教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (what he did, how he helped). Avoid awkward phrasing and grammar errors (e.g., 'gives us a feeling where we can relax to his studies'). Use linking words if adding details.

範例: Yes. My favorite teacher at high school was my science teacher, Sir Eugene. He created a relaxed classroom atmosphere by explaining difficult concepts with simple examples, which made me less anxious about exams.

建議: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give a brief reason. Use natural phrasing and correct verb forms. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and avoid unnecessary repetition.

範例: No, I don't plan to be a teacher. I prefer to work in the corporate world because I enjoy business challenges and I want a career that fits my interests in sports and management.

建議: Provide a clear subject and concise, specific details about why you remember her. Avoid filler words ('uh') and unclear phrases ('she is mom Myra'). Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'because').

範例: Yes, I remember my grade 10 science teacher, Ms. Myra. She always encouraged students by praising small improvements, so I felt motivated to go to school without feeling stressed.

建議: Be direct and grammatically accurate. State whether you keep in touch, give one clear reason, and avoid vague or exaggerated language ('they are mighty'). Use singular/plural agreement correctly.

範例: Not really. I lost touch with my primary school teachers after I grew up because they were busy with work, although I still respect and appreciate the influence they had on me.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence describing one main way she helped you, then add a specific example. Correct pronoun and number agreement (she/they) and avoid unclear phrases. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'because'.

範例: She helped me by adapting lessons to my pace because I was a slow learner. For example, she used extra visual aids and one-on-one explanations, which made me more confident and motivated to study.

建議: Answer directly (either same or preference) and give a brief specific reason. Keep sentences complete and avoid trailing or repeated phrases. Use linking words like 'because' to explain.

範例: I appreciate both equally because primary teachers gave me a strong foundation while high school teachers taught useful study techniques and subject knowledge that prepared me for exams.

× Sir Eugene gives us a feeling where we can relax to his studies.

✓ Sir Eugene made us feel relaxed about our studies.

The original uses present simple 'gives' but context is past (when I was a high school student). Use past tense 'made' and correct collocation: 'feel relaxed about our studies.' Replace 'a feeling where we can relax to his studies' with natural phrasing.

× Teacher is not really my option when it's about the professions.

✓ Being a teacher is not really an option for me when it comes to professions.

Missing gerund/article and incorrect phrase order. Use 'Being a teacher' or 'A teaching career' and 'an option for me' and correct idiom 'when it comes to professions.' This makes subject clear and grammar correct.

× I really do love corporate jobs as much as I like my sports when I was a high school student, so teacher is not in my selection in the future.

✓ I really love corporate jobs as much as I loved sports when I was in high school, so teaching is not in my plans for the future.

Tense inconsistency: 'love' (present) vs 'when I was a high school student' (past). Make past tense 'loved' for the past clause. Use 'in high school' idiomatically. 'Teacher is not in my selection' is unnatural; use 'teaching is not in my plans.'

× The teacher that I still remember is when I was a grade 10 student.

✓ The teacher I still remember taught me when I was in grade 10.

Original sentence mixes a person with a time clause incorrectly. Make the teacher the subject who 'taught me' and place the time clause after the verb. Also use 'in grade 10.'

× She is mom Myra in my science class and she motivates me every time when uh I'm with her class and it becomes my motivation everyday to enter the school without any pressure.

✓ She is Mom Myra from my science class, and she motivated me every time I was in her class; she became my daily motivation to go to school without pressure.

Pronoun and tense issues: 'She is mom Myra' should be 'She is Mom Myra' or 'She was Mom Myra.' Context is past, so use past 'motivated' and 'was in her class.' 'Everyday' should be 'every day' and sentence needs clearer clause connections. Also use 'to go to school' instead of 'to enter the school.'

× Since I'm an adult now, I don't really have a connection with them because they are a busy person.

✓ Since I'm an adult now, I don't really keep in touch with them because they are busy people.

Pronoun-number mismatch: 'they are a busy person' is incorrect because 'they' is plural; use 'busy people.' Also 'have a connection with' is unnatural here; 'keep in touch with' is better.

× They have a lot of things to do when it comes to teaching because of course they are teachers and I would always be inspired by them and thankful that they are mighty.

✓ They have a lot to do when it comes to teaching because, of course, they are teachers, and I will always be inspired by them and thankful for their efforts.

Awkward phrasing and modal/tense: 'would always be inspired' should be 'will always be inspired' (or 'am always inspired') depending on meaning; here general present fits. 'Thankful that they are mighty' is incorrect collocation; use 'thankful for their efforts.' Also simplify 'a lot of things to do' to 'a lot to do.'

× My favorite teacher really helped me when it comes to learning especially in her class since I'm a slow learner student.

✓ My favorite teacher really helped me with learning, especially in her class, since I'm a slow learner.

Tense mix: 'helped me when it comes to learning' mixes past and present; use 'helped me with learning.' 'Slow learner student' is redundant; use 'slow learner.' Also add commas for clarity.

× They help me to become motivated and engage and help me inspire more from the teachers that I really wrote on.

✓ She helped me become more motivated and engaged, and she inspired me to learn more from the teachers I admired.

Pronoun and tense: context is past so use 'helped' and singular 'she' to refer to the favorite teacher. 'Engage' should be past participle 'engaged.' 'Help me inspire more from' is ungrammatical; replace with 'inspired me to learn more from.' 'Wrote on' is unclear; likely 'admired.'

× I do love my high school teachers as much as I love my primary school teachers.

✓ I love my high school teachers just as much as I love my primary school teachers.

Original is understandable but slightly awkward. Use 'just as much as' for the comparative structure. No major grammar error but improved naturalness.

× They are all an inspiration to me and they really help me with my learnings, especially the techniques and the methods that they teach me when I was a student and they are the teachers that.

✓ They are all an inspiration to me and really helped me with my learning, especially the techniques and methods they taught me when I was a student.

Run-on and tense consistency: mix of present 'help' and past 'when I was a student.' Make past tense 'helped' and 'taught.' 'My learnings' is nonstandard; use 'my learning.' The final fragment 'and they are the teachers that' is incomplete and removed.