教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific details (why you liked them), and avoid repetition. Use correct pronouns and simple past/present tense consistently. Add a linking word when giving a reason.

範例: Yes. My favourite teacher was Ms Juliet, my maths teacher in primary school. She explained difficult concepts clearly and used fun activities to help us practise, so I became more confident in maths.

建議: Give a direct, structured response: state your main position in one sentence, then briefly explain reasons and add a linking word. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases; use simple vocabulary to express certainty or possibility.

範例: I probably won't be a teacher because I plan to work as a designer. However, if circumstances change, I would consider teaching part-time since I enjoy sharing knowledge.

建議: Answer clearly with one topic sentence, then give specific behaviour and the result using coherent linking words. Avoid unclear adjectives and pronoun errors. Describe how the teacher acted and what effect this had on you.

範例: Yes. I remember my college teacher Marilyn. She was strict and often criticised our mistakes, which motivated me to study harder and eventually improved my grades.

建議: Give a direct answer, then one or two concise reasons with linking words. Use correct past tense and avoid filler words. If you mention occasional meetings, state it clearly.

範例: No, I am not in contact with them because we never exchanged phone numbers when I was a child. I do sometimes see former teachers by chance in shops or shopping malls.

建議: Structure your answer: begin with a clear statement of help received, then give specific actions the teacher took and the result, using linking words. Use correct verb forms and avoid repetition.

範例: When I was in ninth grade I struggled with a language subject, so my favourite teacher gave me extra lessons both in the mornings and evenings. As a result, my understanding and grades improved significantly.

建議: State your preference clearly, then give two specific reasons using linking words. Use accurate adjectives and concise sentences; avoid vague generalisations.

範例: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers because they were kinder and more patient. They organised fun activities and spent more time with us, which made learning enjoyable.

× Yes, I have favorite teacher.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher.

Missing definite/indefinite article before singular countable noun 'teacher'. Use 'a' for one unspecified teacher. Suggestion: always use 'a' or 'the' with singular countable nouns.

× It was I think maybe in childhood since now I have one particular favorite teacher.

✓ I think it was in my childhood when I first had a particular favorite teacher.

Pronoun and word order issues: 'It was I think maybe in childhood since now' is ungrammatical. Use 'I think' at start, 'in my childhood' for possession, and clarify time: 'when I first had'. Suggestion: place 'I think' at beginning and use 'my childhood' for clarity.

× It uh, it's name called Juliet.

✓ Her name is Juliet.

Incorrect use of 'it' for a person and awkward passive 'it's name called'. Use appropriate pronoun 'her' and simple present 'is' to state someone's name.

× It's uh, he, she's a math teacher.

✓ She's a math teacher.

Confusing pronouns 'it' and mixed 'he, she's'. Use a single correct pronoun 'she' for a female teacher.

× I like maths subject because of her, because of her.

✓ I like the subject of math because of her.

Redundant phrase and British 'maths' vs 'math' acceptable; include article 'the' before 'subject' and avoid repeating 'because of her'. Suggestion: say 'I like math because of her.'

× So in in the future I want to be a teacher means OK for me, but it's dependents.

✓ So in the future, I would be okay with being a teacher, but it depends.

Incorrect modal/phrase 'means OK for me' and wrong form 'dependents'. Use 'would be okay with' to express conditional willingness and 'it depends' to state contingency. Suggestion: use 'it depends' for situations.

× I'm not telling it's I'm so interested about I'm not telling about like that, but I'm currently doing a designer designing.

✓ I'm not saying I'm very interested in that; I'm currently working as a designer.

Awkward and incorrect verbs 'telling' and 'doing a designer designing'. Use 'saying' to express speech, 'interested in' with preposition, and 'working as a designer' for occupation. Suggestion: use 'interested in' and 'work as'.

× So I like this job, but moreover I don't.

✓ So I like this job, but I don't want it as my only career.

Unclear pronoun 'I don't' lacking object; be explicit about what is not desired. Suggestion: complete the thought to avoid ambiguity.

× Yes, I remember the college uh teacher called Marilyn.

