教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific example of how the teacher helped you. Use appropriate verb tenses and avoid repetition (e.g., “keeps on encouraging me” and “lead me to higher and higher improvements” sound repetitive).

範例: My favourite teacher was my secondary school maths teacher. He never gave up on me when I got low marks; instead, he patiently explained difficult topics and set extra practice problems, which gradually improved my grades.

建議: Give a direct answer first (Yes/No) and then support it with clear reasons. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid unclear phrases like “grow as an LD.” Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words (However, because, therefore).

範例: No, I don't want to be a teacher. Teaching involves many responsibilities beyond academics, such as guiding students' behaviour and personal development. Because I don't feel ready to take on those duties now, I prefer a different career path.

建議: Avoid repeating the same content from a previous answer; instead provide a new specific memory. Fix grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and clarify unclear words like “Max.” Use a linking phrase to add details (For example, once he...).

範例: Yes, I remember my secondary school maths teacher vividly. For example, when I failed a test he spent extra time explaining each mistake and gave me a study plan, which helped me improve my scores over the semester.

建議: Be concise and correct small grammar mistakes (e.g., “some of them have already left,” “I'm grateful that we have social media”). Remove filler words like “uh.” Use a linking word to organise ideas (However, fortunately).

範例: Yes, I keep in touch with many of my primary school teachers. I visit the school once a year, but some teachers have moved on; however, thanks to social media I can still contact them regularly.

建議: Answer directly and give a specific example of advice or action. Correct grammar (verb forms, articles) and make sentences clearer and natural. Use linking words to connect cause and effect (For instance, because, therefore).

範例: My favourite teacher helped me by offering practical guidance, not just academics. For instance, when I felt lost about my future, she told me not to be afraid and encouraged me to follow my interests, which helped me choose a suitable university major.

建議: Start with a clear direct answer (It’s hard to say / I can’t really compare) and then explain specific differences. Fix grammar and word choice (e.g., “teach me how to behave and how to study,” “high school teachers built on that foundation”). Use linking words like “whereas” or “while.”

範例: I can't really compare them because both played different roles. Primary school teachers taught me basic behaviour and study habits, whereas high school teachers built on that foundation and encouraged my academic and personal growth.

× Yes I do, he is my math teacher during the secondary school.

✓ Yes I do, he was my math teacher during secondary school.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'secondary school' in this context and the time reference requires past tense 'was' because the student refers to a past period. Use 'secondary school' without 'the' and change present 'is' to past 'was' to match context.

× I love him a lot because he never give up on me even though I scored low marks in maths.

✓ I love him a lot because he never gives up on me even though I scored low marks in math.

Subject 'he' requires third person singular verb 'gives' (Grammar Problem Type 27 and 2). Also use singular 'math' (or 'maths' regionally) consistently. Ensure verb agrees with subject.

× Instead he keeps on encouraging me and answer some of my questions and lead me to higher and higher improvements.

✓ Instead he keeps encouraging me, answers some of my questions, and leads me to continuous improvement.

After 'keeps' use the -ing form 'keeping' structure with parallel verb forms; however 'keeps encouraging' is correct so the following verbs should be in third person singular present 'answers' and 'leads' for subject-verb agreement. Also 'higher and higher improvements' is awkward; use 'continuous improvement'.

× I would say teacher is an occupation that bears a lot of responsibilities.

✓ I would say that being a teacher is an occupation that carries a lot of responsibilities.

The original lacks proper noun phrase structure. Use 'being a teacher' or 'a teacher' with 'is' and use 'carries' or 'has' for responsibilities. 'Bears' is possible but 'carries' is more natural.

× They're not teaching students academics, but also teach them how to behave and how to grow as an LD or adult.

✓ They don't just teach students academics, but also teach them how to behave and how to grow as a child or adult.

