教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and clear: start with a simple topic sentence naming the teacher, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitation sounds and incorrect grammar (e.g. 'supervisor', 'taught me how to probe, solve problems and conclude research').

範例: My favorite teacher was my university supervisor for my final year project. He taught me research methods and helped me learn how to identify problems, find solutions and write clear conclusions.

建議: Give a direct answer then briefly explain reasons with clear linking words. Correct grammar (e.g. 'I enjoy explaining ideas' and 'simplifying'). Avoid repetition and hesitations.

範例: I would like to be a teacher in the future because I enjoy explaining ideas and helping others. For example, I like simplifying difficult topics so students can understand them more easily.

建議: Answer directly and provide specific memories with correct verb forms and vocabulary. Use linking words to organize points and avoid fragmented sentences. Replace vague words like 'touched' with 'taught' or 'influenced'.

範例: Yes, I remember my university supervisor from last year. He was very kind and supportive; he taught me academic skills, research methods and how to complete a project on time.

建議: Start with a clear negative or positive answer, then give concise reasons with proper grammar and fewer hesitations. Use linking words ('because', 'so') correctly and be specific about time and place.

範例: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers because I moved to a different city many years ago. As a result, I lost contact with several teachers and classmates.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence then two specific examples of help. Use correct collocations ('soft skills', 'demonstrated step-by-step') and avoid fillers and repetition.

範例: He helped me academically and also taught soft skills such as time management. For example, he showed me step-by-step how to plan a research project and meet deadlines.

建議: Answer directly then give two clear reasons using linking words ('because', 'so'). Fix grammar (e.g. 'teachers', 'I prefer my high school teachers because I remember them better and the subjects were more interesting'). Keep sentences concise.

範例: No, I prefer my high school teachers because I remember them more clearly and the subjects were more interesting. As a result, their lessons left a stronger impression on me.

× He taught me not only academic subject, but also I taught how to umm, probing, solving and termination for the research for example.

✓ He taught me not only academic subjects, but also taught me how to probe, solve problems, and conclude research, for example.

The noun 'subject' should be plural 'subjects' to match 'not only' with a general category. Also 'I taught' is incorrect; it should be 'taught me' to show the teacher taught the student. Verbs like 'probing, solving and termination' are awkward; use infinitives or gerunds appropriately: 'how to probe, solve problems, and conclude research.' This creates parallel structure and corrects word choice and verb forms.

× Yes, maybe I'm not completely sure, but I would be I would like to be a teacher.

✓ Yes, maybe I'm not completely sure, but I would like to be a teacher.

The sentence contains a repeated phrase 'I would be I would like.' Remove the incorrect extra 'I would be' so the modal 'would like' correctly expresses a preference in the present/future context.

× I enjoy explain the ideas umm to someone and helping and I think I can help student understand difficult uh, subject by uh SIM simplify is and.

✓ I enjoy explaining ideas to others and helping; I think I can help students understand difficult subjects by simplifying them.

After 'enjoy' use the -ing form 'explaining.' 'Helping' should be parallel as 'helping others.' 'Student' needs plural 'students' to match general meaning. 'Subject' should be plural 'subjects.' 'Simplify' must be in -ing or gerund form 'simplifying' and apply to 'them' (the subjects). Also adjust word order and articles for clarity.

× Yes, I remember 1 teacher from university. He has umm. He is a my supervisor protect in last year he was a very generous and and kind person.

✓ Yes, I remember one teacher from university. He was my supervisor in the last year; he was a very generous and kind person.

Use 'one' instead of '1' in formal speech. 'He has umm. He is a my supervisor protect' is ungrammatical: use past tense 'He was my supervisor in the last year.' Remove the extra article 'a' before 'my.' 'Protect' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'project' but the phrase 'supervisor for my final year project' is better. Ensure pronouns and articles are used correctly.

× He not only touched me academic skill but research method and termination and sometime he.

✓ He not only taught me academic skills but also research methods and how to conclude research, and sometimes he...

'Touched' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'taught.' Use past tense 'taught' to match past context. 'Academic skill' should be plural 'academic skills.' 'Research method' should be plural 'research methods.' 'Termination' is wrong word; use 'how to conclude research' or 'how to finalize research.' The sentence fragment 'and sometime he' is incomplete and needs completion or removal.

× No, I'm not in touch, uh, with my primary school teachers. I moved, uh, to the city where I works many years ago.

✓ No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers. I moved to the city where I worked many years ago.

'I works' is incorrect verb form; for past action use 'worked.' Also remove extraneous commas. 'Moved' and 'worked' should both be past tense to indicate when the move occurred.

× And this is because it's wasn't the city where I, I study in primary school, so I lost, uh, the number of person like a teacher and friends.

✓ This is because it wasn't the city where I studied in primary school, so I lost contact with many people like teachers and friends.

Use past tense 'studied' to match 'wasn't.' 'It's wasn't' is incorrect; use 'it wasn't.' 'I lost the number of person' is ungrammatical; say 'I lost contact with many people such as teachers and friends.' Correct plural nouns 'teachers' and 'friends.'

× Yeah, he taught me not only academic skill but also soft skill like time management, and he touched me one by one to demonstrate umm, uh, the, the, the step to to, to do with this talk.

✓ He taught me not only academic skills but also soft skills like time management, and he guided me step by step to demonstrate how to do this work.

Use plural 'skills' and 'soft skills.' 'Touched me one by one' is incorrect; use 'guided me one by one' or 'guided me step by step.' Remove stuttering and ensure parallel structure. 'Step to to, to do with this talk' should be 'step by step to demonstrate how to do this work.' Use gerunds or infinitives correctly.

× No, I prefer my high school teacher I because I can remember them better uh than I was young because I am older and the subject were more exciting so the lesson left a strong impression.

✓ No, I prefer my high school teachers because I can remember them better than when I was younger; I am older now, and the subjects were more exciting, so the lessons left a strong impression.

'Teacher I' is incorrect and should be 'teachers.' Use 'when I was younger' instead of 'than I was young.' 'Subject' should be plural 'subjects' and 'lesson' plural 'lessons.' Ensure verb agreement: 'were' for plural 'subjects.' Reorder clauses for clarity and correct comparative structure.