教师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organise your response: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples with brief reasons. Reduce filler words (uh, umm) and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words (for example, also) and provide a specific detail about why each teacher is a favourite.

範例: Yes. I have several favourite teachers. For example, in secondary school my history teacher inspired me by telling vivid stories about the past, which made learning exciting. At university, my literature professor encouraged my writing and gave detailed feedback, which improved my essays.

建議: Give a clear, structured answer: state whether you want to be a teacher, then explain two concise reasons. Remove repetitions and unclear phrases (e.g. 'role mate'). Use precise vocabulary (rewarding, fulfilling, mentor) and linking words (because, so) to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future because it is a rewarding job. For example, I enjoy helping students learn and seeing their progress, and I would like to act as a mentor who supports their personal growth.

建議: Answer directly and add one specific memorable detail about a particular teacher. Avoid vague phrases like 'touches in my life' and reduce repetition. Use linking words (especially, for example) and give a concrete reason or memory that explains why you remember them.

範例: Yes, I still remember many teachers, especially my university tutor. For example, she stayed after class to discuss my research ideas and gave practical advice that shaped my academic goals.

建議: Make the answer fluent and precise: start with a clear yes/no, then explain how you keep in touch and add a brief reason about difficulty. Replace 'hard to touch them' with clearer expression (hard to contact them). Minimise filler words and use linking words (however, because).

範例: Yes, I am. I keep in contact with several primary school teachers through Facebook and Instagram. However, it is difficult to reach some of them because they are less active online.

建議: Provide a structured response: specify the teacher's role and give two concrete ways she helped (e.g. study strategies, feedback on research). Use clearer verbs and grammatical forms (helped me focus on my studies; taught me how to write research). Avoid filler words and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: She helped me in several practical ways during university. For instance, she taught me effective study techniques to stay focused and gave detailed feedback on my research drafts, which improved my academic writing and helped me achieve my goals.

× Actually being teacher is one of the best thing ever and I can't feel how beautiful uh, being a teacher for students, how and how, uh, they feel that you, you are a role mate for them and they uh, make you like an adult for them.

✓ Actually, being a teacher is one of the best things ever, and I can't describe how wonderful it is to be a teacher for students; they see you as a role model and treat you like an adult.

The sentence has singular/plural mismatch ('being teacher' should be 'being a teacher'), and 'one of the best thing' should be 'one of the best things' because 'one of' requires a plural noun. 'Role mate' is incorrect vocabulary; 'role model' is appropriate. The sentence also needs articles and clearer verbs. Suggestion: add 'a' before professions, use plural after 'one of the', and replace incorrect phrases with standard equivalents.

× For example, at the secondary school, and my favorite teacher was uh, the teacher of history, and at the university was the teacher of literature.

✓ For example, at secondary school my favorite teacher was the history teacher, and at university it was the literature teacher.

Unnecessary articles and awkward structure. Use simple present/past forms correctly: 'my favorite teacher was the history teacher' and include a subject 'it' for the second clause. Also remove 'the' before 'secondary school' and 'university' in general contexts. Suggestion: keep parallel structure and include appropriate subjects.

× Actually, I cannot, I can't forget my teachers because everyone of them, umm, has, uh, some, uh, touches in my life, especially at university.

✓ Actually, I cannot forget my teachers because every one of them has had some impact on my life, especially at university.

The phrase 'touches in my life' is incorrect; use 'had some impact on my life.' The present perfect 'has had' is appropriate to show past actions with present relevance. Also 'everyone of them' should be 'every one of them.' Suggestion: use 'impact' or 'influence' and the present perfect for lasting effects.

× Yes, umm, yes, uh, I am because, uh, due to the social media and uh, to the Facebook or Instagram and I'm in touch with umm, several teachers from my primary school, but actually most of them are umm, older, so it is hard to touch them.

✓ Yes, I am, because of social media like Facebook and Instagram, and I'm in touch with several teachers from my primary school, but most of them are older, so it is hard to contact them.

Use 'because of' or 'due to' correctly; 'due to' often follows a verb. 'The Facebook or Instagram' is incorrect; use 'Facebook and Instagram' or 'social media like Facebook and Instagram.' 'Hard to touch them' is wrong collocation; use 'contact them.' Suggestion: use correct prepositions and common collocations for contacting people.

× Umm, actually, uh, she was a good person to help me when I was at university and she helped me to focus in my studying and how to, umm, and to achieve my dream at university and how can I, uh, write my research.

✓ She was a helpful person who helped me when I was at university; she helped me focus on my studies, achieve my goals, and learn how to write my research.

Use gerund forms and correct prepositions: 'focus on my studies' rather than 'focus in my studying.' 'How can I write my research' is incorrect word order for reported ability; use 'learn how to write my research.' Also use 'helpful person who helped me' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'focus on' + noun, 'learn how to' + verb, and parallel structure for listed actions.

× Yes, it is more a dream job.

✓ Yes, it is more of a dream job.

Missing preposition 'of' in the expression 'more of a dream job.' The phrase 'more a dream job' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use 'more of a' when qualifying a noun with 'more.'

× ...they feel that you, you are a role mate for them and they uh, make you like an adult for them.

✓ ...they feel that you are a role model to them, and they treat you like an adult.

Redundant pronoun repetition 'you, you' should be a single 'you.' 'Role mate' is incorrect; use 'role model.' 'Make you like an adult for them' is awkward; use 'treat you like an adult.' Suggestion: avoid repetition and use standard collocations.

× For example, at the secondary school, and my favorite teacher was uh, the teacher of history, and at the university was the teacher of literature. So yeah.

✓ For example, at secondary school my favorite teacher was the history teacher, and at university it was the literature teacher.

Unnecessary definite articles 'the' before 'secondary school' and 'university' in general contexts. Use 'the history teacher' to specify subject teacher but omit 'the' before institutions when speaking generally. Suggestion: omit articles for institutions and maintain parallel clause structure.