教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and combine ideas into a fluent short response. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because, so, therefore). Avoid repeating the same idea (supportive/dedicated) twice.

範例: Yes. My favourite high-school teacher was my math teacher because she was very supportive; for example, she often stayed after class to give extra lessons to students who were struggling, which helped me improve my grades.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence, then explain reasons briefly and coherently using linking words. Avoid negative phrasing that sounds absolute; instead, state your reasons and add a brief reflection or alternative aspiration to sound more balanced.

範例: No, I don't plan to become a teacher because I struggled to explain maths when I tried tutoring my sister, and I don't feel I have the necessary patience; instead, I prefer a career where clear explanation is less central.

建議: Combine the points into a compact response with a linking word to show cause and effect. Mention a specific detail or example (a method she used, a topic she helped with) to make your answer more vivid.

範例: Yes, I remember my high-school math teacher because she was very supportive; for example, she gave me extra lessons on algebra when I was struggling, and as a result my test scores improved significantly.

建議: Good concise answer. To improve, link the time reference and content with a short reason or feeling (e.g., why you keep in touch) and use a linking word to make it flow better.

範例: Yes, I still keep in touch with my primary school teacher; I spoke to her two months ago and we exchanged personal updates because she has always supported my career, which she still follows with interest.

建議: Start directly answering the question (e.g., "She helped me by...") and give specific examples of help (study techniques, feedback, stress-management strategies). Use linking words to connect different types of help and avoid repeating general words like "supportive."

範例: She helped me by giving practical study advice and regular feedback on my essays; in addition, she taught me stress-management techniques like breaking tasks into smaller steps, which improved my confidence.

建議: Strong, coherent answer. To improve further, make the topic sentence slightly more direct ("No, I prefer my high-school teachers") and tighten the explanation with one linking word to show cause (e.g., "because"), and consider adding a brief specific example of a discussion about career opportunities.

範例: No, I prefer my high-school teachers because I was more mature then and frequently discussed career opportunities with them; for instance, my chemistry teacher helped me explore university courses.

× Yes, I had a favorite teacher in high school.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher from high school.

The student uses past tense 'had' which implies the preference no longer exists. The question asks about a favorite teacher (general/past memory); however elsewhere the student refers to remembering the teacher and describes ongoing feelings. Use present perfect 'have' or simple past depending on intended meaning. If they still regard that teacher as their favorite, 'I have a favorite teacher from high school' or 'My favorite teacher was in high school' are clearer. Suggestion: choose tense to match whether the preference is current (have) or strictly past (was).

× She taught mathematics.

✓ She taught mathematics.

This sentence is grammatical. No article needed before 'mathematics' because it is an uncountable subject. No change required.

× She was very supportive and dedicated to teaching.

✓ She was very supportive and dedicated to teaching.

This sentence is grammatical. 'Dedicated' is used appropriately as an adjective describing the teacher. No change required.

× For example, she often stayed after classes to give extra lessons for students who were struggling.

✓ For example, she often stayed after class to give extra lessons to students who were struggling.

Use 'after class' (singular) or 'after classes' both can be acceptable, but 'after class' is more idiomatic when referring to staying after the lesson. Also use 'to students' rather than 'for students' when indicating the recipients of lessons. Suggestion: prefer 'after class' and 'to students'.

× No, because I had a bad experience with teaching.

✓ No, because I have had a bad experience with teaching.

Using simple past 'had' makes the experience sound entirely in the past. Since the effect influences the student's current career choice, present perfect 'have had' is better to show relevance to the present. Suggestion: use present perfect to link past experience to current attitudes.

× I once taught my sister mathematics, but she told me that I couldn't explain it clearly.

✓ I once taught my sister mathematics, but she said that I couldn't explain it clearly.

The original is understandable, but 'told me that' often implies direct instruction; 'said that' is more natural for reporting her sister's comment. Tense 'couldn't' is acceptable as past ability; no grammatical change needed besides stylistic improvement. Suggestion: use 'said' for reporting speech and keep past tense for the incident.

× Besides that I think teachers should be patient, but I'm not that kind of person.

✓ Besides that, I think teachers should be patient, and I'm not that kind of person.

Using both 'Besides that' and 'but' together creates a conjunction clash. 'Besides that' introduces an additional point, so pair it with 'and' rather than 'but'. Alternatively, remove 'Besides that' and keep 'but'. Suggestion: ensure conjunctions match the intended relation (addition vs contrast).

× Yes, I still remember my high school teacher who taught me mathematics.

✓ Yes, I still remember my high school teacher who taught me mathematics.

This sentence is correct. 'Still remember' appropriately uses present tense to indicate ongoing memory. No change required.

× She always gave me extra lessons whenever I was struggling and I scored higher after her tutoring.

✓ She always gave me extra lessons whenever I was struggling, and I scored higher after her tutoring.

Add a comma before 'and' joining two independent clauses. The tenses are consistent: past habitual 'gave' and past result 'scored'. No tense change needed. Suggestion: include comma for correct compound sentence punctuation.

× Yes, I still keep in touch with my primary school teacher.

✓ Yes, I still keep in touch with my primary school teacher.

This sentence is correct. Present tense 'keep in touch' correctly indicates ongoing contact. No change required.

× The last time I talked to her was two months ago.

✓ The last time I talked to her was two months ago.

This sentence is correct. Past simple 'talked' with a time expression 'two months ago' is appropriate. No change required.

× We shared our personal updates and she was very impressed with my career path.

✓ We shared our personal updates, and she was very impressed with my career path.

Add a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses. Preposition 'with' after 'impressed' is acceptable. No change to preposition needed. Suggestion: include comma for clarity.

× Yes, I had a favorite teacher in high school.

✓ Yes, I had a favorite teacher in high school.

This repeats an earlier sentence. As before, it can be correct if the student means the favorite existed in the past; no change required if that is intended.

× She was an English teacher.

✓ She was an English teacher.

This sentence is correct; no change needed.

× She was very supportive and she always gave me valuable advice.

✓ She was very supportive, and she always gave me valuable advice.

Add a comma before 'and' joining two independent clauses. Otherwise grammatically correct.

× Besides that, she helped me deal with stress.

✓ Besides that, she helped me deal with stress.

This sentence is correct. 'Besides that' used as a discourse marker is acceptable. No change required.

× No, I felt closer to my high school teachers than primary school teachers because I became more mature and I usually discussed my career opportunities with them, which made our relationship stronger.

✓ No, I felt closer to my high school teachers than to my primary school teachers because I became more mature, and I usually discussed my career opportunities with them, which made our relationship stronger.

Include 'to' before 'my primary school teachers' for correct comparison structure. Add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. 'Felt' and 'became' are past tense consistently. Suggestion: ensure parallel structure in comparisons by using 'closer to A than to B'.