整洁— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct small grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief reason or example. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "in order and organized" conveys same idea twice).

範例: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. For example, I always put my clothes and books in their proper place because being organized helps me focus and save time.

建議: Correct word choice and simplify sentence structure. Use one clear past routine statement then contrast with what changed, using linking words like 'but' or 'however'.

範例: I wasn't very tidy as a child, but this changed when I moved to the United States and had to live alone. Since then I started cleaning regularly and organizing my belongings.

建議: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Give a clear topic sentence about your method, then use linking words and one specific technique or routine. Avoid repetition and vague phrases.

範例: I keep my study space tidy by minimizing clutter and working on one task at a time. For example, I remove unnecessary items from my desk and use a to-do list to break tasks into small steps, so everything stays organized.

建議: Clarify and correct grammar; use a reason and an example. Replace awkward phrases like 'an organized tidy' with 'organized and tidy' and avoid repetition ('right now', 'multitasked').

範例: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary, especially today when people often multitask. Being organized helps reduce stress and makes it easier to switch between tasks, for example by keeping documents in labeled folders.

× I think this is one of the main characteristic of my personality.

✓ I think this is one of the main characteristics of my personality.

The noun 'characteristic' should be plural because it is modified by 'one of the,' which requires a plural noun ('one of the characteristics'). Use of plural ensures subject noun agrees with the quantifier. Suggestion: remember 'one of the' + plural noun (e.g., 'one of the reasons').

× When I was a child, I did not keep my room tight, but with time, especially when I moved to United States when I had to live alone, so I became more responsible to regularly clean my room and organize my stuff.

✓ When I was a child, I did not keep my room tidy, but over time, especially after I moved to the United States and had to live alone, I became more responsible and began to clean my room regularly and organize my stuff.

Multiple issues: 'tight' is the wrong adjective; 'tidy' is correct. Use 'over time' instead of 'with time' for natural phrasing. 'Moved to United States' needs the definite article 'the United States.' Remove redundant 'when' and 'so' and use correct verb forms: 'began to clean' and 'clean... regularly' for clarity. Suggestion: choose correct adjective 'tidy', include 'the' before country name, and simplify clause structure.

× First of all, don't have a lot of of stuffs and things to do in in one time.

✓ First of all, I don't have a lot of stuff or many things to do at one time.

Errors: double 'of', incorrect plural 'stuffs' (uncountable 'stuff'), and incorrect preposition 'in one time' (use 'at one time'). Also 'a lot of' requires correct noun form ('a lot of stuff' or 'many things'). Suggestion: use 'stuff' as uncountable and 'many' for countable nouns; use 'at one time' to indicate simultaneous actions.

× So I try to and cut it to little bit the idea steps or things.

✓ So I try to break tasks into smaller steps.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and wordy. 'Try to and cut it to little bit the idea steps or things' is confused. Use concise structure: 'try to break tasks into smaller steps' (verb 'break' + object 'tasks' + prepositional phrase 'into smaller steps'). Suggestion: plan clear, simple phrasing and use 'smaller' to modify 'steps'.

× So because of that I'm organized.

✓ Because of that, I'm more organized.

Add 'more' to indicate comparative improvement and include comma after introductory phrase. Suggestion: use comparative 'more organized' when comparing past and present state.

× Yes, it's necessary, especially nowadays because right now people become more multitasked or multitaskers, so they should be an organized tidy to do their their work.

✓ Yes, it's necessary, especially nowadays because people are more multitasking, so they should be organized to do their work.

Problems: 'become more multitasked' is incorrect—use 'people are more multitasking' or 'people have more tasks.' 'Multitaskers' is unnecessary. 'an organized tidy' is ungrammatical; use 'organized' as an adjective. Remove duplicate 'their'. Suggestion: use 'people are more multitasking' or 'people have more tasks', and use 'organized' without 'tidy' as a noun.