教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the teacher, then give two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid contradictions and incorrect pronouns (use he/him consistently). Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, my favorite teacher is Mr. Ali. He treated students like friends while maintaining respect, which made learning comfortable. For example, he encouraged me to join the debate club and helped me improve my public speaking.

建議: Answer directly and give clear reasons with linking words. Use correct expressions for ability and preference (e.g., 'I'm not interested in becoming a teacher because...'). Provide 1–2 concrete reasons and avoid vague or contradictory phrases.

範例: No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future because it requires a lot of patience and long working hours. For instance, teachers often spend evenings preparing lessons and marking homework, which does not suit my preferred lifestyle.

建議: Keep it simple and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the remembered teacher, then add one specific memory or reason using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Correct verb tenses and possessives (my work, close to me).

範例: Yes, I still remember a teacher from my past — Mr. Ali. He was very supportive and often gave me extra practice exercises, which helped me improve my schoolwork significantly.

建議: Answer clearly and mention how you contact them and how often. Use correct sentence structure and tenses, and avoid repetition. Include a brief reason about frequency (e.g., busy schedules) using linking words like 'because' or 'however'.

範例: Yes, I stay in touch with some of my primary school teachers through social media. However, we only message occasionally because everyone is busy with work and family commitments.

建議: Give a direct answer stating specific ways the teacher helped you, with one or two concrete examples and clear linking words (e.g., 'for example', 'as a result'). Use correct nouns and verb forms (guidance, encouraged me).

範例: My favourite teacher helped me by giving clear guidance and boosting my confidence. For example, he reviewed my essays with detailed feedback, and as a result my writing improved and I felt more confident participating in class.

× He's a nice personality that can not tell my teacher but also alike as a friend.

✓ He's a nice person who is not only my teacher but also like a friend.

The original sentence misuses 'personality' and pronouns/relative clauses. Use 'person' not 'personality' when referring to someone, and 'who' for people. 'Can not tell my teacher' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'not only my teacher'. Use 'not only... but also' structure and 'like a friend' for similarity. Suggestion: use 'not only... but also' and 'who' for people.

× He always encouraged me to grow up and do good in every field of her life.

✓ He always encouraged me to grow and do well in every area of my life.

Pronoun 'her' is incorrect because the student is referring to themselves, so 'my' is needed. 'Grow up' is usually used for maturing; 'grow' or 'develop' fits better here. 'Do good' should be 'do well' (adverb modifies verb). 'Every field of her life' should be 'every area of my life.' Suggestion: ensure pronouns match the subject and use correct adverb forms.

× No, really I don't want to be a teacher, which is because it is a very responsible job as home.

✓ No, I don't really want to be a teacher because it is a very responsible job, like running a household.

The clause 'which is because' is incorrect; use 'because' to give a reason. 'As home' is ungrammatical; perhaps 'like running a household' or 'like being at home' depending on meaning. Also place adverb 'really' after subject for natural word order: 'I don't really want.' Suggestion: simplify the structure: 'I don't really want to be a teacher because...'.

× It wants a lot of hard work and patience.

✓ It requires a lot of hard work and patience.

'It wants' is unnatural when referring to requirements; use 'requires'. Pronoun 'it' is acceptable for 'the job', but verb choice matters. Suggestion: use verbs like 'requires' or 'needs' with 'a lot of'.

× So I have more interested in that, but I like.

✓ So I am more interested in other things, though I like teaching.

'Have more interested' is incorrect; use 'am more interested'. 'In that' is vague; 'in other things' clarifies contrast. The fragment 'but I like' is incomplete; specify what is liked. Suggestion: use correct form of 'be' with adjectives and complete the clause.

× Yes, there was many picture that I was being closed to in the past, but I think so Mr. Ali is my favorite one because he is was most close to me and he always advanced to do better in my in my worker.

✓ Yes, there were many people I was close to in the past, but I think Mr. Ali is my favorite because he was the closest to me and he always encouraged me to do better in my work.

Multiple issues: 'there was many picture' violates 'there be' with plural ('there were many pictures') and 'picture' is wrong — should be 'people'. 'I was being closed to' is wrong; use 'I was close to'. 'I think so Mr. Ali' is unnatural; remove 'so'. 'He is was most close' mixes tenses and forms; use past 'was the closest'. 'Advanced to do better' is wrong verb; use 'encouraged me to do better'. 'Worker' should be 'work'. Suggestion: use correct 'there were' for plural, choose correct nouns, and use simple past for past relationships.

× Yes, sometimes I can meet them on the social media.

✓ Yes, sometimes I can meet them on social media.

Use 'on social media' not 'on the social media'. The article 'the' is unnecessary. Suggestion: drop 'the' before 'social media'.

× Whenever I saw their profile I I can contact with them and in this day I I was attached with them because due to the busy schedule of daily life, everyone have no.

✓ Whenever I see their profiles I can contact them, but these days I am less in touch with them because, due to busy daily schedules, people are often unavailable.

Tense inconsistency: 'saw' should be 'see' for habitual action. Duplicate 'I I' removed. 'Contact with them' should be 'contact them' (no 'with'). 'In this day I was attached with them' is unclear; 'these days I am less in touch with them' expresses intended meaning. 'Everyone have no' is ungrammatical; replace with 'people are often unavailable' or 'everyone is busy'. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense for habits, avoid unnecessary prepositions, and use clear expressions for current frequency.

× I guess as well teacher is a personality that encourage to do a better in every field of life and they give us a positive guidelines on which we can do everything in a good way.

✓ I think a good teacher is a person who encourages students to do better in every area of life and gives us positive guidance so we can do things well.

'As well teacher is a personality' is awkward; 'I think a good teacher is a person' is clearer. 'Personality' misuse — use 'person'. Subject-verb agreement: 'encourage' should be 'encourages' when subject is 'a person', but here rephrase to 'who encourages students'. 'Encourage to do a better' is incorrect; use 'encourages students to do better'. 'They give us a positive guidelines' mixes plural 'they' with singular earlier and 'guidelines' plural; use 'gives us positive guidance' (uncountable) or 'gives us positive guidelines'. 'On which we can do everything in a good way' is clumsy; 'so we can do things well' is natural. Suggestion: keep subject consistent, match verb agreement, and choose clearer phrasing.