教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答要更简洁、语法更准确，并补充一两句具体细节以增加说服力。避免重复（如“who tea who”）和多余词汇。可以先给出主题句，然后用1-2句具体说明她的品质或做过的事情。

範例: Yes, I have a favorite teacher from junior high who taught Chinese. She was very kind and patient and often stayed after class to explain difficult characters to me, which really boosted my confidence.

建議: 注意时态和语法的一致性，避免重复（如“S o I so I”）。回答要直接并简要说明原因，可以用连接词（however, because）使逻辑清晰。

範例: I wanted to be a teacher when I was a child, but I don't now. As I learned more about the profession, I realized it can be very demanding and time-consuming, so I decided to pursue a different career.

建議: 避免重复前文表述（如“As I have said”可以简化），并改进语法（时态和动词形式）。可以补充具体例子说明为何会想起她，以增强内容具体性。

範例: Yes, I remember my junior high Chinese teacher very well. Whenever I faced a problem at school, I remembered how she calmly helped me break down the issue step by step, which inspired me to stay persistent.

建議: 表述时态要一致（过去和现在区分清楚），避免不自然或夸张的说法（如“tell how great I am now living”）。用更自然的表达说明联系方式和见面频率，并用连接词使句子流畅。

範例: We don't usually text because I didn't have a phone when I was in primary school, but I visit them during school holidays to catch up and see how they're doing.

建議: 修正语法错误（例如“difficulties in studying”、“encouraged me to hang out with my classmates”），去掉语气词“umm”，并给出更具体的例子说明老师如何帮助你处理友谊问题。

範例: She helped me not only with my studies but also with friendships. For example, she encouraged me to join group activities and introduced me to classmates so I could make friends more easily.

建議: 改进语法和用词（如“they teach more difficult subjects”），避免模糊或不自然的词汇（如“encouragers”应为“encouragement”或“support”）。可以具体说明高中的哪些帮助让你更欣赏他们。

範例: Both were great, but I prefer my high school teachers. They taught more challenging subjects and gave me practical guidance and encouragement that helped me improve academically.

× Yes, I do have a favorite teacher who tea who taught Chinese when I was in just junior high school.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher who taught Chinese when I was in junior high school.

句子中出现多余词语（"do"和重复的"who tea who"、"just"位置不自然），使结构混乱。简化为 "I have a favorite teacher who taught Chinese when I was in junior high school." 更符合英语习惯。建议：不要在肯定句中不必要地使用助动词do；删除重复或错误单词，并把时间状语放在正确位置。

× When I was young I do have this dream.

✓ When I was young I had this dream.

句子谈论过去的情况，应使用过去时态。原句用现在时的助动词"do"与过去时间表达矛盾。建议：叙述过去事实时使用过去时（had）。

× However when I grew up I become known of how busy and hard is doing this job was.

✓ However, when I grew up I came to know how busy and hard this job was.

原句语序混乱，动词形式和从句结构错误（"become known of"、"how busy and hard is doing this job was"）。应使用短语"came to know"并把从句改为过去时的陈述句"how busy and hard this job was"。建议：使用常见表达并保持时态一致。

× So I so I give up this dream.

✓ So I gave up this dream.

重复词"So I"且时态不一致。因为前文为过去动作，放弃梦想应使用过去时"gave up"。建议：避免重复并保持时态一致。

× Yes, as I have said, the teacher who taught Chinese when I was in junior high school gave me a deep impression and I always think of her when I met difficulties.

✓ Yes, as I have said, the teacher who taught Chinese when I was in junior high school left a deep impression on me and I always think of her when I meet difficulties.

"gave me a deep impression" 是直译且搭配不当，常用表达为"left a deep impression on me"。另外时间状语冲突：既有过去"taught"和"left"，又有"I always think... when I met difficulties"，应保持现在习惯性动作时使用现在时（"meet"）。建议：使用固定搭配并确保从句时态与主句意义一致。

× We didn't send messages to each other because when I was in primary school, I do not have a phone.

✓ We didn't send messages to each other because when I was in primary school, I did not have a phone.

句中谈论过去事实，应全部使用过去时。原句在从句中错误使用现在时"do not have"。建议：叙述过去情况时主句和从句均用过去时（did not have）。

× However, when I have a vacation, I will go back and see them to tell how great I am now living and see whether they are good.

✓ However, when I have a vacation, I will go back and see them to tell them how well I am doing now and to see whether they are well.

原句中"tell how great I am now living" 不自然，动词搭配错误。应使用"tell them how well I am doing now" 并且对人的状况用"are well"或"are doing well"。建议：使用自然搭配（tell someone how... / be doing well）。

× At that time, I not only had difficulties on study but also how to deal with friendship.

✓ At that time, I not only had difficulties with my studies but also with dealing with friendships.

英文中常用介词搭配是"difficulties with"及"difficulties with one's studies"。原句"on study"和"how to deal with friendship"表达不自然。建议：使用常见介词搭配并把抽象名词复数化或使用动名词结构。

× My favorite teacher encouraged me to umm hanging out with all of my schoolmates.

✓ My favorite teacher encouraged me to hang out with all of my schoolmates.

在"encourage someone to ..."结构中，动词不定式to后应接动词原形，而不是动名词"hanging"。建议：记住"encourage"后接不定式或动名词时的搭配，常见为"encourage someone to do something"。

× Well they are both good, but I would say no.

✓ Well, they are both good, but I would say no.

原句缺少逗号使语气连接不清。语法上问题不大，主要是标点和停顿。建议：在口语/书面中用逗号分隔插入语以更清晰表达。

× My high school teachers are teaching much more difficult subjects and they give a lot of encouragers and teachings for me.

✓ My high school teachers taught much more difficult subjects and they gave me a lot of encouragement and guidance.

动词时态应与上下文一致（如果在谈过去经历用过去时taught/gave）。"encouragers"和"teachings"用法不当，正确名词为"encouragement"和"guidance"或"teaching"作为不可数名词。建议：使用正确的名词形式并匹配时态。