整洁— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), correct word choice (e.g., 'tightness' is incorrect), and use one or two supporting reasons with linking words. Aim for natural phrases like 'I prefer to keep things tidy because it helps me relax and be prepared for guests.'

範例: I do like to keep things tidy because it helps me feel more relaxed and focused. For example, when my desk is organized, I can find important documents quickly, so I'm prepared if friends or colleagues drop by.

建議: Answer directly with a clear past-tense statement, avoid fillers, and correct grammar (e.g., 'used to', 'a mess'). Provide one brief specific detail or a short reason to enrich the answer using a linking word.

範例: No, I didn't use to keep my room tidy when I was a child. My clothes and toys were often all over the floor, so my parents had to remind me to clean up after playing.

建議: Give a clear, structured routine using correct verb forms and linking words. Say what you do first and why, and mention one specific habit or tool you use to maintain tidiness. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

範例: When I start working, I set out only the items I need, such as a pen, notebook, and laptop. Then I tidy away any unrelated items in a drawer, which helps me keep the desk clutter-free throughout the afternoon.

建議: Provide a concise opinion with a clear reason and correct grammar. Avoid vague or confusing phrasing; replace fillers and unclear comparisons with a specific result of being tidy (e.g., efficiency, less stress). Use one linking word to connect opinion and reason.

範例: Yes, I think it's necessary to be tidy because it makes daily life more efficient and reduces stress. For instance, when my things are organized, I spend less time searching for items and can complete tasks faster.

× Yes, I really do because for me, uh, to keep things tidy around me, it's special just to feel more relaxed and uh, tightness.

✓ Yes, I really do because for me, keeping things tidy around me makes me feel more relaxed and less tense.

Original uses awkward phrasing and incorrect preposition 'around me' is acceptable but sentence structure is wrong. Replaced 'to keep things tidy around me, it's special just to feel more relaxed and uh, tightness' with 'keeping things tidy around me makes me feel more relaxed and less tense.' This corrects verb form (use of gerund for general statement) and replaces 'tightness' (noun) with 'less tense' (adjective phrase) which fits context.

× Also, it can help you from the like unexpected situations such as when it comes guests or moreover.

✓ Also, it can help you in unexpected situations, for example when guests arrive.

Original misuses 'help you from' and 'when it comes guests' and adds unnecessary filler 'moreover.' Use 'help you in' for situations and 'when guests arrive' for correct verb and word order. Removed 'the like' and 'moreover' to make the sentence natural and concise.

× Now, when I was a child, I didn't even care about that.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't care about that.

The adverb 'Now' is inappropriate when referring to childhood past. Removing 'Now' keeps correct past tense narrative. The rest uses correct past simple 'didn't care.'

× Uh, my clothes and the toys were keeping an mess all the time.

✓ Uh, my clothes and toys were a mess all the time.

Original has wrong article 'an' before 'mess' and incorrect progressive 'were keeping' which is unnatural. Use 'were a mess' to describe a state. Also drop 'the' before 'toys' unless referring to specific toys.

× I didn't want to clean up.

✓ I didn't want to clean up.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It correctly uses past simple negative to describe past preference.

× Firstly, when I start to working or studying I just put some significant things that I use, for example pen or paper and after that when it comes maybe to to afternoon it just keeps on that place.

✓ Firstly, when I start working or studying, I put the things I need, for example a pen or paper, and later in the afternoon they stay in that place.

Changed 'start to working' to correct form 'start working' (verb + -ing). Replaced 'some significant things that I use' with 'the things I need' for naturalness, added articles 'a pen' and corrected 'when it comes maybe to to afternoon' to 'later in the afternoon.' Replaced 'it just keeps on that place' with 'they stay in that place' to match plural subject and correct verb.

× Yes, I do because it really can, uh, like same you as a tidy person that can, uh, deal with it's mess and uh, I think it's really important just to keep your things tidy.

✓ Yes, I do because it can make you, as a tidy person, better able to deal with a mess, and I think it's really important to keep your things tidy.

Original has incorrect pronoun and possessive usage: 'like same you' is incorrect and 'it's mess' uses contraction 'it's' (it is) instead of possessive 'its' or better 'a mess.' Revised to 'make you... better able to deal with a mess' and 'to keep your things tidy.' Also improved word order and removed filler 'uh' and 'like.'