教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence naming the teacher and your relationship, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitations and irrelevant words. Focus on correct vocabulary (e.g., 'when I was a child', 'favorite teacher', 'her name is Lisa').

範例: Yes. My favorite teacher was my English teacher, Lisa, when I was a child. She was very kind and patient, and she helped me improve my speaking by encouraging me to practice every day.

建議: Answer directly and add one or two specific reasons connected logically. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' but avoid long hesitations. Correctly name your job and give a reason why you prefer it.

範例: No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I currently work as a beauty consultant at a clinic and I really enjoy helping clients feel confident. Therefore, I prefer to develop my career in that field.

建議: Provide a clear subject sentence and one or two specific details such as the teacher's subject and a concrete example of how she helped you. Use linking words ('for example', 'she helped me by...') and correct grammar ('a science teacher', 'she helped me with...').

範例: Yes. I remember my high school science teacher very clearly. She was very kind and helped me with difficult topics, for example by giving extra tutoring after school when I struggled with chemistry.

建議: Give a direct answer and add one or two concise reasons or a brief detail about when you last contacted them. Use correct tense and articles ('I graduated many years ago', 'teachers').

範例: Not really. I graduated from primary school many years ago, so I haven't kept in touch with my primary school teachers and we lost contact over time.

建議: Clarify who inspired whom and give concrete examples of help. Start with a clear topic sentence like 'She helped me by...' then provide specific actions (advice, encouragement, resources). Avoid vague phrases and hesitations.

範例: She helped me by advising me about my career choices and encouraging me to pursue English studies. For example, she recommended books and suggested I join conversation clubs, which improved my confidence.

建議: State your preference clearly and give specific comparisons (teaching style, attitude) with linking words ('because', 'whereas'). Use correct adjectives ('friendly', 'strict', 'more flexible') and avoid unfinished sentences.

範例: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers because they were friendlier and more flexible, whereas my high school teachers were stricter and more formal, so I felt more comfortable with my primary teachers.

× Yes, I do uh, when I walk a child, my favorite T-shirt is uh, English teacher name Lisa. She is very kind and. And.

✓ Yes, I do. When I was a child, my favorite teacher was an English teacher named Lisa. She was very kind.

Student used incorrect pronouns and phrases: 'when I walk a child' should be 'when I was a child' (incorrect pronoun/verb form and time expression). 'my favorite T-shirt' is wrong word choice for person; should be 'my favorite teacher'. 'English teacher name Lisa' lacks articles and verb; correct form is 'an English teacher named Lisa'. Also tense consistency requires past tense 'was' for past memories. Suggest practicing subject and object words (teacher vs T-shirt), correct time expressions (when I was a child), and using 'named' to introduce names.

× No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future because uh, I currently work at uh, beauty consultant at a clinic. I really love the job. Yes, I I.

✓ No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I currently work as a beauty consultant at a clinic. I really love the job.

The student used incorrect verb/preposition combination 'work at beauty consultant'. The correct structure is 'work as a [profession]'. Also remove filler repetitions and maintain present continuous/simple present: 'I currently work as' is appropriate. Suggest practicing job expressions: 'work as a ...' and avoiding unnecessary fillers.

× Yes I do uh in high school I have a teacher teach teach uh scientist. She very kind and she help me everything in school.

✓ Yes, I do. In high school I had a teacher who taught science. She was very kind and she helped me with everything at school.

Multiple errors: tense inconsistency ('have' should be past 'had' for past school), missing relative pronoun and verb form: 'a teacher teach teach uh scientist' should be 'a teacher who taught science'. 'She very kind' lacks verb 'was'. 'she help me everything' needs past tense 'helped me with everything' and preposition 'at school'. Suggest studying past tense forms and relative clauses ('who taught') and the use of 'help someone with something'.

× Not really because I graduate, uh, many years. I don't keep in touch with teacher in primary school.

✓ Not really, because I graduated many years ago. I don't keep in touch with my primary school teachers.

Errors: 'I graduate' should be past 'I graduated' and to indicate elapsed time add 'ago'. Missing possessive article 'my' for 'primary school teachers' and plural 'teachers'. Also plural needed if referring to multiple teachers. Suggest practicing past tense with time expressions ('graduated many years ago') and possessive determiners ('my teacher(s)').

× Well, I think she is inspired by me, uh, about career. She she provide me, uh, no late a lot.

✓ Well, I think she inspired me about my career. She provided me a lot of guidance.

'She is inspired by me about career' reverses subject/object and uses wrong voice; the teacher inspired the student, so use 'she inspired me about my career'. 'She she provide me, uh, no late a lot' has tense and word choice errors; use past 'provided' and 'a lot of guidance' or 'help'. Suggest clarifying agent and recipient of inspiration and using correct past tense and collocations ('provide guidance').

× Yes I do, in primary school I think teacher very high but in high school teacher uh quite strict and more rural. I love fixable more than.

✓ Yes, I do. In primary school I think teachers were more encouraging, but in high school teachers were quite strict and more strict. I liked the flexible atmosphere of primary school more.

This sentence has multiple structural and word choice errors: 'teacher very high' is unclear — likely means 'teachers were very kind/encouraging' or 'high' is wrong adjective. 'more rural' is incorrect in this context; probably meant 'more strict' or 'rigid'. 'I love fixable more than' uses wrong word 'fixable' for 'flexible' and wrong tense. I corrected to clear comparative: 'liked the flexible atmosphere... more.' Suggest choosing appropriate adjectives (kind, encouraging, strict, flexible), ensuring subject-verb agreement and clear comparative structure ('liked X more than Y').