Use negative form 'don't' with base verb and keep parallel structure 'teach ... and teach ...'. 'They're not teaching students academics' is awkward; 'not just' is more natural. 'LD' appears incorrect; replace with 'child'. Ensure verbs agree with plural subject 'they'.

× So I think that I'm not really responsible for doing this at the same at now.

✓ So I think that I'm not really ready to take on this responsibility right now.

The original mixes awkward phrasing. 'Responsible for doing this at the same at now' is ungrammatical. Use 'ready to take on this responsibility right now' to convey intended meaning; tense remains present.

× Yes I do, he is my math teachers during the secondary school.

✓ Yes I do, he was my math teacher during secondary school.

Plural 'teachers' is incorrect if referring to one person; use singular 'teacher'. Also use past tense 'was' and omit 'the' before 'secondary school' for natural phrasing.

× I love him a lot because he never give up on me even though I scored low Max and Max.

✓ I loved him a lot because he never gave up on me even though I scored low marks.

The sentence repeats 'Max and Max' which appears to be an error; replace with 'marks'. Match tense consistently: if referring to past period, use past 'loved' and 'gave up'. Subject-verb agreement requires 'gave' for past tense.

× Instead he keeps on encouraging me and always answer some of my questions and lead me to better improve.

✓ Instead, he kept encouraging me, always answered some of my questions, and helped me improve.

Maintain parallel verb forms and correct tense. 'Keeps on encouraging' should align with past context 'kept encouraging'. Use past tense verbs 'answered' and 'helped' to match the time reference. 'Lead me to better improve' is ungrammatical; use 'helped me improve'.

× Oh yes, I do. I always go back to my primary school once a year in order to visit some of my primary school teachers.

✓ Oh yes, I do. I always go back to my primary school once a year to visit some of my primary school teachers.

This sentence is largely correct; minor style change: 'in order to' can be simplified to 'to'. No subject-verb agreement error, but adjusted for natural phrasing.

× However, unfortunately, some of them has already left the primary school.

✓ However, unfortunately, some of them have already left the primary school.

Plural subject 'some of them' requires plural verb 'have' not 'has'.

× But it's grateful that, uh, we have social media nowadays and I can still keep in touch with them.

✓ But it's great that we have social media nowadays and I can still keep in touch with them.

Use 'great' rather than 'grateful' because the speaker is describing a situation, not expressing personal gratitude. Remove filler 'uh' and correct idiom 'keep in touch with' is fine.

× I would say my favorite teacher not only teach me knowledge or academics but teach me how to choose the things I want.

✓ I would say my favorite teacher not only taught me academic knowledge but also taught me how to choose what I want.

Use past tense 'taught' if referring to a past teacher. Maintain parallel structure 'not only... but also...' and use 'academic knowledge' and 'what I want' for clarity.

× When I'm feeling lost about my future, it's she who told me that not too afraid and always follow my own mind in order to choose the things that I want.

✓ When I was feeling lost about my future, it was she who told me not to be too afraid and to always follow my own mind when choosing what I want.

Pronoun and tense corrections: 'it's she who told me' should be past 'it was she who told me'. Use infinitive 'not to be' and parallel infinitive 'to always follow'. 'Choose the things that I want' simplified to 'choosing what I want'.

× It's hard to compare because they both are important roles in my life path.

✓ It's hard to compare because they both play important roles in my life.

'They both are important roles' is awkward; use 'they both play important roles' and simplify 'life path' to 'life' for natural phrasing.

× Primary school teacher teaches me how to behave and how to learn works and high school teacher built on these knowledges and teach me and encourage me to grow as an adult.

✓ Primary school teachers taught me how to behave and how to do schoolwork, and high school teachers built on this knowledge and taught and encouraged me to grow into an adult.

Use plural 'teachers' if referring generally, match past tense 'taught' and 'built', correct 'learn works' to 'do schoolwork', change 'knowledges' to uncountable 'knowledge', and ensure parallel verbs 'taught and encouraged'. Use 'grow into an adult' for natural phrasing.