教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant with a good topic sentence and supporting details. To improve, make it slightly more specific by naming one concrete way she helped (e.g., suggesting a structure, giving feedback on drafts) and add a linking phrase to show result. Also keep it within 3–4 sentences to sound natural.

範例: Yes. My thesis advisor in college was my favorite teacher. For example, she helped me structure my thesis by suggesting an outline and giving detailed feedback on each draft, which made my ideas much clearer. As a result, I felt more confident about my research.

建議: Good direct response and reasons. To improve, make the language more concise and natural, correct small grammar issues (e.g., "a high level of understanding" -> "a high level of understanding" or better "deep subject knowledge"), and use a linking word to connect reasons. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: No, I don't. Teaching requires a lot of patience and deep subject knowledge, and it also demands excellent communication skills to explain complex topics clearly.

建議: Strong answer with specific example and clear result (confidence and support). To improve further, replace vague phrase "motherly" with more precise behavior (e.g., "supportive and attentive") and add a linking word to connect the pandemic action to its effect.

範例: Yes, I still remember my thesis advisor because she was very supportive and attentive. When the pandemic hit, she held regular online consultations, which helped us stay confident and progress with our research.

建議: Clear and natural response. Improve by correcting tense consistency (use present perfect "haven't kept in touch") and by shortening for naturalness. Add a brief reason or expectation to enrich the answer.

範例: No, I haven't kept in touch with my primary school teachers. However, if I met them I would definitely recognize them and stop to say hello and catch up.

建議: Good topic sentence and specific supporting detail (questions during consultations). To improve, avoid repeating "help" twice; use varied vocabulary and add a linking word to show cause and effect (e.g., "by asking" -> "which led me to").

範例: My thesis advisor helped me organize my ideas and refine my concept by asking probing questions during online consultations, which led me to explore new angles and improve my arguments.

建議: Reasonable comparison with personal opinion and supporting details. To improve, make phrasing more concise and precise (e.g., "friendlier" instead of "more friendly") and use linking words to structure contrast (e.g., "although" then "because"). Limit to 3 sentences.

範例: No, I prefer my high school teachers. Although primary teachers were more energetic and friendly, high school teachers often became more like friends and mentors, which I enjoyed because it made learning more engaging.

× No, I think being a teacher takes a lot of patience and the high level of understanding, and I also think that it takes very good communication skills in order to teach something that I'm an expert in.

✓ No, I think being a teacher takes a lot of patience and a high level of understanding, and I also think that it takes very good communication skills in order to teach something that I'm an expert in.

The phrase 'the high level of understanding' incorrectly uses the definite article 'the'. Use the indefinite article 'a' when referring to a non-specific level. Suggestion: use 'a high level of understanding' for general statements about qualities required for teaching.

× No, I didn't keep in touch with my primary school teachers, although I'm sure if I see them around I'll definitely recognize their face and stop to say hi and catch up.

✓ No, I didn't keep in touch with my primary school teachers, although I'm sure if I see them around I'll definitely recognize their faces and stop to say hi and catch up.

The singular noun 'their face' conflicts with the plural antecedent 'teachers'. Use the plural 'faces' to agree with 'teachers'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns and nouns agree in number (plural with plural).

× My thesis advisor was instrumental in helping me organize all my ideas and helping me to refine my concept.

✓ My thesis advisor was instrumental in helping me organize all my ideas and in helping me to refine my concept.

Parallel structure requires consistent use of prepositions when repeating verb phrases. The original mixes 'helping me organize' with 'helping me to refine' without consistent parallel prepositional structure; adding 'in' before the second gerund creates clearer parallelism. Suggestion: maintain parallel structure in coordinated verb phrases (either 'helping me to X and to Y' or 'helping me X and helping me Y' or 'helping me X and in helping me Y').

× I see that primary school teachers are more energetic and they're more friendly, but I think when you grow older, your teachers can become a little bit more of your friends, so that's what I enjoyed.

✓ I see that primary school teachers are more energetic and they're friendlier, but I think when you grow older, your teachers can become a little bit more like your friends, so that's what I enjoyed.

Use the comparative adjective 'friendlier' instead of the adjective phrase 'more friendly' for smoother, idiomatic English. Also 'more of your friends' is unnatural; 'more like your friends' expresses the intended meaning. Suggestion: use comparative forms for adjectives ('friendlier') and prefer 'like' for similarity comparisons.

× She helped me process my ideas very well and communicated what needed to be done very clearly.

✓ She helped me process my ideas very well and communicated what needed to be done very clearly.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. (Included here to indicate no change because 'helped me process' and 'communicated' are correct forms.)

× Yes, my thesis advisor is very memorable to me. She was always caring and motherly. When the pandemic hit, she would hold regular online classes and consultations so that we still felt confident and supported.

✓ Yes, my thesis advisor is very memorable to me. She was always caring and motherly. When the pandemic hit, she held regular online classes and consultations so that we still felt confident and supported.

Using 'would hold' is grammatically acceptable for habitual past actions, but 'held' is a clearer simple past form that fits the narrative. Suggestion: prefer simple past 'held' for specific past events to avoid ambiguity unless emphasizing habitual behavior.

× She asked me questions during our online consultations that pushed me to explore.

✓ She asked me questions during our online consultations that pushed me to explore.

No correction needed; verb forms agree with subject. (Included to indicate sentence is correct.)

× Yes, my thesis advisor is very memorable to me. She was always caring and motherly.

✓ Yes, my thesis advisor is very memorable to me. She was always caring and motherly.

Sentence is grammatically correct; pronouns agree with antecedents. (Included to show no change.)

× I think I prefer my high school teachers more.

✓ I think I prefer my high school teachers.

The verb 'prefer' already includes the comparative meaning; adding 'more' is redundant. Suggestion: remove 'more' after 'prefer' to avoid redundancy.

× I see that primary school teachers are more energetic and they're more friendly, but I think when you grow older, your teachers can become a little bit more of your friends, so that's what I enjoyed.

✓ I see that primary school teachers are more energetic and they're friendlier, but I think when you grow older, your teachers can become a little bit more like your friends, so that's what I enjoyed.

(Duplicate entry merged earlier) Use comparative adjective 'friendlier' and change 'more of your friends' to 'more like your friends' for natural phrasing.