整洁— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Remove the filler word “But” at the start, shorten slightly to avoid redundancy, and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details with linking words for coherence.

範例: Yes, I do. I take care of my belongings because keeping them clean helps them last longer. For example, I dust regularly and store my electronic devices in protective cases, and I always clean screens with a soft cloth to avoid scratches.

建議: Avoid vague cultural phrase that may sound awkward; give a brief explanation and use a linking word to connect reasoning and actions. Keep it concise and natural.

範例: Yes, I did. My grandmother taught me that cleanliness is very important, so I always made my bed and put my toys away every evening to keep my room tidy.

建議: Clarify and correct unclear phrasing ("I'd in fact the work surfaces") and avoid mixing personal study space with clinical instructions unless relevant. Use linking words to show sequence and keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: I arrive early to put away scattered items and dust all surfaces. Then I wipe the work surfaces and, if I work with others, I ask them to sanitize their hands. Finally, I organize my desk at the end of the day so everything is ready for the next appointment.

建議: Correct small vocabulary mistakes ("close" → "clean"?), use linking words to connect benefits, and give a concise third supporting point or brief example to strengthen the answer.

範例: Yes, I think it is necessary. Being tidy improves both physical hygiene and mental well-being because a clean environment reduces stress and helps you concentrate. For example, when my desk is organised I can start work quickly and feel less anxious.

× My grandmother insisted that I keep my room tidy because in our family we believe that cleanliness is next to Goddess.

✓ My grandmother insisted that I keep my room tidy because in our family we believe that cleanliness is next to a goddess.

The phrase 'next to Goddess' is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'goddess.' In English idiom the expression is 'cleanliness is next to godliness' or if using 'goddess' it requires an article. Use 'a goddess' to make the noun countable and grammatically correct; better yet, use the common idiom 'cleanliness is next to godliness.'

× Then I'd in fact the work surfaces and ask every patient to sanitize their hands to prevent contamination.

✓ Then I'd, in fact, wipe the work surfaces and ask every patient to sanitize their hands to prevent contamination.

The original sentence omits a main verb after the contraction 'I'd' (I would). The verb 'wipe' (base form) is needed to complete the clause. 'In fact' should be set off by commas. Use 'wipe' because it correctly describes cleaning surfaces and fits the conditional/modal structure 'I would.'

× Definitely being tidy is important for both physical and mental well-being.

✓ Definitely, being tidy is important for both physical and mental well-being.

A small punctuation/adverb placement issue: 'Definitely' as a sentence adverb should be followed by a comma when placed at the beginning for clarity. This improves natural rhythm and readability; the grammatical category is adverb placement.

× Also, when you're close and belongings are organised, you are more presentable and ready to leave house or start work at any time.

✓ Also, when your clothes and belongings are organised, you are more presentable and ready to leave the house or start work at any time.

Several errors: 'close' is a typo for 'clothes'; 'leave house' lacks the definite article 'the' before 'house.' Correct preposition/article usage requires 'leave the house.' Fixing the noun to 'clothes' and adding 'the' makes the sentence grammatical and clear.