教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and clearer vocabulary (e.g., “taught,” “subject,” “patience,” “inspired”). Avoid repetition.

範例: Yes. My favorite teacher was my elementary school public health teacher because she taught us practical habits like hand-washing and healthy eating. Her patience and energetic lessons inspired me to want to teach public health myself.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with linking words. Fix grammar (e.g., “want to work,” “hygiene and health are very important for students,” “from childhood”). Keep it under five sentences.

範例: Absolutely. I want to work as an elementary school teacher because I believe teaching hygiene and basic health habits early helps children form lifelong routines. For example, I would teach hand-washing and proper nutrition to prevent illness.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the teacher and role. Use correct adjectives and explain specifically how she helped (e.g., improved my speaking, pushed me to study). Use linking words like “because” or “so.”

範例: Yes. I still remember my high school English teacher, Miss Chan, because she pushed us to improve our grades and our speaking skills. Although she was strict, she gave clear feedback and extra practice that helped me improve a lot.

建議: Be concise and accurate. Start with a direct yes/no and one specific detail about the teacher and current contact. Correct grammar (e.g., “She taught history and now teaches math and history,” “I admired her because…”). Avoid vague phrases.

範例: Yes. I still keep in touch with my primary school teacher, Miss Wen. She taught history and now teaches both math and history, and I admired her because she supported every student in the class.

建議: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating the way the teacher helped you (e.g., patience and guidance). Give one concrete example of how their help changed your behaviour. Use linking words like “when” and “so” and correct phrasing.

範例: She helped me mainly through her patience and clear guidance. For example, when I felt anxious about assignments, she calmly explained the steps and showed me how to approach the work, so I felt more confident and completed tasks well.

建議: Answer directly and compare with a clear structure: state difficulty, then give two contrasting specific reasons using linking words like “however” or “on the other hand.” Fix grammar and vocabulary (e.g., “depends,” “helped me with academic skills,” “helped me build habits”).

範例: It’s hard to choose because they helped me in different ways. My high school teachers improved my academic performance, while my primary teachers helped me develop patience and good daily habits.

× she taught me in an elementary school and the subject she told is was public health and health improvement and her her impatience of teaching inspired me a lot.

✓ She taught me in elementary school, and the subject she taught was public health and health improvement; her patience in teaching inspired me a lot.

The original sentence uses incorrect verb forms and word choice: 'told is was' mixes tense and verbs incorrectly; 'impatience' is the wrong word (means lack of patience) rather than 'patience'. Use the past simple 'taught' for the completed action, and 'was' for the subject complement. Also remove the duplicated 'her' and unnecessary article 'an' before 'elementary school'. Suggestion: keep verbs consistent (past simple) and choose the correct noun 'patience'.

× So now I want to become a teacher and teach health improvement.

✓ So now I want to become a teacher and teach health improvement.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; verbs 'want to become' and 'teach' correctly use infinitives. No change needed. Included for completeness when only listed types should be corrected; none required here.

× I want to be a teacher in the future and I want work in elementary school.

✓ I want to be a teacher in the future and I want to work in an elementary school.

After 'want' the verb requires the infinitive marker 'to' ('want to work'). Also include the article 'an' before 'elementary school' when referring to a job at one. Suggestion: use 'want to' + base verb and appropriate articles.

× I want to teach the subject of public health or health improvement because I think some knowledge about hygiene or health is are very important to student and I think they need to learn from in their child.

✓ I want to teach public health or health improvement because I think knowledge about hygiene and health is very important for students and they should learn it from a young age.

Multiple errors: 'some knowledge' can be simplified to 'knowledge' and requires singular verb 'is' not 'are'; 'student' should be plural 'students'; preposition 'to student' is wrong — use 'for students'; 'learn from in their child' is unclear—correct to 'learn it from a young age' or 'in childhood'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement ('knowledge ... is'), pluralize nouns when referring generally ('students'), and use correct prepositions and idiomatic expressions.

× She is an English teacher and I met her in my high school time.

✓ She was an English teacher, and I met her when I was in high school.

If speaking about a past period, use past tense 'was'. 'High school time' is unidiomatic; use 'when I was in high school' or 'during high school'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use natural time expressions.

× She was very serious teacher and she asked our grades to very much but she helped me a lot.

✓ She was a very strict teacher and she cared a lot about our grades, but she helped me a lot.

Missing article before 'very serious teacher' — should be 'a very serious teacher'. 'Asked our grades to very much' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'cared a lot about our grades' or 'was very strict about grades'. Replace with idiomatic phrasing and keep past tense. Suggestion: use articles for singular countable nouns and prefer idiomatic verbs like 'care about'.

× Yes, I still keep in touch with my primary school teachers. Oh her name is Miss Wen and she told History Land.

✓ Yes, I still keep in touch with my primary school teachers. One of them was Miss Wen, and she taught history.

'Oh her name is' is awkward; 'One of them was' clarifies. 'told History Land' is incorrect—use 'taught history'. Use past tense 'taught' for past teaching. Suggestion: use 'taught' for teaching and clearer reference expressions like 'one of them'.

× But now I think she teach math and history at the same time and she is my main teacher in my class then and I admire her a lot.

✓ But now I think she teaches math and history at the same time; she was my main teacher in that class, and I admired her a lot.

Subject-verb agreement: 'she teach' should be 'she teaches' for present; however context mixes past and present—if referring to current job use 'teaches' and past relationship 'was my main teacher' for the past. 'in my class then' is better as 'in that class' and 'admire' should match tense: 'admired' if describing past feelings. Suggestion: decide on tense consistency and correct subject-verb agreement.

× I think it is patience because when I feel I don't know like what to do now I will feel very anxious and nervous.

✓ I think it is patience, because when I feel that I don't know what to do I become very anxious and nervous.

Unnecessary 'like' and awkward phrasing. Use 'that' to introduce clause and remove 'now' for clarity. 'Will feel' is awkward when describing general reactions—use present 'become' for habitual responses. Suggestion: simplify clauses and use appropriate tense for habitual states.

× But if a teacher can help me and and talk to me like what should I do now and how to I do, I think I will be very relaxed and I will do it well.

✓ But if a teacher can help me and tell me what I should do and how to do it, I think I will feel much more relaxed and will do it well.

Problems: duplicated 'and', incorrect word order 'talk to me like what should I do now' should be 'tell me what I should do'; 'how to I do' is wrong—use 'how to do it'. Use 'feel' for state and 'will do it well' is acceptable. Suggestion: use direct clauses ('tell me what...') and correct infinitive structures ('how to do it').

× Well, it is very hard to decide because it is depend on different people.

✓ Well, it is very hard to decide because it depends on different people.

Use correct verb form 'depends' (third-person singular) not 'depend'. Also 'depends on people's preferences' might be clearer than 'different people.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and prefer clearer noun phrases.

× My high school teacher helps me a lot on my academic performance.

✓ My high school teachers helped me a lot with my academic performance.

If referring to past influence, use past tense 'helped'. Also 'helps me a lot on my academic performance' is unidiomatic—use 'helped me a lot with my academic performance' and plural 'teachers' if general. Suggestion: choose correct tense and preposition 'with' for 'help with'.

× But teacher in an elementary school was helped me a lot on patience and habits establishment.

✓ But my elementary school teachers helped me a lot with patience and forming good habits.

Missing possessive/article before 'teacher'—use 'my' or 'the'. Remove auxiliary 'was' before 'helped'. Use 'helped me with patience' and more natural phrase 'forming good habits' instead of 'habits establishment'. Suggestion: use appropriate articles/possessives and idiomatic noun phrases.