整洁— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with repetition and minor grammar errors. Start with one clear topic sentence, avoid repeating words (e.g., “when when”), and correct word order in phrases like “I can easily find them” instead of “I easily can see them.” Add one brief specific example to strengthen the answer. Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I’m quite organized. I like to keep my belongings neatly arranged so I can easily find them. For example, I label boxes and put similar items together, which saves me time when I’m looking for something.

建議: Provide a clearer topic sentence that directly answers the past habit question (use past tense) and avoid repeating similar phrases. Explain briefly why you did so, using linking words such as “because” or “so.” Make details slightly more specific (e.g., how you arranged clothes).

範例: When I was a child I tried to keep my area tidy even though I shared a room with my sisters. For example, I folded my clothes and used separate shelves for my books, because having my things organized helped me study and relax.

建議: Make the sentence structure smoother and remove filler phrases. Use clear linking words like “so that” or “therefore” and correct small errors (“for the for other time” → “for the next time”). Add one concrete method or tool you use to be specific.

範例: I tidy my study area after each session by putting books and stationery back in their places so that when I study next time everything is ready. For example, I use a pen holder and a small shelf for notes to keep the desk clear.

建議: Avoid long, repetitive phrases and fix grammar (use “being a tidy and organized person” and “it helps because your things are organized, so are your thoughts”). Make the answer more concise and give one specific result of being tidy (e.g., saves time, reduces stress).

範例: Yes, I believe being a tidy and organized person is important because when your things are in order, your mind feels clearer and you can work more efficiently. For instance, I save time every morning because I know exactly where my clothes and study materials are.

× I want to keep my things in a neat and tidy way.

✓ I want to keep my things neat and tidy.

The original uses an unnecessary prepositional phrase 'in a neat and tidy way.' This is not a present participle error per se but fits better corrected by using adjectives 'neat and tidy' after the object. Suggest using concise adjective phrase to describe 'things'.

× When when I look for them, I easily can see them and know where they are placed.

✓ When I look for them, I can easily see them and know where they are placed.

There is a repetition 'When when' and awkward adverb placement 'easily can see'. Place modal + adverb as 'can easily' for natural English. Also keep present simple tense 'look' and 'know' consistent.

× Even though I don't have my own room, I share it with my sisters.

✓ Even though I don't have my own room, I share it with my sister.

If the student shares with one sister use singular 'sister'; if multiple sisters were intended keep plural. This suggestion assumes one; ensure noun number matches reality. No tense change needed.

× I keep my clothes and my closet well arranged and my stuff in a tidy way because it helps.

✓ I keep my clothes and closet well organized and my stuff tidy because it helps.

Use 'organized' (adjective) rather than 'well arranged' for natural phrasing and simplify 'in a tidy way' to 'tidy'. This fixes awkward adjective/adverb usage and results in clearer present simple statements.

× I keep my space tidy by, for example, after studying I replace the things where they usually belong so that when I study for the for other time, my place is organized and I'm ready to study.

✓ For example, after studying I put things back where they belong so that when I study next time my place is organized and I'm ready to work.

Original has awkward structure and repetition 'for the for other time'. Use 'put things back' (present simple) and 'next time' for future reference within that context. Also move 'for example' to sentence initial position for clarity and replace 'study' repetition with 'work' for variety.

× Yes, I think being tidy and organized person is very necessary because it helps in a way that, for example your things are organized, so also your thoughts are organized and it is, it's not like all over the place and it keeps you become more efficient.

✓ Yes, I think being a tidy and organized person is very important because, for example, if your things are organized your thoughts are too; things are not all over the place and you become more efficient.

Missing article before 'tidy and organized person' — use 'a'. 'Necessary' is acceptable but 'important' is more natural here. Remove redundant fragments and correct 'it keeps you become' to 'you become'. Also add commas for clarity and replace 'so also your thoughts are organized' with clearer clause 'your thoughts are too'.