教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence naming the teacher, then give two specific, relevant details using linking words. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, pronouns) and avoid repetition. Keep it within 1–4 sentences.

範例: My favorite teacher is Abdul Badiq. He is well known in our city for teaching critical thinking and professional business practices, and his lessons have had a lasting impact on my life. Because of him I respect education more, so whenever he visits I make a point to see him.

建議: Answer directly, then give one or two clear reasons using linking words (because, so). Fix awkward phrasing and redundant sentences. Aim for natural vocabulary and a maximum of 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future because teaching allows me to share the knowledge and life experience I have gained. I could help students develop practical skills and critical thinking, so I believe it would be a rewarding career for me.

建議: Be specific about what you remember and use clear, grammatical sentences. Use linking words (for example, such as) when giving examples of lessons learned. Avoid vague phrases like “psychological fact” unless explained. Keep answers concise and focused.

範例: Yes, I still remember Mr Abdul Bariq. He taught me important life skills, such as how to communicate with others and how to read people’s expressions, which helped me in both studies and work. For example, his lessons made me more confident in group situations.

建議: Give a brief direct answer and one clear reason. Avoid filler words and repetition, and use past tense correctly when referring to childhood. Keep it to 1–2 sentences for clarity.

範例: No, I am not still in touch with my primary school teachers. I was very young then and do not remember them well, so I lost contact long ago.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence describing the help, then give one or two specific examples and use linking words (for example, because, so, as a result). Improve grammar and remove repetition about confidence/introversion.

範例: He helped me develop critical thinking and communication skills. For example, because of his lessons I became less introverted and more confident speaking to others, which improved my performance in class and in job interviews.

× My favorite teacher name is Abdul Badiq, who is well known in a personality in my city and I really like to admire that.

✓ My favorite teacher's name is Abdul Badiq; he is a well-known figure in my city, and I really admire him.

The sentence needs the possessive form 'teacher's name' (article error) and proper pronouns. 'a personality' is awkward; 'a well-known figure' is appropriate. Use 'he' not 'that' to refer to a person. Also join clauses with punctuation and use 'admire him.'

× He thought us lot of lesson that like a critical thinking like professional business practices and something that are unforgettable and my life and I really respect her.

✓ He taught us many lessons, such as critical thinking and professional business practices, which are unforgettable in my life, and I really respect him.

Use past tense 'taught' not 'thought' (verb form), 'many lessons' (plural quantifier), and relative clause 'which are unforgettable.' Pronoun should be 'him' not 'her.' Subject-verb agreement and correct verb forms are needed. Split into clearer clauses.

× Whenever he come, I will visit.

✓ Whenever he comes, I will visit him.

Use third person singular present 'comes' (subject-verb agreement) and include object pronoun 'him.' Also present simple for habitual actions.

× Yes, of course, if there is a chance to become a future, I will never miss because through teaching I can educate the people regarding every life experience or the knowledge that I get in my whole life.

✓ Yes, of course. If I have the chance to become a teacher in the future, I will not miss it because through teaching I can share the life experiences and knowledge I have gained.

Original sentence has awkward structure 'become a future' and redundant phrases. Corrected to 'become a teacher in the future' and use present perfect 'have gained' to show accumulated experience. Also use 'not miss it.'

× I will share the experiences to my students as well.

✓ I will share my experiences with my students as well.

Use correct preposition 'with' rather than 'to' and include 'my' for clarity.

× And I think it's a very good profession for people and I should.

✓ I think it is a very good profession, and I should become a teacher.

Sentence is incomplete ('I should' needs an object). Complete idea by adding 'become a teacher.' Keep tense consistent.

× Of course, I have a teacher that I still remember whose name is Abdul Bariq, and I really respect him because he is He taught us a lot of lessons of life that will be helpful in our academic or professional career, like meeting how to meet with people, and like how to analyze the expressions of other people.

✓ Of course, I have a teacher I still remember, named Abdul Bariq, and I really respect him because he taught us many life lessons that will be helpful in our academic and professional careers, such as how to meet and interact with people and how to analyze others' expressions.

Remove redundant pronoun usage and correct tense 'taught.' Use 'many life lessons' (quantifier), plural 'careers,' and idiomatic phrases 'how to meet and interact with people.' Use possessive 'others'' for 'other people.'

× These are the psychological fact that.

✓ These are psychological facts.

Use plural 'facts' and remove article 'the' since general statement; correct adjective-noun order. Original fragment was ungrammatical.

× Uh, no, I have not, I have not in touch with the primary school teacher because at that time I was so young and I don't know what was good and what was bad.

✓ No, I am not. I am not in touch with my primary school teachers because at that time I was very young and did not know what was good or bad.

Use present tense 'am not in touch' for current state, plural 'teachers' if referring to multiple, and past simple 'did not know' for past ignorance. Use 'very' instead of 'so' for formality and 'or' for choice.

× So they, even though I don't remember at that time, uh, school teacher, uh, only my parents now that, and I don't have much knowledge on that stage.

✓ So I do not remember my school teachers from that time; only my parents remember, and I did not have much knowledge at that stage.

Original is fragmented and unclear. Rephrase to clear subject 'I' and use past tense 'did not have' for past state. Clarify that parents remember.

× My favorite teacher helped me a lot in critical thinking like how to talk with people or communicate like I was when I was young.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me a lot with critical thinking, such as how to talk and communicate with people when I was young.

Use 'helped me with' plus noun 'critical thinking.' Reduce repetition of 'like' and correct clause placement 'when I was young.'

× I was so so introvert even though I have no confidence.

✓ I was very introverted and had little confidence.

Use adjective 'introverted' and past tense 'had' for past state. Avoid 'so so' which is informal and unclear.

× But after that learning from the life lessons, I know how to talk or communicate with the people and it's all because of my teachers who helped me to achieve this goal.

✓ But after learning those life lessons, I learned how to talk and communicate with people, and it is all because of my teachers who helped me achieve this goal.

Use 'after learning' not 'after that learning,' and keep past tense 'learned' for completed change. Use 'helped me achieve' (no 'to'). Use 'people' without 'the.'