教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “class teacher” and “main teacher like headmaster” are confusing). Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “She is not only our English teacher but also the class coordinator, so she organizes cultural activities”).

範例: Yes, I do — my favourite teacher is my English teacher. She’s also the class coordinator, so she not only teaches grammar and writing but organizes cultural events and helps students with personal issues.

建議: The answer is contradictory and unclear. First decide yes or no, state it clearly, then give a concise reason. Keep to one main idea and use linking words (e.g., “however” or “although”).

範例: No, I don’t plan to be a teacher. Although I enjoyed learning from teachers and it would be rewarding to relive childhood memories, I prefer a career in engineering because I enjoy problem-solving and design.

建議: Improve grammar and specificity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific detail (how you keep in touch and what you discuss). Use correct tense and prepositions.

範例: Yes, I remember one teacher from seven years ago. We still keep in touch by phone and I often update her on my studies and ask for advice about academic decisions.

建議: Be clearer and more grammatically correct. State the number clearly, then explain the nature of the contact with a specific example. Replace vague phrases like “give my academic tasks” with clearer verbs such as “ask for feedback” or “discuss my assignments.”

範例: Yes, I am. Two of my primary school teachers still keep in touch with me, especially one whom I call regularly to ask for feedback on my assignments and to discuss my academic progress.

建議: Provide one clear example with specific detail and use correct grammar. Start with a topic sentence, then explain the method and its effect using linking words like “for example” or “as a result.”

範例: She greatly helped me with revision. For example, before exams she prepared clear flow charts summarizing key concepts, which made it much easier for me to remember important points and improve my grades.

× She teaches us English subject and she is our class teacher also.

✓ She teaches us English and she is also our class teacher.

Incorrect word order and unnecessary noun 'subject'. Move 'also' before the phrase it modifies and omit 'subject' because 'English' already indicates the subject. This improves natural word order and clarity. (Relevant types: 11 Incorrect use of prepositions/22 Article errors/26 Sentence structure errors)

× That means she manages our total class in any cultural activities as well as the main teacher like headmaster.

✓ That means she manages our whole class during cultural activities and also acts as the head teacher or headmistress.

Awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices: 'total class' should be 'whole class'; 'in any cultural activities' should be 'during cultural activities'; 'main teacher like headmaster' should be 'acts as the head teacher'. Fixing word choice and prepositions clarifies meaning and corrects sentence structure. (Relevant types: 11 Incorrect use of prepositions/26 Sentence structure errors/1 Singular and plural issue)

× No, I don't think so. I want to become a teacher in the future, but for instance, it is a good memory to rediscover our childhood memories through teaching, say teaching in the classes.

✓ No, I don't think so. I want to become a teacher in the future, but for example, teaching can help me relive good childhood memories when I teach in classrooms.

Tense and usage: 'for instance' is misused and sentence is awkward. Use 'for example' and rephrase to match intended meaning. Change 'say teaching in the classes' to 'when I teach in classrooms'. This corrects sentence structure and improves clarity. (Relevant types: 6 Present tense issue/26 Sentence structure errors)

× Yes, I have a teacher from the very past it's been 7 years.

✓ Yes, I had a teacher in the past; it was 7 years ago.

Past time reference requires past tense 'had' and a clear time expression '7 years ago'. Original mixes present and past leading to tense inconsistency. (Relevant types: 5 Past tense issue/26 Sentence structure errors)

× I still be in touch with the teacher and I update my daily or my academically all situations or to her.

✓ I am still in touch with the teacher, and I update her about my daily life and academic situations.

Incorrect verb form 'be' should be 'am', incorrect word order 'update my ... to her' should be 'update her about ...', and 'my academically all situations' is ungrammatical—use 'academic situations'. Fixes involve subject-verb agreement and correct pronoun/object placement. (Relevant types: 12 Incorrect use of pronouns/6 Present tense issue/26 Sentence structure errors)

× Yes I think so. 2 of primary school teachers are still in touch with me, especially 1 teacher.

✓ Yes, I think so. Two of my primary school teachers are still in touch with me, especially one teacher.

Use words for numbers at sentence start and include possessive 'my'. '2' should be written 'Two' and include 'my primary school teachers'. This corrects number format and noun phrase. (Relevant types: 27 Subject-verb agreement errors/1 Singular and plural issue/26 Sentence structure errors)

× I regularly call her and give my academic tasks or any other.

✓ I regularly call her and ask for help with my academic tasks or other matters.

Verb usage: 'give my academic tasks' is incorrect; use 'ask for help with' or 'discuss my academic tasks'. 'Any other' is incomplete—use 'other matters'. Replacing verbs and completing the phrase corrects meaning and grammar. (Relevant types: 8 Verb + -ing form/26 Sentence structure errors)

× Before exam, my teacher used to prepare a easy flow chart for better understanding.

✓ Before exams, my teacher used to prepare an easy flowchart for better understanding.

Article and adjective use: 'a easy' should be 'an easy' because 'easy' begins with a vowel sound. 'Exam' should be plural or 'the exam' depending on context; 'flow chart' is commonly 'flowchart'. Fixing articles and noun forms corrects grammar. (Relevant types: 22 Article errors/13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs)

× In this way, my favorite teacher helped me in many ways.

✓ In this way, my favorite teacher helped me in many ways.

Sentence is correct but note tense consistency: 'helped' is past tense matching prior context. No change needed. (Relevant types: 6 Present tense issue)