教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答要更自然、语法更准确，并且用1句主题句加最多2-3句支持细节。避免重复词（如“he he”）和错误搭配（technology用于技能不恰当）。可以说清楚这位老师具体帮助了哪些方面。

範例: Yes, my favorite teacher is my finance lecturer. He has helped me understand complex financial concepts and taught practical skills like financial modeling and Excel techniques, which are very useful for my major.

建議: 表达要更自然并纠正语法错误（如“had better to be”错误，和“respect for it”搭配不当）。给出原因时用连接词如“because”并提供具体理由（教学、研究、影响学生）。句子不超过5句。

範例: Yes, I would like to become a teacher, preferably a university professor, because it offers job stability and the opportunity to conduct research and mentor young people.

建議: 避免语气词“uh”过多，使用正确时态和词汇（teach → taught, organization behavior → organizational behavior, kindful→kind）。描述应突出具体原因和影响（她如何帮助你），并用连接词使条理清楚。

範例: Yes, I still remember my organizational behavior teacher. She was very kind and supportive, and she taught me practical management techniques like team motivation and conflict resolution, which I still use today.

建議: 用更自然的表达（in touch with，not in touch with），纠正语法（it passed a long time → a long time has passed; forget for them → forget them）并具体说明哪些教导你记得，使用连接词保持连贯。

範例: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers because many years have passed, but I still remember their lessons about honesty and hard work that shaped my character.

建議: 回答应更具体并用正确时态（teach → taught）。把要点分成主题句和一两条支持细节，说明具体技能（e.g. research, report writing, case studies）及结果。避免冗长重复。

範例: He has helped me improve my academic knowledge in finance by teaching me how to prepare professional projects and write academic papers, which improved my grades and helped me secure an internship.

建議: 表达要更准确（more kindly→kinder; how to hard work→how to work hard; to be a healthy person in the whole life→lead a healthy life）。给出具体比较理由并用连接词如“because”或“although”。

範例: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers because they were kinder and taught me important habits like working hard and maintaining a healthy lifestyle, which have helped me throughout my life.

× Of course I have a favorite teacher is my finance teacher.

✓ Of course I have a favorite teacher; he is my finance teacher.

原句中包含两部分但缺少连接或标点，使句子结构混乱。应使用分号、连词或将句子拆分为两句来连接独立分句，从而形成完整句子。建议使用“;”或“. ”或加入“who is/and he is”。

× He teaches me a lot because my major is finance, he he teaches me many useful technology.

✓ He teaches me a lot because my major is finance; he teaches me many useful techniques.

原句有重复发言“he he”，并且“technology”在此上下文应为可数名词复数“techniques”。此外两个独立分句间需合适标点或连词。建议删除重复并改用复数名词。

× I think so. I really want to be a teacher in the future. It had better to be a professor in a college because it's a stable work and many students respect for it.

✓ I think so. I really want to be a teacher in the future. It would be better to be a professor at a college because it's stable work and many students respect professors.

“had better to”用法错误。正确结构为“had better”后接动词原形且多用于建议，不用于非现实愿望。此处用“would be better”更合适。同时“a stable work”用法不自然，改为“stable work”或“a stable job”，并修正“respect for it”为“respect professors”。建议学习情态动词与固定搭配用法。

× I remember a teacher, uh, who teach me organization behavior, uh, because, uh, she is very beautiful and very kindful and teach me about many, uh, management technology.

✓ I remember a teacher who taught me organizational behavior because she was very beautiful and very kind and taught me many management techniques.

动词时态需与过去的回忆一致，故用过去式“taught/was”。“organization behavior”应为“organizational behavior”。“kindful”不是标准形容词，改为“kind”。“management technology”应为可数复数“management techniques”。

× I have never to forget.

✓ I will never forget.

原句时态和结构错误。“have never to forget”不是正确表达。若想表达将来不会忘记，使用“will never forget”；若表达至今从未忘记，用“have never forgotten”。建议掌握现在完成时和一般将来时的用法区别。

× I don't have any touch with my primary school teacher because it passed a long time but I will never forget for them because they teach me a lot about to be a person.

✓ I don't have any contact with my primary school teachers because a long time has passed, but I will never forget them because they taught me a lot about how to be a person.

“have any touch with”是不正确搭配，应为“have any contact with”。“it passed a long time”语序和结构错误，改为“a long time has passed”。“forget for them”错误，改为“forget them”。“teach me a lot about to be a person”结构不正确，改为“taught me a lot about how to be a person”。同时注意时态一致。

× I think he helped me out about the academic knowledge in finance.

✓ I think he helped me with the academic knowledge in finance.

介词搭配错误，“help someone out about”应为“help someone with”或“help someone out with”。建议记住常见动词与介词搭配。

× He teach me how to make a professional project and a essay paper to help me have a good grade and to have a good job in finance major.

✓ He taught me how to make a professional project and an essay paper to help me get a good grade and secure a good job in the finance field.

时态需用过去式“taught”。“a essay paper”冠词错误，应为“an essay paper”。“help me have a good grade”不自然，改为“help me get a good grade”。“in finance major”改为“in the finance field”或“in my finance major”。

× I think it's right because my primary school teacher is more kindly and teach me a lot about how to hard work and to be a healthy person in the whole life.

✓ I think that's true because my primary school teacher was kinder and taught me a lot about how to work hard and how to be a healthy person throughout life.

“more kindly”用法错误，应使用比较级形容词“kinder”。动词时态要一致用过去式“taught”。“how to hard work”词序和形式错误，改为“how to work hard”。“in the whole life”不自然，改为“throughout life”。