教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cần nói rõ ràng, tránh tiếng ằ u, lặp từ và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể về những gì giáo viên đã dạy (ví dụ: bài học cụ thể, phương pháp giảng dạy). Dùng tối đa 5 câu, bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và dùng liên từ để nối ý.

範例: Yes, my favorite teacher is my high school literature teacher. She encouraged me to think critically by assigning essays that required comparing different authors. For example, she taught me how to analyse character motives, which improved my writing. Her supportive feedback also boosted my confidence.

建議: Cần câu chủ đề rõ ràng và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp, tránh lặp từ, dùng từ chính xác (ví dụ 'accountant' thay vì 'accounting scene'), và nêu lý do cụ thể, tối đa 3-4 câu có liên từ.

範例: I don't want to be a teacher now because I am studying accounting and prefer a career as an accountant. I enjoy working with numbers and organising financial records, so I feel accounting suits my skills. Therefore I plan to pursue internships in finance.

建議: Cần nhất quán về đại từ (he/she), sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ 'detailed feedback' không có 'a'), hoàn thành ý chưa xong, và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể về cách họ giúp bạn (bài tập, phương pháp phản hồi). Giữ 2–4 câu rõ ràng và mạch lạc.

範例: I still remember my high school literature teacher because she was very inspiring and supportive. She helped me improve my writing by giving detailed feedback on my essays and suggesting ways to structure arguments. For example, she showed me how to develop a clear thesis and use textual evidence.

建議: Cần sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và thứ tự ý (reason given is odd: 'not studying at university' irrelevant), tránh tiếng ằ u, dùng liên từ để đối chiếu (however), và mô tả cụ thể kỷ niệm với chi tiết ngắn gọn.

範例: No, I'm not really in touch with my primary school teachers because we now live in different cities. However, I still remember a memorable moment when my teacher organised a school play and gave me a lead role, which boosted my confidence. That experience made school very enjoyable.

建議: Cần câu rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ, sửa ngữ pháp và từ không phù hợp, mô tả cụ thể hành động của giáo viên (ví dụ: giới thiệu sách, phương pháp thảo luận nhóm) với kết quả cụ thể. Giới hạn 2–4 câu có liên từ.

範例: My favourite teacher encouraged me to read widely and taught me how to analyse texts critically. She recommended specific books and introduced me to a study group of high-achieving students, which improved my study habits and writing skills.

建議: Cần dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (compare both), sửa ngữ pháp và lỗi từ (e.g. 'teachers', 'both', 'confidence'), tránh câu lộn xộn, nêu ví dụ ngắn gọn và liên kết bằng từ chuyển tiếp (for example, while).

範例: Not really; I appreciate both primary and high school teachers because each supported me in different ways. For example, my high school math teacher helped me build confidence in problem-solving, while my primary teacher encouraged my curiosity and interest in learning. Both influences were important.

× She has helped me a lot by encouraging me to think, uh, critically and, uh, by teaching important lessons about life, uh, such as the value of BMBT and, uh, health work.

✓ She has helped me a lot by encouraging me to think critically and by teaching important lessons about life, such as the value of BMBT and health work.

Pronoun use is actually acceptable, but the sentence contained disfluencies and unnecessary commas and fillers (uh). Clean up improves clarity. Remove fillers and redundant commas; keep pronoun 'She' consistent with singular teacher. Suggest speaking more smoothly and pausing instead of using fillers.

× Uh, when I was young I wanted to be a teacher, but now I don't want to because I am studying accounting.

✓ When I was young I wanted to be a teacher, but now I do not because I am studying accounting.

The contraction 'don't' is informal but not incorrect; however, 'do not' is clearer in speaking tests. Tense sequence is correct (past desire vs present state). Suggest avoiding fillers and contractions for clarity.

× I I prefer to become an accounting scene.

✓ I prefer to become an accountant.

Double 'I' is a hesitation; 'accounting scene' is incorrect noun usage. 'Accountant' is the correct noun for a person. Ensure subject and verb align and use correct noun forms.

× I enjoy work, working with numbers and office tasks.

✓ I enjoy working with numbers and doing office tasks.

Mixing 'enjoy work, working' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use 'enjoy' followed by gerund ('working') and parallel structure ('doing office tasks'). Suggest keeping parallel gerunds.

× Uh, I have, I still remember my literature teacher from high school because he was very inspiring and supportive.

✓ I still remember my literature teacher from high school because she was very inspiring and supportive.

Pronoun gender mismatch: earlier student referred to literature teacher as 'she'. Maintain consistent pronoun 'she'. Also remove hesitation fillers.

× She helped me improve my writing by giving a detailed feedback and, uh, encourage me to reason widely.

✓ She helped me improve my writing by giving detailed feedback and encouraging me to reason broadly.

'Feedback' is uncountable so 'a detailed feedback' is incorrect; use 'detailed feedback'. Parallel structure requires gerund 'encouraging' after 'by'. 'Reason widely' is awkward; use 'reason broadly' or 'think more broadly'.

× Uh, we made uh, literature on one of the.

✓ We studied literature in one of the courses.

Original is incomplete and ungrammatical. Provide a complete clause: 'studied literature in one of the courses.' Suggest planning full sentence before speaking.

× So how, uh, I'm not really in touch with my, uh, primary school teachers because I'm not studying at university and we live, uh, in a different cities.

✓ I'm not really in touch with my primary school teachers because I'm not studying at university and we live in different cities.

Remove fillers and fix article usage: 'in a different cities' is wrong; use 'in different cities'. Tense 'I'm not studying' is fine. Suggest avoid unnecessary words.

× However, I still remember some memorable moments, uh, such as the time my teacher organized a school play that made me up.

✓ However, I still remember some memorable moments, such as when my teacher organized a school play that cheered me up.

'Made me up' is incorrect collocation; correct phrasal verb is 'cheered me up'. Replace 'the time' with 'when' for smoother structure and remove fillers.

× For my favorite teacher helped me a lot a lot by encouraging me to read many books and showing me how to read them critically.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me a lot by encouraging me to read many books and by showing me how to read them critically.

Sentence begun with 'For my favorite teacher' is awkward; remove 'For'. Ensure parallel structure with 'by encouraging' and 'by showing'. Remove duplicate 'a lot a lot'.

× See also give me give me a once you put books and introduce me to a study a group of high achieving.

✓ She also gave me books and introduced me to a study group of high-achieving students.

Original contains repetitions and fragments. Use past tense 'gave' and 'introduced' to match context. Use noun phrase 'high-achieving students' for clarity.

× Not really. I love teacher from but primary school, primary and high school because eight of them was memorable and supportive.

✓ Not really. I love my primary and high school teachers because each of them was memorable and supportive.

Pronoun and article errors: 'I love teacher from but' is garbled. Use 'my primary and high school teachers'. 'Eight of them' likely meant 'each of them'; ensure subject-verb agreement 'each ... was'.

× For example, my high school math teacher helped me build confident and in a problem solving while my primary school teacher encouraged me my career curiosity.

✓ For example, my high school math teacher helped me build confidence and problem-solving skills, while my primary school teacher encouraged my curiosity about careers.

'Build confident' should be 'build confidence' (noun). 'In a problem solving' is incorrect—use 'problem-solving skills'. 'Encouraged me my career curiosity' is ungrammatical; use 'encouraged my curiosity about careers'. Ensure parallelism and correct noun forms.