教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and direct: start with a clear topic sentence naming the teacher, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce repetition and filler sounds (uh). Use past simple correctly (e.g., "was my science teacher").

範例: My favorite teacher was my high school science teacher. He helped students who had poor grades by giving extra explanations and practice tests, and he created a relaxed, fun classroom atmosphere so we felt confident asking questions.

建議: Answer directly and clearly, then give one or two concise reasons with correct grammar. Avoid unclear phrases ("sell my mom"). Use linking words (because, so) properly and keep sentences short.

範例: No, I don't want to be a teacher because I have a different career goal in mind. Also, I saw how exhausted my mother became as a teacher, so I prefer a job with less emotional strain.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence confirming you remember him. Use correct tense and simpler phrasing. Provide one specific memory or reason and use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I still remember my high school science teacher because he explained difficult ideas clearly and was very encouraging. For example, he stayed after class to help me understand chemistry problems.

建議: Give a direct answer then add a concise explanation. Use correct past tense and avoid repetition. If you mention feelings, give a short specific example of what you would tell them.

範例: No, I'm not still in touch with them. I lost contact after I moved to middle school, but I would like to thank them and tell them how far I've come, such as the subjects I study now.

建議: Begin with a clear topic sentence describing the ways he helped, then give two specific examples with linking words (for example, by..., and...). Correct vocabulary ("bad note" → "poor grades") and avoid endings like "that's it."

範例: He helped us improve academically by giving extra exercises when we had poor grades, and he kept the class positive by using jokes and group activities so we never felt bored.

建議: Answer directly (Yes or No) and support it with two clear, specific reasons linked with because/for example. Avoid repeating the same phrase ("used to"). Keep to two- three sentences.

範例: Yes, I preferred my primary school teachers because they were more caring and spent time building my confidence. For example, they gave personalised attention and encouraged me when I was shy.

× Yes, I have a favorite teacher when I was at high school, I left my science teacher because he used to help us a lot.

✓ Yes, I had a favorite teacher when I was in high school; I liked my science teacher because he helped us a lot.

The student mixes present perfect 'have' with a past time reference 'when I was at high school' and uses 'left' incorrectly. Use simple past 'had' and 'liked' to match the past timeframe; 'in high school' is the correct preposition. Also replace 'used to help' with simple past 'helped' to indicate repeated past actions or keep 'used to help' consistently.

× Also he was so kind for example, if I had bad notes, he used to help me and make it better and he used to make us, uh, funny and.

✓ Also he was very kind. For example, if I had bad grades, he would help me and make them better, and he used to make the class fun.

Use 'very' instead of 'so' for formality and 'grades' instead of 'notes'. 'Make it better' should agree with plural 'grades' -> 'make them better'. 'Make us funny' is unnatural; 'make the class fun' or 'make us laugh' fits. Also split into clearer sentences.

× No I don't want it to be teacher because I have another dream.

✓ No, I don't want to be a teacher because I have another dream.

Incorrect structure 'don't want it to be teacher' should be 'don't want to be a teacher'. Remove the extra 'it' and include the article 'a' before 'teacher'.

× Also when I sell my mom feel tired because she is teacher like she always tires, she always feel bad so I don't wanna be like her and it's so harmful.

✓ Also when I see my mom, she feels tired because she is a teacher; she is always tired and often feels unwell, so I don't want to be like her because it seems harmful.

Multiple pronoun and verb agreement errors: 'sell' should be 'see'. 'My mom feel' should be 'she feels' (subject-verb agreement). Missing article 'a' before 'teacher'. 'She always tires' is incorrect; use 'she is always tired'. Avoid informal 'wanna' in formal correction. Clarify 'harmful' to 'seems harmful'.

× Yes, as I told you before, my science teacher was of the most favorite teacher that I see in my life and I wish that all the teachers are like him and I wish that I can meet him for the second time.

✓ Yes, as I told you before, my science teacher was one of the most favorite teachers I have had in my life, and I wish all teachers were like him; I hope I can meet him again.

Mix of past and present tenses and incorrect phrasing: 'was of the most favorite teacher' should be 'was one of my favorite teachers'. 'That I see in my life' should be 'I have had in my life' or simply 'in my life'. Use 'were' in the clause 'I wish all teachers were like him' (subjunctive). 'For the second time' -> 'again' is natural.

× No I didn't since I went to the middle school I didn't saw him for the second time but I missed him a lot.

✓ No, I haven't. Since I went to middle school, I haven't seen him again, but I miss him a lot.

Use present perfect 'haven't seen' to describe an action that has not happened up to now. 'Didn’t saw' is wrong: past tense after 'did' should be base form 'see'. Also 'middle school' does not need 'the' in general reference. Keep consistent tense: 'I miss him' (present).

× So I would say thank thank you for them and tell them what I reach also what I study now.

✓ So I would like to thank them and tell them what I have achieved and what I am studying now.

'Thank thank you for them' is ungrammatical and repetitive. Use 'thank them'. 'What I reach' is incorrect; use 'what I have achieved' or 'how far I have come'. 'What I study now' -> 'what I am studying now' for present continuous.

× He helped us to improve our skills also when when we got a bed note used to help us and make it better.

✓ He helped us improve our skills. Also, when we got a bad grade, he would help us and make it better.

Redundant 'to' after 'helped' is unnecessary in this context ('helped us improve'). 'Bed note' is incorrect; use 'bad grade'. 'Used to help us' is acceptable for repeated past actions, but 'would help' is a clearer alternative. Correct double 'when when' typo.

× Also used to create a good mood in the class to to won't feel bad or boring and that's it.

✓ He also used to create a good mood in class so we wouldn't feel bad or bored, and that was it.

'In the class' -> 'in class' is more natural. 'To to won't feel' is incorrect structure; use 'so we wouldn't feel'. 'Boring' describes something that causes boredom; use 'bored' to describe how students felt. Fix repetition 'to to' and finish sentence properly.

× Well, from my perspective, I used to love my primary school teachers more than the high school teachers because the primary school teachers used to help me, used to treat me well, used to treat me when I was young. But high school, No.

✓ Well, from my perspective, I used to love my primary school teachers more than my high school teachers because they helped me, treated me well, and cared for me when I was young. Not my high school teachers.

Overuse of 'used to' is repetitive; replace with simple past verbs 'helped', 'treated', 'cared for' which fit. 'But high school, No.' is fragmentary; revise to 'Not my high school teachers' or 'Not my high school teachers, though.' Ensure subject consistency 'they' refers to primary teachers.