✓ Yes, I remember a college teacher named Marilyn.

Use 'a' for one of many college teachers and 'named' is more natural than 'called' in this context. Suggestion: 'a college teacher named Marilyn.'

× She was quite stirred she mark as easily harassedly, but that pushed me to improved and equally got much better grades.

✓ She was quite strict; she marked harshly and was easily irritated, but that pushed me to improve and I got much better grades.

Many incorrect word choices: 'stirred' should be 'strict', 'mark as' -> 'marked', 'harassedly' incorrect -> 'harshly' or 'was easily irritated', 'pushed me to improved' wrong verb form -> 'pushed me to improve', and 'equally got' unclear -> 'I got'. Suggestion: choose correct adjectives/adverbs and correct verb forms.

× So I like because he scold us only they are now we.

✓ So I liked her because she scolded us when necessary.

Pronoun confusion and tense errors: 'he' vs 'they', 'scold us only they are now we' is nonsensical. Use consistent pronouns 'she' and past tense 'scolded'. Suggestion: keep pronouns consistent and use clear clause 'when necessary'.

× No, I don't have contact with them because, uh, in that days they have not have, uh, I don't have any phone numbers or you know, so I didn't, they, I didn't give the phone numbers so I didn't contact with them, but I see in uh, some place like shop or in shopping malls like that and I.

✓ No, I don't keep in contact with them because in those days they didn't have my phone number and I didn't have theirs, so I couldn't contact them. Sometimes I see them in shops or shopping malls.

Multiple issues: 'in that days' -> 'in those days', wrong auxiliary 'have not have' -> 'didn't have', article and preposition fixes 'contact with' -> 'keep in contact with' or 'contact them', and sentence fragment at end removed. Suggestion: use past tense for past situations and proper collocations like 'keep in contact' and 'those days'.

× When I was in 9th grade, I was so low grade, uh, in some language, uh, subject.

✓ When I was in ninth grade, my grades were very low in some language subjects.

Awkward phrase 'I was so low grade' should be 'my grades were very low'. Use plural 'subjects' if referring to multiple, and write ordinal 'ninth'. Suggestion: express performance with 'my grades were low'.

× So the the two, uh, my favorite teacher helped me to improve that language.

✓ So the two teachers, including my favorite teacher, helped me improve that language.

Unclear 'the the two' and missing article; clarify by specifying 'the two teachers' or 'two teachers'. Also 'helped me improve' (no 'to' necessary but acceptable). Suggestion: be clear about who helped.

× He teach me morning, uh, tuitions and evening.

✓ He taught me morning and evening tuition classes.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'He teach' should be past 'He taught' since referring to past, and 'tuitions' -> 'tuition classes' more natural. Suggestion: use past tense for past events and correct verb forms.

× Also, I have tuition with my teacher in her know in her house, so.

✓ Also, I had tuition with my teacher at her house.

Wrong preposition 'in her know in her house' unclear; use 'at her house' or 'in her home' and past tense 'had' to match narrative. Suggestion: use 'at' for locations and keep tense consistent.

× Yeah, I like primary school teachers because they so kindness, so calm, they are so much of fun things they do with us because they do all the activity with us.

✓ Yes, I like primary school teachers because they are kind and calm, and they do many fun activities with us.

Incorrect adjective/adverb forms: 'they so kindness' -> 'they are kind', 'so much of fun things' -> 'many fun activities'. Simplify and use correct adjective forms and countable noun 'activities'. Suggestion: use 'kind' and 'calm' and 'many activities'.

× They will spend all time with us because, uh, in childhood we don't remember anything now.

✓ They would spend a lot of time with us because in childhood we remembered very little of what happened later.

Tense and pronoun issues: 'will' should be past habit 'would' and 'we don't remember anything now' conflicts with past context; clarify that as adults we remember little of childhood. Suggestion: use 'would' for habitual past and 'remembered' for past.

× I remember little bit situations now.

✓ I remember a few situations from that time now.

Ungrammatical phrase 'little bit situations' should be 'a few situations' or 'a little bit'. Use 'from that time' to specify source. Suggestion: use 'a few' with countable nouns.