教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct small errors (capitalization, article use), add one specific example and a linking word. Keep within 3–4 sentences. Avoid redundancy like repeating 'made the class less serious' and 'really fun'.

範例: Yes. My favorite teacher was my high school English teacher because she made lessons enjoyable. For example, she showed clips from Friends to teach idioms and pronunciation, which helped me remember vocabulary naturally.

建議: Clarify meaning, correct vocabulary errors and grammar, and give a clear topic sentence followed by reasons with linking words. Avoid unrelated words like 'Fishing'.

範例: I'm not sure I want to be a teacher. On the one hand, teaching appeals to me because I could help students develop useful skills; however, on the other hand, I'm concerned I might not be patient enough to manage a large class.

建議: Fix word choice errors ('T-shirt' -> 'teacher', 'hiking' -> 'building'), make sentences coherent with linking words, and give one brief specific example of how she helped you build confidence.

範例: Yes. I particularly remember my primary school English teacher because she was supportive and knowledgeable. For example, she encouraged me to read aloud every day, which gradually built my confidence in speaking English.

建議: Correct grammar and unclear phrasing ('I think I should live more' unclear). Use a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail with linking word. Keep it concise.

範例: Not really. It's been many years since I left primary school, although I visited some teachers several times when I was in junior high. I regret not staying in touch more.

建議: Fix unclear phrase ('super English secret'), reduce repetition ('inspired me a lot' twice), and give one concrete example of help with linking words. Be specific about methods used and results.

範例: She helped me improve my speaking skills by chatting with me in English regularly and correcting my mistakes gently. As a result, I became more confident and could speak more fluently in class.

建議: Correct word choice ('T-shirts' -> 'teachers'), avoid filler words ('uh', 'umm'), and state a clear comparison with linking words and one specific reason or example for the difference.

範例: I prefer my primary school teachers because they were more patient. In contrast, my high school teachers were stricter and had higher expectations as students prepared for exams.

× Yes, definitely. My favorite teacher is probably my high school English teacher. She is really fun and always made the class less serious and she used to play some clips from shows like friends to make us learn from it rather than memorizing vocabulary.

✓ Yes, definitely. My favorite teacher is probably my high school English teacher. She was really fun and always made the classes less serious, and she used to play clips from shows like Friends to help us learn from them rather than just memorizing vocabulary.

Problems: 'is' vs 'was' (tense consistency) and 'made the class' should be 'made the classes' (singular/plural issue); 'shows like friends' needs capitalization and 'from it' is incorrect reference and should be 'from them' (pronoun reference). Use past tense 'was' and 'used to' together to describe past habitual actions. Make 'classes' plural because 'always made the class less serious' refers to recurring class sessions. Capitalize proper noun Friends. Replace 'from it' with 'from them' to agree with plural 'shows' and change 'to make us learn' to 'to help us learn' for natural phrasing.

× Well, I'm not completely sure Fishing appeals to me because you can help students grow and develop useful skills, but I'm not sure I mean patient enough to manage a large class.

✓ Well, I'm not completely sure teaching appeals to me because you can help students grow and develop useful skills, but I'm not sure I am patient enough to manage a large class.

Errors: 'Fishing' is a typo for 'teaching' (word choice); 'I'm not sure I mean patient enough' is incorrect structure and should be 'I'm not sure I am patient enough' (sentence structure and verb form). Use 'teaching' to match context and include the verb 'am' for correct predicate.

× I remember many teachers and I like to talk about my primary school English T-shirt. She is really supportive and knowledgeable.

✓ I remember many teachers and I would like to talk about my primary school English teacher. She was really supportive and knowledgeable.

Problems: 'T-shirt' is a wrong word for 'teacher' (word choice). Maintain past tense 'was' when describing a former teacher. 'I like to talk' can be 'I would like to talk' or 'I want to talk' depending on context; 'would like to' is here more natural in an interview recounting. Correct the noun to 'teacher'.

× At that time I remember I was really uncomfortable about my own English and she inspired me a lot to speak more and hiking some confidence.

✓ At that time I remember I was really uncomfortable about my English, and she inspired me a lot to speak more and to gain some confidence.

Errors: 'hiking some confidence' is incorrect collocation; the correct phrase is 'gain some confidence' or 'build some confidence' (wrong verb). Add 'to' before the verb for parallel structure ('to speak' and 'to gain'). Remove 'own' as unnecessary. Maintain past tense.

× Not really, it's been many years since I left school, but when I in junior high school I came back to visit them for many times. I think I should live more.

✓ Not really, it's been many years since I left school, but when I was in junior high school I went back to visit them many times. I think I should live closer.

Problems: Missing verb 'was' after 'when I' (sentence structure) and 'came back to visit them for many times' is unidiomatic; use 'went back to visit them many times' (verb choice and adverb placement). 'I think I should live more' is unclear; likely intended 'live closer' or 'visit more often'. Here 'live closer' fits better if meaning proximity; if meaning frequency, 'visit more often' would be appropriate.

× My super English secret helped me a lot in my oral English. At that time I was so unconfident about my English so she inspired me to speak more and always chat with me in English and she inspired me a lot.

✓ My super English teacher helped me a lot with my spoken English. At that time I was very insecure about my English, so she encouraged me to speak more and always chatted with me in English.

Issues: 'My super English secret' is wrong word choice; should be 'teacher'. 'Oral English' is better phrased 'spoken English' and 'helped me a lot in' becomes 'helped me a lot with'. 'Unconfident' is nonstandard — use 'insecure' or 'not confident'. Use past tense consistently ('encouraged'/'chatted'). Remove repeated clause 'she inspired me a lot' to avoid redundancy.

× First, because my uh, high school teachers were way more strict than T-shirts in primary school. Umm, as our body stress become heavier, they have more higher standards to me.

✓ Firstly, my high school teachers were much stricter than the teachers in primary school. As our workload and stress increased, they had higher expectations of me.

Errors: 'T-shirts' is wrong for 'teachers' (word choice). 'Way more strict' should be 'much stricter' (comparative form) and 'than T-shirts in primary school' should be 'than the teachers in primary school' (noun and article). 'As our body stress become heavier' is ungrammatical — use 'as our workload and stress increased' (word choice and tense). 'They have more higher standards to me' should be 'they had higher expectations of me' (tense, incorrect comparative 'more higher', and preposition use).