is Sir Mike.

✓ Yes, I do have one. His name is Sir Mike.

'It's his name is' is ungrammatical. Use 'His name is' to introduce the person's name. Also start with affirmation 'Yes, I do have one.' Suggestion: Use direct subject 'His name is Sir Mike.'

× He he was our advisor. This is advisor and he really helps out a lot.

✓ He was our advisor and he really helped us a lot.

Remove the repeated 'he.' Use past tense 'was' and 'helped' because referring to past role and actions. 'This is advisor' is incorrect; use 'He was our advisor.' Suggestion: Combine into one sentence: 'He was our advisor and he helped us a lot.'

× I can't remember a single one from my primary school teachers, so I don't think so.

✓ I can't remember a single primary school teacher, so I don't think I'm in touch with any.

'A single one from my primary school teachers' is awkward. Clarify meaning: cannot remember any primary school teachers and thus not in touch. 'So I don't think so' is vague. Suggestion: Be explicit: 'I can't remember any of my primary school teachers.'

× Yes, we're not in touch. So simply speaking, we're not in touch. Though I have friends in Facebook teachers.

✓ No, we're not in touch. I only have some friends from school on Facebook.

'We are not in touch' is fine, but answer to 'Are you still in touch?' should be 'No.' 'I have friends in Facebook teachers' is incorrect preposition and word order. Use 'on Facebook' and clarify 'friends from school' or 'former teachers.' Suggestion: Say 'No, we're not in touch. I only have some former classmates or teachers on Facebook.'

× I can't remember my favorite teacher 'cause I don't have one, but I think Sir Mike really is one of the professors or instruction that that is memorable 'cause he's super fun teacher and super.

✓ I can't remember a favorite teacher because I don't have one, but I think Sir Mike is one of the professors who is memorable because he's a very fun teacher.

Multiple issues: use 'a favorite teacher' or 'my favorite teacher.' 'Professors or instruction' is wrong; use 'professors or instructors.' Avoid repeated words 'that that.' Use 'who is memorable' for people and 'a very fun teacher.' Suggestion: Simplify: 'I don't have a favorite teacher, but Sir Mike is memorable because he's a very fun teacher.'

× Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

✓ (No correction needed; question is grammatical.)

This exam question sentence is grammatical and requires no correction. Suggestion: N/A

× I can't remember my primary school teachers, so I would say that I like more of my high school teachers because they really did help me a lot.

✓ I can't remember my primary school teachers, so I would say I prefer my high school teachers because they really helped me a lot.

'I like more of my high school teachers' is awkward; use 'I prefer my high school teachers.' Use past simple 'helped' for completed actions. Suggestion: Use 'prefer' and keep tense consistent: 'they helped me a lot.'